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gordobraveheart


brony, rapper thats it

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[First person/second person] [Ghost]

Theme song:Dead Man's Lullaby-Gordo

Ponyville, is a peaceful yet often random place to live in. The young play outside in the warm weather, while the adults sit around and chat about their daily routine, wondering how the day will pass on, and what to put on the table tonight for dinner. Even the animals are friendly to one another.

Yet, something feels...different about Ponyville, and the adults are not sure why. It feels the same as any other day, getting up, go to work, sleep, and repeat the process.

But for some strange reason, colts and fillies laugh, and not with each other, but with a new friend. Not only do the youngsters like this new friend, the elderly seem to take a liking to this friend as well. It bothers some, but most ignore and let it be.

But sometimes, if you are very quiet, you can hear a voice. A voice filled with sadness and anger. Often times, the voice settles down, and does not speak, but when it does, this voice repeats the same question. Again, and again and again.

"Where Will I Go?"

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Comments ( 133 )

You started with my curiosity....and now you have my attention....
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This is nice and well-written, as well as an interesting idea. Just one little problem.

It was tall, and it cold not see it's body, nor its face, but only a smile.

It might make more sense to replace "it cold" with "she could"

Your story is on the popular story box???!!!

:pinkiegasp: Quick, Scars, come here so I can write you!
Scars: NO!

2130926Hopsin is the shit.:pinkiehappy: I'm actually entering his rap contest!:yay:

2131028Not yet, but with what I written down, I might have some new fans

2131036 I'll be waiting for it.:pinkiehappy: Give me a link when you're done.

There are not enough of these stories on this site

2134568This is not only a first person/Second person ghost fic, it's (possibly, not sure if there's fics like this on this site) it's an original one. This fic is more of a serious approach of what happens when we die. Thank you for the compliment.:twilightsmile:

Just putting these out here:

to dark to walk in this cold.

too dark to

this women is having a stroke!

woman
:moustache:

2151288 I've seen this video before. It's sad if you really think about it.:pinkiesad2:

I must ask though, why is this vid here?:rainbowhuh:

2154504Don't know just feels right.

hmm... this storyline seems to ring a bell... :trixieshiftright:

2163990 Really? What does it remind you of?:rainbowhuh:

I'm not copying, am I?:fluttershyouch:

2164011 Cheating Death. Except in that one, he ended up alive in Equestria, with Death trolling him. :trollestia:

2164036oh, but trust me, it's not like that story.:twilightsmile: It just seems similar to that story because of the death scene, but this is more of a serious story, rather than a comedy.

Nice, keep going.

I like to think that we all have a decided time when the sand falls through the hourglass. And this entertains that belief. Thanks

And then I saw that last line and I was all like "Whaaaat? Should NOT be dead?"
Aw man we got some voodoo shit going down here in ghost town!
Some one call ghost busters!

"You're time was still yet to come." Your* BTW. NYES.

2339255 "should return in do time." you added an extra space, and it's due. :twilightsmile:

Did you steal that last line from Doctor who? Or did you 'borrow' it?

2343855It was a really big reference. I was hopping somebody called spot it out. Looks like you did!

2344225 Of course I'd call it out. It makes me cry every time I watch that episode. Nothing has ever done that before so that line is really powerful.
And it was definately appropriatly used here.

2344328Why thank you! xD It was a really sad Doctor Who episode too. David Tennet was awsome!

2346060 I read somewhere he's making an appearence in the 50th anniversariy special. Can't remember all the details though.

This is great! Will any of the adults find a way to speak with him? Maybe twilight will devise a scrying spell?

2135281

Read A Ghost Story from Elemist, your story is pretty similar, a human ghost in Equestria.

I like his story ( even if it's a BiE ), and so far your story is really good too.

I like how this goes! :pinkiehappy:
Also wanna know how will he be discovered.

After Death says "however", I somehow read a the rest of his dialogue in Morgan Freeman's voice...

You were close with the feels. May have to try harder though if you want to get any from me.
This is probably the second or third ghost in Equestria stories I have read. And so far so good.
Keep it up!

2394415Morgan Freeman as Death...Yea, I can picture that!:yay:

Anyone else getting a problem on this and other stories where it says a new chapter is posted but its locked with a password when you try to view it?

2404859I'm sorry, this was my fault. I posted the story by accedent when it was currently at 500 words, so I removed it as fast as I could :ajsleepy:
I will be posting the finished chapter later today, completed. :twilightsmile:

Anuva fic wif dem ghostie ponyboyz? Sounds intrestin'. WAAAAAAAAAGH!!

Death's little speech at the end made me cringe, I'll admit. Otherwise, this seems like a fairly good story to me, keep at it.

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