TwiShy, AppleDash and Rarixie lover and writer. Also a gamer. Something else you need to know is that I'm strongly against Alicorn Twilight.
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Fluttershy has a crush on somepony, and her best friend wants to help her with her love life. Will she make it or will she be too shy to confess? Warning: contains femslash. If you don't like it, don't read it! There will be some AppleDash in future chapters.
This fic isn't part of She Knows How to Treat a Lady and its sequels.
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Good story.
1813495 Thank you!
Seems promising. Although, there were quite a few errors that made it a little hard to read. For instance:
You put an extra quotation mark there, and I ended up looking back to make sure she was actually talking.
There are a couple things about this sentence. 'On' should be 'in,' since you can't really be on Ponyville, and also 'theirselves' isn't a word. Instead of that, it should be 'themselves.' I'd suggest fixing that, because some people will see the first sentence and automatically hit the back button.
I'm not sure about other people, but I am always overly aware of something like this. Before the quotation mark, there should be some sort of punctuation mark, such as a period or a comma. I think you made the same mistake a couple of times. Also, what she said was a little strange sounding. Perhaps you meant to put something like this: "I came to see how you are feeling," and not 'are you feeling.' Know what I mean?
Anyways, the plot seems good enough, you just need to work a little on grammar. I'll upvote and favorite to see where this goes.
It's good, but it does need some cleaning up. There's missing punctuation marks, some weird word choices, and some strange dialogue. Try to go over your chapter before submitting it, or have someone do it for you. It's got a good plot and has potential; you just need to fix the grammar issues.
I'll keep following it, though. I'm looking forward to seeing more!
I swear Celestia should seal Pinkie in stone. She has caused more pain more destruction more chaos than discord nightmare moon Chrysalis and Sombra have put together.
1815261 Thank you for your honesty, I'll check twice next time and will correct those mistakes now!
1815773 I know my limits,
Don't worry, and this time I corrected some mistakes before making it public but it seems that I skipped a few of them...
1815826
Enjoyed this chapter, and definitely looking forward to more.
Though if you'd like someone to help look through for any errors, I certainly wouldn't mind.
New TwiShy story? Huzzah! But in all seriousness, I'm likin' this story so far, can't wait for more
1816688>>1815773
Seems like whenever their's a new TwiShy, I find you two
1817106
Well of course.
Twishy is my favorite ship, so I have to check out every one that comes along.
1816688 Thanks for offering but I already have an editor
1817208
Oh, alright.
Well, either way, definitely awaiting more.
1817106
Heh, always get a notification when one pops up. And I go out of my way to check if someone adds a new story with them without putting them in groups.
1817335 Thank you, don't worry, I'll post soon, at least one per day
Oh dear...
Short, but sweet. I'm a little nervous on Fluttershy's behalf... And I really hope Twilight isn't harsh on her.
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Sorry about that. Anything specific?
1818159
I tried not to change too much from the original content, but I'll pay more attention to stuff like that in the future. Sorry, and you're not being mean or anything. 
Yeah, just started on this chapter.
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next cmhapter
Well that escalated quicky, too quickly, you should make longer chapter more like 1500-2200 words
Aww! Adorableness!
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Tis not the length of the chapter that matters my friend. Rather, it's about the contents and how they are woven into the works of art we read
1824208 Thank you and you're right, my chapters might be short but I try to make them good
Aww! Poor Fluttershy! Unfortunately, the truth hurts...but that's why we have time ^^
Aww poor Fluttershy
Twi...
Poor Flutters.
I'm awaiting the next one, and I hope it only continues to get better! 
Good job on the chapter, as always.
1827383 Thanks, I usually don't like Drama but the idea was too good to pass XD
I think that Trollestia
had planned to interupt Fluttershy 
and Twilights 
walk.
1831984 Maybe
By Luna's moon! So much drama! I for one, love it ^^ So many things can go wrong and they are. I wonder what Twilight's gonna say to the poor pegasus
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1833373
Have to agree here. Love this, and it's doing great, but of course, always room to improve.
1833373 I knew it was a comment, I was just imitating Fluttershy
Let's see what happens next
Good so far. I am still wishing she ended up taking that potion, though...
'Cause then, the love potion could've actually been the love poison, and Fluttershy would notice eventually, bringing about more drama, and when Twilight's out of the potion's spell she could have actually fallen in love with her in the process, and then... Some kinda plot twist? I don't really know where this all came from... 
As someone else has mentioned, there's always room to improve. Although for some, quick updates are an awesome plus, whatever the catch is.
Anyway, there is a lot going on drama-wise, but that's good. You just don't want to move on to the next part too quickly. Like this person said: 1833338
Great chapter, and I'm looking forward to editing your next one!
1833523 I'll send you the pages as soon as I have them
Yes, well, I have a plan and I needed this misunderstanding to work, soon you will find out, all of you!
Dun dun dun!
My goodness, look at you pumping out a new chapter every day. I'm impressed
And my bits are on Rarity being the mysterious pony
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Yeah... That's what I'm guessing too.
Rarity, bad. If it is you, that is.
Its molestia
she have this plan up
No seriously its rarity
As with everyone else here, my first guess would be Rarity
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Of course it won't get away from him...
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No Trixie, why?! Hope Twilight's alright...but now we get to see how Fluttershy reacts...Wunderbar
Trixie you little... Well I'am just glad they are safe now for the moment. A little bit action is never bad imo. Nice chapter again.
please tell that you wouldn't kill Twilight, that will be to cliche .
I always wondered who came up with the term "femslash".
It makes me think knives are involved!
1847833 I never realized that
This is a good story and I can't wait to find out what happens next. There are some errors that have been pointed out but the concept overall is quite enjoyable. The switching of tense in the first few chapters was jarring and pulled me out of the story, and there are some grammar errors as well. Nothing an editor couldn't fix up for you though. An example would be:
It should read to apologize.
Also,
Should read hiding in.
There are quite a few of those but as I said, can easily be fixed. It just brings me out of the story as I come across it.
Please keep up the good work though, I really hope
and 
get their happy ending!
1848673 Yeah, as soon as I finish with the story I was going to ask my editor to check my first chapters
Thanks for another nice chapter and a merry christmas to you as well.
Huzzah! And a Happy Hearth Warming
Cute... So cute...