The phrase "I'm your wing" and variations thereof has been used by pegasi since pre-unification times; particularly those that serve in the military. It means: "I've got your back no matter what." Nowadays, few pegasi rally that cry around like the Wonderbolts do. And no Wonderbolt rallies that cry around quite like Misty Fly does.
Whether she's guiding her partner through a difficult maneuver or helping her comrades overcome personal anxieties, Misty Fly is a pony who puts her team first. Her dedication to being a team player above and beyond the call of duty has earned her nicknames such as "The Ideal Wingpony" and "The Wonderbolts' Unofficial Shrink." She considers these nicknames to be badges of honor, and she does her best to live up to them.
But when a stray thunderbolt puts her out of commission, her self-confidence is shaken. She feels as though she let her team (and by extension, Spitfire) down. And while the pony she admires most is going through a rough patch, she's confined to a bed and unable to do anything about it. For once, she feels weak. For once, she feels useless. For once, she needs somepony to be her wing.
Takes place during the events of My Little Investigations: Wonderbolts Under Fire, but has no major spoilers. Rated Teen for some language and suggestive imagery.
Took a scan to your story and found "Misty Fly thought to herself", which is something that I did on an earlier criticism while researching.
Get rid of unnecessary tags. Be wary of tags like "he thought" and "he wondered". Or even worse: "he thought to himself" (who else would he be thinking to?)
Might want to give that a little read, and if you want me to do a First Impression Critique to catch anything else, just ask.
4129513 Hmm. I can see why "he thought to himself" might sound redundant, but some thoughts are not conducive to simply describing the scene (such as Misty Fly's thoughts above). I honestly don't have a problem with a character having a brief inner monologue like this every once in a while; it doesn't pull me out of the story at all. But, that's just my opinion.
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I added that because I agreed with the original author of the article (in the link) because it really helps in clearing bumpy writing. It's not required to fix this, but I myself would recommend it, since it's much clearer to a general audience of readers as well as myself. Since you don't have a problem with it, you don't have to fix it, but I was just adding little information just to make sure that you knew of a better way to approach it.
4129619 Ah. Fair enough. Thanks.
And yes, a first impressions critique would be nice. I take any chance I get to make my stories stronger.
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Alright, but it may take a while.
Finished a 2200 word critique here.
Would had finished it earlier if I didn't have two projects due on two different days, of which had to be right next to each other.
This story is criminally under-read. The conflict and the characters feel real and resonant. Fantastic work!
This story needs more love. I really enjoyed it and liked how you handled Misty Fly's character.
4580618 Thanks. Misty Fly is a character I really wanted to explore ever since I fleshed out the Wonderbolts in my previous story, Wonderbolts Under Fire. I'm glad you enjoyed my interpretation of her.
I really enjoyed this story, along with "Spitfire Stumbles" and am currently in the midst of reading "Wonderbolts Under Fire". I guess I've been in a Wonderbolts mood lately since all summer long I've been writing a story about Scootaloo going to the Wonderbolt Academy (link). Still, it's enjoyable and I like how you handle the characters in your stories.
4890952 Thank you very much. I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying my work.
I would say that is what misty fly would do