(2nd Person Story)
You x Scootaloo
Sequel: Changing hope.
You have been living in Ponyville for a few weeks now. You never really had someone called you a 'friend' in your life, and since your mum and dad were always working you were usually alone. You were mostly lonely all the time but you were used to it. But you thought something was missing. Something that you have never felt before.
That all ends when you meet a Pegasus is willing to be your friend, Maybe even more then a friend..
This is my very first fanfic ever, i hope you enjoy, constructive criticism is helpful :) Follow me for updates on this story, Please tell me if this story was good or bad!
Chapters (11)
Fave before read.
EDIT: Just read it. A weird writing style and a few grammer and spelling errors. But a story with potential nontheless
faved
This might just be me but isn't it supose to be OC tag not Other...I could be wrong. Liked anyway
most interesting, would like to see more of this here story.
1441357 My mistake, thank you
A good chapter. But why was it all in italics?
Why is mine in italics? I didn't use the italic button!
woah guys, this is, wow, freaky!! but i enjoyed this chapter.
have some derpy for you story.
"You always fought it was beautiful." I believe you mean thought.
While there are issues there is nothing sever beyond a need for a simple proofreading.
For a first fic you aren't doing so badly.
I'd advise checking your chapters in the site editor before making them public, that way you can avoid the italics issues you've had here.
Question, why do you put dialogue in italics? Personally I save italics for things like ship names and thought dialogue.
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Thank you
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I think i fixed it :3 thank you for your feedback too
Not bad. Its quite intresting, I'd like to see where this is going.
I want to read the third chapter but the lack of proper editting is aggrivating me...
There is few grammar errors like "you then slowly tried to get onto your hooves" instead of "then you slowly tried to get...."Apart from that it is great story
I seem to find good stories a bit late. It gets annoying. Anyway what I was commenting about: OH GOD THE ERRORS.
First off you capitalize names, add commas in their respective places, and place periods at the end of a sentence. That is all.
....good now get back to writing... 'cracks whip'
Any idea whats updating with this story because I have done everything to make it stop saying updated.
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Some errors I've been fixing in the previous chapters. My apologies.
1800317 Its cool. BTW you like my story? seeing as you faved it... no really any suggestions on it?
(Joke) Alt. Title: Scootayou
Also, judging from the description, "living" needs to be uppercase, yet "Scootaloo" can be left lowercase. Huh.
New chapter yay. I can edit them for you.
d'awwww
I'll also volunteer to edit these chapters.
Nice.
1853175>>1859113 Why not we can all edit!
>> Starknight619 Why not
Awsome gonna read this later been looking forward to this
I like the story keep it up
Now her is a mustach
this chapter made me sad but great none the less
Sad face.
when do you think the rest will be up? I like the story.
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We will have to wait and see wont we?
1942112 I can't wait, and I hope it is soon. I have not really looked, but the Scootaloo stories I have seen are sad, and it is nice to read a Scootaloo story that seems to be happy.
meeting scootaloo after being hit by her. catagory romance. that reminds me of mine. tho this was made before i even knew about this site. anywho great story so far
something important this pony needs to learn. never question pinkie logic
great chapter
I think it's interesting, and I love it.
nope it was not meant to be
sorry dude
Cool story, kinda reminds me of a video game.
There were some grammatical errors, run-ons and comma splices. The story goes too fast though, as if it was a journal. Try to keep your pacing and add more detailed imagery.
Overall, I like it! The plot seems promising and your writing style is unique.
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Thank you for your feedback
i love this story so far. i saw a few mistakes though and would be happy to fix them for you with your permission
moar
Very Cute
Young love is amazing.
new chapter awesome. ahem "yay"
2116239 how do you get a picture like that
2198199 My avatar? It is the pony I created, and I cropped the background away because it was unnecessary I cropped away enough of the background for the pony to be the majority of the pic. It is also my youtube avatar, and the very first pony I made. Does that answer your question?
2198389 is there a website you can go to to make one or did you just use a paint tool or something.
2201790 I cropped it when choosing my avatar. I think youtube offers a crop tool when deciding what image to choose, so I cropped it to a size that would work and saved the image so I could reuse it as an avatar for other sites. And that is how I have an avatar sized pic of a pony that I made in Pony Creator. If you want the Pony Creator It is at this location: http://generalzoi.deviantart.com/art/Pony-Creator-Full-Version-254295904
I made the pony there and I cropped it in youtube when I selected it as an avatar. I saved that image and uploaded it as my avatar for this site.
If I was redundant, I am sorry, and I hope this is a good enough explanation.