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After having his heart broken, Spike finds himself in a parrallel world. He must race against time as he only has three days to recover a dangerous mask before the moon crashes into the world. Based on the Legend of Zelda: Majora's Mask by Nintendo.

*Takes place in Season 3 before Magical Mystery Cure.*

The cover image was made by flawlessvictory20.

Chapters (24)
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Comments ( 278 )

:pinkiegasp: I love the game, and i'm loving this story so far! :pinkiehappy:
Keep it up! :twilightsmile:

1898828
Thanks, Majora's Mask is one of my favorite games.

Great game, and a pretty good start to the story too! :twilightsmile:

great story i'am fallowing

1898889
Thanks, I'll do my best to not to disappoint.
1898923
You're following me?

:rainbowlaugh: Thanks!

Nice, and now I must plat that game:rainbowkiss: glad I have an Nintendo still:eeyup:

Dawn of The First Day
-72 hours remain-
Sidequests complieted: None,yet.

1899139
Hey, I was getting to that! :pinkiehappy:

I feel like things are... rushed. Like, Spike goes into the woods, and less than a paragraph later he's surrounded by timberwolves. I also feel like he's a little too quick to accept his new fate and responsibilities. I wouldn't say this is bad overall, but it needs work.

Spike should get himself a dairy and I should get myself a new jar of patience for The quest of two ponies in love.

“Let’s out bring my wife into this,”

One (and possibly the only) thing i noticed you should fix, you probably meant not and not out :twilightsheepish:
But either way, good second chapter :twilightsmile:

1903650
Oops, thanks for catching that! Fixed it.

IDEA THIEF.

Naw, just kidding. Tracking this story like a boss

The liker approves this story, nothing else to say

:yay:yay fus ro backwards

It's stories like these where I'm glad I'm a Spike fan :ajsmug:

I'll give you one more chance, screw this up and I'll do the countdown.

1907652
One more chance? Screw what up? :rainbowhuh:

1908921
Oh, I thought you were talking to me.

1912457
I'll do my best!

By the way, what does everybody think of my choice of casting the characters? I've already planned out what characters are going to play what roles, but I want to hear what everybody else thinks. Was anybody surprised with my choices? Did you expect certain characters to play certain roles? Do you think a certain character should play a certain role? Do you have any guesses about future roles or questions about the choices I've made the story so far?

What are you going to do about the song ?
PS: The charecter choices are good so far.

1913099
I assume you're referring to the Song of Healing. It will be an important part of the story. There was a reason why Spike needed to get his flute back. If you know how the game goes, you'll know what I mean, but I also plan on doing something else with it much later.

Wow, it's hard to write Zecora! :twilightoops:

Probably the best crossover story I've ever read on this site :pinkiehappy:

Hm...

It’s a secret to everybody.

:)

Cranky may be a donkey, but Blueblood is still more of an ass than he is :ajsmug:

I swear, if you somehow end placing the "song of unhealing" in here.... i dunno if i will hate you forever or love you.

Hm...

“To go alone is dangerous.” ... “Take this.”

I'm loving these references. Keep up the good work.

Wait a sec i just realize if Spike's transforming into ponies does that mean the fierce deity will be alicorn Spike?

1925777
I wasn't planning on it, but I have considered it.

Lol:rainbowlaugh: good times, good times:eeyup: that part made me laugh in the game:pinkiehappy:

Wait, if there is no Tingle, then how does Spike go around without getting lost ?
Who cares !?
No Tingle = A better world.

1926861
I do not speak his name. I despise that character. I have no plans what so ever to include him in this story. If I do, his fate shall be worse than Blueblood's. That is all I will say on the subject.

1926889 After reading your comment, I have gained more respect for you good sir. Have a good day.

1927074
I'm glad that we have understanding. :pinkiehappy:
But seriously, there are some characters that won't be making it into the story. Some characters just are not needed. For example, I had to combine Koume and Kotake into Zecora. Captain Viscen was replaced by some random guard because his character was combined with Kafei into Shining Armor. Same thing with Anju. I didn't want to make Cadance an innkeeper, so I replaced that part of the character with a random mare. Celestia is playing nine roles :twilightoops:! She is all five of the great fairies and the four giants rolled into one. Owlowiscious was going to be in this chapter as Kaepora Gaebora, but I cut his scene. Though, he will be making an appearance soon.

1927602
Funny that you should use that emoticon...

1927147

I guess this explains the lack of Odolwa.
I can understand, though; a foal / infant dragon stands little chance of winning a fight against some crazy, bat-shit insane, jungle warrior.

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Yeah, I wouldn't want Spike to go up against that. The challenges presented by the Elements are psychologically damaging as it is. Besides, he did get a boss fight of sorts with the mirage Timberwolves and with the ones that attacked Zecora. I'll try to make it so that there is a "boss fight" of sorts for each area.

I'm guessing the next time loop is the Bargainning Cycle. I'm enjoying the story. It makes me want to play the game again.

1930025
I'm glad that someone caught on to that.

A purple unicorn clot colt with a green, spikey spiky mane stared back up at him.

Gotta say, the inner dialogue with Spike and the mask spirits is a really nice touch, and it's incredibly amusing :rainbowwild:

I love you and your daily updates.

1933583
Thanks for catching that. Fixed.

1933592
Thank you :twilightblush:. I'm actually surprised that I've been able to publish a chapter everyday!

I say, maybe you should re-edit a lil bit the part in which Spike walks through the snow to reach the city. Content-wise it is quite empty, it wouldn't hurt if you added more info about the surroundings, or said how difficult it was for spike to (for example) walk through the snow, fight against the wind, keep his stuff together, see through the snow (since he could clearly see the houses and the lights) and such.

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