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I will get the last part done soon, but the AI has limits on how many questions I can ask at one time. I haven't read your story, but if you look at the AI Reviews group, you will see that you have a very good story and I hope that you find the motivation to finish it.

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I appreciate the strong feedbacks. It was well analyzed and alot easier for my flaws to be pointed out. There were some parts I get and some I didn't know, over all they were all helpful. I'll work on the current arcs one chapter at a time. So again thank you for the feed backs.

The first of three reviews is ready here.

The second of three reviews is ready here.

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I didn't realize you made a long and detailed feedback (which to me is new and much appreciated) I read through it and I'll explain/respond to it as reasonably/smart as I can.

It's plain from the start that English is not your primary language, and that's reasonably fine. A lot of native speakers themselves do not even have a good grasp English, which goes to show how difficult it is to learn. And in fan fiction, people tend to be forgiving so long as the story is good. But while I do commend you for your great efforts in writing a story not in your native tongue, it's still going to drag down on the quality of your writing anyway. And the only way to fix this is to get better with English eventually.

I said before that my writing skills are much less impressive than I can picture. And I do get back to it and see the mistakes and slowly revised it (as I already did at the revised chapters on arc 1). However, given my free time to rewrite/learn new words, has been reduced. (aside from IRL) I also need to be in my mood to try to at least change some words.

Next is your formatting and punctuations, and needless to say, you've made a lot of peculiar choices for the 1st two arcs. Many weird double spaces, inconsistent tense, overuse of ellipses, missing commas, misspellings, and most strange of all, quoting the prose writing instead of the dialog. These formatting issues are lessened somewhat in the 3rd arc, but the problems remain.

I figured I did less of it from arc 1, but I guess I can look it up again after finishing this arc and it's nice there are at least some improvements on this one.

I self-consciously know my skills are not as good as good writers and I'm not gonna lie on it. As I said again, the time and mood I need to write these had become less, and the opportunity to improve them in a faster pace is not going to happen anytime soon. Regardless my effort still stands as I had this OC around since the year I joined the fandom (2011) and am proud of it despite its recolor flaws (hence the first arc explaining it as a lore). Though maybe just maybe I can get a prof reader around here that I can fully trust and or can be a good friend, I will consider working on it more. Again I appreciate the long feedback and the examples you place, I think I got the idea. It's only a matter of how I can think of words to use.

There's one thing I need to ask a favor, would you mind also sending this feedback to my profile comments? there I can at least look back on your feedback more.

Thank you for the follow!!