“Is she going to be okay?” Rarity asked the nurse. A day has passed since the trap. Twilight had only just woken up, and she'd found herself with bandages on her head and surrounded by her friends. Rarity went to call the nurse as soon as she started to open her eyes.
“Yes, she will be fine. Luckily, you got her to us fast. She’s on conditions to leave today.”
"'Ah'm glad to hear that!”
“Oh, Twilight, I wanted to throw you a party as soon as you woke up but they took my stuff!”
“I’m sorry, but this is a hospital and patients need to rest!”
“Don’t worry, Pinkie Pie. You can throw me that party after I get back to the library.”
“Okey dokey lokey!”
“I'll leave now. I must inform the doctors that you are awake and ready to leave as you see fit.”
“Thank you, nurse.” They waited until the nurse left the room before starting to talk about what happened.
“You know, Twilight, what you did was great, but also stupid. You should have waited for us before going into the Everfree Forest!” Rainbow Dash angrily said.
“But…”
“No 'buts,' Sugarcube. What you did was noble and all, but you almost died. You were lucky that Spike and Angel came for us!”
“Oh yes... Where is he, by the way?”
“He’s at Fluttershy’s taking care of Angel and the critters. Fluttershy didn’t leave your side since she woke up at the forest and saw you unconscious. You should thank her for keeping you safe.” Rarity said with pride and a smile.
“You didn’t…?” Twilight glanced at the timid pegasus who hadn’t said a word the entire time. She wasn’t looking at her when she spoke.
“Yes… I was scared that you wouldn’t wake up… I've been here day and night with you, hoping that if you heard a familiar voice, you would wake up…” Fluttershy looked at the purple unicorn after she finished speaking. They stared into each other’s eyes for several moments, and nopony said a word until Applejack got the message.
“Oh... Ah’ think we should leave them alone for a few minutes…”
“But she just woke up!”
“Applejack is right. They need some time alone, Pinkie.” Rainbow told her friend, and everypony left quietly.
After a few moments of silence, Twilight broke finally it. “Thank you, Fluttershy…”
“I’m still mad at you. I haven’t forgotten what you did…”
“Fluttershy, about that…”
“I don’t want to talk about it!”
“Please, just listen to me, Fluttershy. Let me explain… Please…” Fluttershy looked into her purple eyes and noticed that her eyes were wet. She couldn’t stand to see her like this; she still loved her.
“You can explain…”
“Thank you!” Twilight said while sitting up, smiling and clearing her tears. “Well, first, I won’t lie to you, I did consider using the Love Potion, but Spike showed me that it was a mistake. He threw the book outside to prevent me from reading it, and we never wanted you to find out… He made me realize that I couldn’t force myself to love you but I wanted to make you happy... I wasn’t thinking right. When you found out and left, I felt really bad… I deserved it. But on that night, when Angel came to my home and gave me the note that said that you were in danger, I freaked out. I was so worried about you and was fearing the worst... Then, new feelings hit me, feelings I'd never experienced before… It was love. Now, I know how you feel and I’m amazed to see how well you hid your feelings… Fluttershy, I promise you, I didn’t use the Love Potion. What I feel for you is real and natural. I want to date you, I want to kiss you… I don’t know how I survived without you by my side for so long, but I know that I can’t continue without you anymore. Fluttershy, I want to be your marefriend, so please, accept me…”
The yellow pegasus was crying. She'd waited for so long to hear what had just been said, but also regretted hurting Twilight's feelings because of a simple misunderstanding. She approached the unicorn and hugged her tightly.
“Of course I accept you, Twilight... I've always wanted you to say that, but I feel bad for hurting your feelings…” Twilight returned the hug, ignoring the searing hot pain in her head.
“Don’t worry about that, it’s in the past. We must only see the present and the future.” The purple unicorn moved her marefriend’s head so she could see her eyes.
“Our future…” Fluttershy was smiling and crying of happiness. She blinked her tears away, and before she could react, Twilight kissed her. She was caught by surprise, but when she realized that it wasn’t a dream, she slowly closed her eyes and returned the kiss. It felt like the world had stopped, and suddenly everything was right. Neither of them wanted to stop… But unfortunately, they needed to breathe. After several seconds that felt like hours, they broke the kiss, staring deeply into each other’s eyes.
“I love you, Twilight… I really do; I've never been so happy in my life!”
