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Sequel To Somepony Special

Everything seemed perfect for you. Good friends, Amazing parents, And of course the filly you loved.
Scootaloo. But what happens when other pony's don't approve of your relationship? When you thought things were great, Your luck just might change. One small change could ruin life.

If you have not read my last story "somepony special" I advise you to read it before this. Or things some things will not make sense. Constructive criticism is wanted. If this gets good feedback then i will continue this! I hope you enjoy! Editing coming soon!

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 95 )

some spelling errors and her eyes are purple other than that can't wait to read more!

Awesome can't wait to see what happens:pinkiehappy:

Awesome! I agree with Sledge on the spelling and errors but other than that its not that bad of a chapter.

great stroy so happy there is a sequel. but since when are scootaloo's eyes blue:rainbowhuh:

Please, I need moar!:raritydespair: Oh, and I'm loving this story, keep it up!:scootangel:

I agree with all of them! Both the spelling errors that need to be corrected and the urge to read more.

So with that said, MOAR PLEASE!!!

I loved the first story, and I'm already loving this one. Also, I heard that you need and editor, I could edit for you.

okay, it was well written before, but this chapter has so many mistakes that I can't read it, I got to the second paragraph of the 'present' section and I have no clue as to what's going on in the story
it was easier to read and follow after that though, Scootaloo's pov is a bit difficult. It's good that you're finding someone to edit, if I had time this weekend I'd offer as well but I'm busy so I will read it again after it's been edited and give a thought or two about it. It's still good work though, keep writing

YEEEEEA, HE CANT UNDERSTAND OUR LOOOVE, HE JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND, pretty nice, i like it :pinkiesmile:

Worst chapter? I thought it was pretty good.
It's kind of expected that the story's going to start a little slow. Most stories do

Yay! A new chapter! :yay:

It really gets better when there's a few others butting in a relationship. Also, why does this seem so nostalgic?

Anyway, great chapter! Pacing's kinda normal and the conflicts are definitely normal. However, the sound effects as dialogue in bold letters are quite odd and sometimes get mixed up from the characters' dialogue. Spelling, punctualization and grammar are always what everyone finds wrong easily, so always be careful with it.

I'm hoping you'll take out these weeds once you edit it. Nobody wants a flawed harvest, right?

not many grammatical or spelling misakes but if you need any one to help edit i'd be happy to help

Too bad her father is a prick. But I guess I can understand some portion of his reasoning, even though I have yet to THOROUGHLY pass puberty. I would at least want to meet the person once. But still, very, very rash on his part. Scoot best pone

:pinkiegasp: Is Sweetie Belle gonna end up causing a conflict in our relationship? If so, then I would love to find out what happens next.:pinkiehappy:

Oh when the crusaders and rarity find out Things are going to happen.

Sweetie Belle...you'll cry more times, than this one...:facehoof:

If me in this story find out what she done, I'll never be with her:twilightangry2:

I'm more angry at Scootaloo's father than Sweetie Beele. Yes Sweetie did a terrible thing out of jealousy, but what kind of father hits a young boy... I'm starting to think he's an abusive no good parent

It really excites me to see two girls, or fillies in this case, fighting over the one person they like. It's a normal part of school life, so I've been told. Plus, it made the story more interesting. Not only Scootaloo is having conflicts, many more are affected like Sweetie and Scootaloo's father. Apple Bloom is quite happy as of now, seeing her best friend dating somepony.

Will you be able to see Scootaloo happy again? Will Sweetie Belle get what she wants? Will Apple Bloom find a colt of her own? No one knows.

So tune in next time!

Oh DAMN! Sweetie I liked you and now you did this! That's it I'm going soup Nazi on you!

NO FRIENDSHIP FOR YOU!!!

Scootaloo's dad is a dick fart. But the story is good. :pinkiesmile:

2505892:unsuresweetie: im sorry. I didnt mean too. Be my friend again?

Overall great chapter. Its getting very intense. :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Gammer14 deleted Apr 30th, 2013

Sweetie Beele doesn't even realize how badly she messed up...
Also Scootaloo once again has an abusive father... I feel like this has been done a little too often

Comment posted by RainbowXFlutters deleted Apr 30th, 2013

HOLY SLAVEY BATMAN THAT WAS AMAZING!!!!! Keep writing this story. (if only i had a tardus...)

That...that evil pony must DIE!!:flutterrage: Hope some pony notices what's going on and does something about it.:eeyup:

Please tell me this story turns around for the better at the end... o-o Cause that was completely dreadful.

It looks like Sweetie had a shallow friendship with Scootaloo. Not only that, Scoots has an abusive dick of a father. Apple Bloom seems to be misunderstood, but hey, next chapter's different, right? Right?

Why does Scootaloo have to be hurt all the time?!

WHOOOOO THE ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE IS NEEDED!!!

Dear scootaloos father: AGHM OK LISTEN UP YOU MAJOR WAST OF TIME AND SPACE I HOPE YOU DIE IN HELL FOR WHAT YOU DID TO YOUR DAUGHTER AND THAT WILL BE EVER MORE BETTER THAN THE FATE YOU FACE IF I FIND YOU! YOU SON OF A DEVIL SEED EVERYBODY HATE'S YOU AND JUST TO PROVE IT LET'S MAKE AN ANNOUNCEMENT ABOUT! YEAH THEN YOU 'LL FEEL LIKE SHIT AND AFTER THAT I'M GOING TO TACKLE YOU TO THE FLOOR AND SHOOT EACH AND EVERY ONE OF YOUR HOOF'S UNTIL YOU BEG FOR ME TO STOP THE I'M GOING TO TAKE MEDAL RED HOT BURNING POLE OF RE-BARBE AND STICK IT INTO EACH AND EVERY ONE OF THOSE BULLET HOLE'S UNTIL I'M SATICFIED THEN COUNTENUASLY PUNCH YOU IN THE MOTHERBUCKING FACE UNTIL YOU BEG FOR EVEN MORE MERCY YOU ARE A WAST OF ATOM'S,DNA,AND SPACE YOU DIRTBAG I DESPISE OF YOU sincerly coldrunner aka chase aka balefire aka chase have a nice day! :raritywink::trollestia::pinkiehappy:

ok who laughed at that? (dear auther great chapter and everything keep up the good work mate! the thing above for SCOOT'S FATHER is not to be taken serisuly though just for laugh's)

Well damn didn't expect that I thought sweetie was in love with scoots.

A little too fast-paced, but I understood everything so it's all good.
Poor Apple Bloom, she uncovered an entire web of secrets in half a day, I give her credit for being to take everything in without her head exploding

“We soon will be more then friends,” she thought to herself.

How can you know her thoughts in 2nd person POV?

The chapter's really good in my opinion. I gasped at some parts, and some I read aloud their dialogue. Speaking of dialogue, reading it aloud felt right, considering their character traits. Sweetie's personality was unique when she's jealous. I like it! I can see why she's related with her sister :raritywink:.

Pacing was a wee bit fast for me. 3000+ words in a chapter is like a normal thing for me, but what you wrote made it feel like 2000+. However, I wouldn't mind with that pacing, since the drama's still there.

Anyway, I'll be expecting the next chapter. :rainbowkiss:

Still cruel but still following for the ending

Anyone that has watched Higurashi No Naku Koro Ni will feel a major case of deja vu after reading this.

2592426 i cant even pronounce that let alone even know what it is

Too damn short. Just top damn short.

But good chapter.

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