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Metool Bard

A weaver of tales who enjoys a good story. What more is there to say, really?


This story is a sequel to My Little Investigations: The Gemstone Godfather

My name is Twilight Sparkle. I am the Princess of Friendship; one of the rulers of Equestria. There was once a time when I was called the Mysterious Mare-Do-Well. I used this identity briefly to teach my friend Rainbow Dash a lesson in humility. Several moons after that incident, somepony else has taken up the mantle, using it to protect ponies who are in peril. Very few ponies know the true nature of this enigmatic mare; I among them. The only thing known for certain is that she is a true hero.

But now, she has gone mad. Or at least, that's what we're supposed to believe after she allegedly crashed this year's Grand Galloping Gala. Personally, I'm not buying it. Like I said, I know this Mare-Do-Well. She would never do something like this. And as if to confirm my suspicions, there was a note left at the crime scene stating that an impostor is on the loose in one of four locations. Thankfully, I'm not alone in thinking this. My friends support me, and three ponies who have worked with Mare-Do-Well in the past agree that something is amiss.

This is their story as much as it is my own. Mare-Do-Well is our friend, and we have to be there for her just as she's been there for us. Whether she's in the Griffon Kingdom, Manehattan, the Mewlun Mountains, or here in Canterlot, we will find her and unmask her doppelgänger. Come along, Spike! The game is afoot!

The story we're about to tell you is real, although some details are ambiguous in nature. To emphasize this point, no names have been changed. It is also my duty to inform you that this tale contains subject matter that may be inappropriate for younger audiences. Viewer's discretion is strongly advised.

((Case 4 of the Mare-Do-Well Files. It's highly recommended that you read the other cases first; otherwise you will get confused.))

POV Codex:

T: Twilight Sparkle
S: Spitfire
O: Octavia
A: Amethyst Star
M: Multiple POVs in the same chapter

Chapters (51)
Comments ( 234 )

FIRST COMMENT BITCHES!!!!!:rainbowwild::rainbowwild::rainbowwild: Haha, that wasn't my point, but great first chapter and I look forward to reading more this story. Good luck.

Wait...I'm worried about one thing:
If this is a multi-POV story, is this the end of the MLI series?

4448263 Indeed, this is the last case of the Mare-Do-Well Files. Don't worry, though. I'll make sure it ends on a strong note.

That being said, the possibility of another MLI series is not out of the question. :raritywink:

AWESOME, please continue dude!

WOO UPDATE. Forming up to be really awesome!

Woo! The story rolls onward!
I didn't see any spelling errors since it all flowed nicely and stuff.

Waiting in anticipation. :pinkiesmile:

I'm calling it right now:
Kibitz has nothing to do with the attack.

Woosh. Lots of places to look in!

Awesome as ever!

Mochi, Mimi, and Orph. i couldnt stop laughing. the cat grumps would be proud

Surely, he can't be that bad.

Famous last words.

The mystery gets more complicated! :pinkiesmile:

someone else is going to deal with the same crap her teams's dealing with now aren't they?

Woo. Getting more dangerous.

Whoever preserved the crime scene needs to learn how to forensics.
You don't lay down a chalk outline. That contaminates the scene.

4574449 Oh. Whoops. Thanks for catching that. I'll just go and fix it now. :twilightblush:

Wait, that was a mistake on your part? :rainbowhuh:
I thought that was something you did as either a clue or a red herring.

4574481 Heh, yeah. That was just an oversight on my part. Although I find it rather interesting that you thought it was intentional. I have to wonder what that says about my writing. :derpytongue2:

Two major players in two previous cases, bumped off?
One seriously injured?
I'm starting to wonder if Silenus, Georgette and Gypsy Moth are somehow involved in this.

I have to feel sorry for Coco Pommel having to deal with Blueblood being, well, Blueblood. Also, this story deserves much more attention. I'm loving the suspense, so keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

Clever use of the spoiler tags. I'm also curious as to who the imposter is and if the chocolate is a clue of some sort. Either way, great chapter as usual!

Woo I say that lady is suspicious but I'm not sure.

Great chapter anywho.

I'm loving the story so far! I have noticed a couple of things though;

Wonderbolts, let's started looking for evidence.


As it stands, it is indeed a clue, but I have no idea what it...

Instead of using a triple-dot (...) for interruptions, try using dashes (--).

You seem to use commas in place of pauses in conversation, I suggest using a triple-dot (...).

Still, you're doing a great job :pinkiehappy:

4623179 Thank you for the advice. I'll be sure to apply it where applicable. :twilightsheepish:

Honestly, though, I'm a bit skeptical about using ellipses in the context you're talking about. The way I've been taught is that ellipses are used to show that a sentence wasn't finished, not to denote a pause. I feel like if I did that, someone else will come around and say that I'm misusing ellipses. Grammar is so confusing sometimes. :applejackconfused:

Otherwise, I'm glad you're enjoying this little tale thus far. :twilightsmile:

4623249 Grammar is a tricky thing, isn't it? Taken from Wikipedia:

Depending on their context and placement in a sentence, ellipses can also indicate an unfinished thought, a leading statement, a slight pause, and a nervous or awkward silence.

You learn something new every day ;)
Looking forward to the next chapter!

4623280 Perhaps so, but I'm still rather skeptical. After all, I always got the impression that ellipses were meant for longer pauses (which is why you suggested replacing the ellipses with dashes in sentences where a character is interrupted). The pauses I portray with the commas barely last a second, so I don't know if it warrants an ellipse. I dunno if this makes any sense to you; my brain is very oddly wired. :derpytongue2:

4623331 I do see where you're coming from. It's fine to me really, but I had to stop and figure out why there was a comma after the first word of a sentence :applejackunsure:

"W-well, what should I call her then?" asked Blueblood. "Peasant?"
"That's even worse."
"That one's not even accurate!"
Kibitz sighed. "I suppose that'll have to do."

Princess Luna, is that you?

Soo.... When's the next chapter? I'm dying here! I just read the last three stories in this series today and now I need more! :raritydespair:

4629031 Patience, my friend. I've been updating as often as possible given my RL schedule. The next chapter will be up soon enough. :raritywink:

Woo split up and search for clues!

Well this update was... Unexpected! :trollestia:
Great work as usual. The crayon drawing was a nice, comedic touch.

Very interesting. I'm eager to see where this goes from here. :twilightsmile:

"I'm doing a lot of that, Tavi," said Vinyl. "And I think that this über-sensative flatfoot can go-"

A small typo here. It should be "sensitive". Aside from that small hiccup, another great chapter. You write so well and have me hooked. :twilightsmile:

4694191 Whoops! Thanks for catching that, mate. :twilightblush:

4694250 No problem. Glad I could help.

This is getting exciting! :pinkiehappy:
I eagerly await the next update!

Comment posted by Velvet-Fresh deleted Jul 21st, 2014

HOLD IT! Twilight already has a objection theme~ :pinkiehappy:

4731280 Heh, yeah. Her Objection theme should probably be the same as in the fan game, huh? :twilightsheepish:

Nice find there, mate. :twilightsmile:

"Okay first off, rude. Second, you're a moron if you think this is gonna fly."

That made me laugh out loud. :rainbowlaugh:
Great chapter as usual! :twilightsmile:

I was kind of hoping they did get arrested just for the reaction Shamus has when Twilight shows up.

Woo the mysteries slowly come together! Awesome :pinkiesmile:

So does that mean we might see Nightmare Coco? :pinkiegasp:
Great chapter. You've really caught my attention!

Hooray for incorporating the official comic!

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