“The feeling is mutual, 'Shy... You're the most important pony in my life... Well, after Princess Celestia, of course.”
They both giggled until they heard the door open. They saw Pinkie Pie skipping around, as usual.
“Hey there, how’s… Woah!” Pinkie Pie stood still for a few moments.
”Pinkie?” Twilight looked confused and Fluttershy tried to hide her embarrassment by looking down. Pinkie Pie finally started to react.
“Are you two…?” She pointed at them, to which they responded with a nod. “Yay! I’m so happy for you two... I will so make a party for this and I’ll invite you of course, it’s your party after all!” She jumped on the bed and hugged them both.
“Hey, what’s with all this noise?” Rainbow Dash said as she and the others entered the room as well.
“Oh, nothing--Just that Twilight and Fluttershy are officially a couple!” Pinkie said while hugging them tighter.
“Pinkie… we can’t breathe…!”
“And my head… Aches!”
“Oopsie, sorry girls!” As soon as she let them go, they started to breathe fast; recovering themselves.
“This is fantastic, Fluttershy! Remember what you promised me!” Rarity hugged them too.
“What did you promise her, Fluttershy?” Twilight was even more confused when her marefriend replied with a blush.
“Oh, it’s a secret, Twilight Sparkle, but I called first so, ha!”
“You called first what, Sugarcube?”
“Oh, you will see soon enough, don't worry darling!”
“Well, when you finish this chat, Twilight, the nurse said you can leave now but you need to be careful.” Rainbow Dash didn’t care about what they were talking about.
“Really? I can leave now? Great!”
“Um... Twilight…”
“Yes, Fluttershy?” Twilight looked at the timid pegasus, noticing her nervous tone.
“I was wondering, if you want, of course, could you stay with me for a few days… Until your head is healed… I want to make sure you’re okay…”
“Oh, sure, Fluttershy.” They stared into each other’s eyes again for a while. They were both amazed by how beautiful the other's were.
“If you are going to get kissy-kissy again, I’m out of here!” Rainbow Dash’s voice echoed within the room.
Thanks for another nice chapter and a merry christmas to you as well.
Huzzah! And a Happy Hearth Warming
Cute... So cute...
Rainbow Dash, you're too... I don't even know.
Can't wait to edit more from you. I love where this is going.
Although, I hope you'll elaborate a little more on their relationship before going all out on the 'marriage' thing.
1854482 I don't like a quick marriage or killing canon characters so you don't need to worry!
They still need to have their first official date!
I like the story, but I feel like it's a little rushed.
That and (I really need to get this next part off my chest)...
GRAMMAR PROBLEMS EVERYWHERE!!!!
(sigh) Ok, now that that's out of my system, the grammar nazi in me can finally settle down... (Grammah, sieg heil!!)
NO, DOWN, NAZI!
Like I said, I like what you're doing with the story, but I feel like you were trying to meet a deadline or something. The writing seems a little choppy and thrown together. That and, as my... other part of me (the little gremlin on my shoulder pointing out mistakes) stated, there were too many grammatical errors for my own liking.
(This next part is constructive, not negative. Please, no flame comments telling me to stuff it.)
First off, I wish to point out that there were many instances that confused me a little. These instances were when a conversation ensued between more than one character. I noticed that you left most of the lines unclaimed. Normally, in those situations, that would be ok, but that's generally if the conversation is being held between two characters at a time. During these portions, when a third character speaks up, that character's entry to the conversation is usually marked (for example, if the character is just about to be introduced, you could describe the voice speaking [sultry, gruff, etc.], or if the character is already known as part of the group, you simply put their name).
Second, your proofreader needs to either sit down and study English a little more, or be replaced (no offense), because there were problems everywhere. I make it sound worse than it seems and for that I apologize, but you see my point. There were misspelled words peppering each chapter, and there were even some instances where I thought I was playing a fill-in-the-blank game, as there was a whole word missing from the sentence.
That said, I have posted this comment on this chapter, because this is where I've read up to, and I'm stating my findings up to this point. I don't know as of yet if the grammar in the story gets better or worse from here (I'm certain the storyline will only get better). If it gets better, let me apologize in advance (again). Everyone can rest assured that I will remove this comment and promptly eat it for posting it before I knew anything else.
Sorry this comment is so lengthy. I needed to find a way to word it just right so it didn't come out sounding like an insult. If it did anyway, I apologize.
The adorableishness is great
When Pinkie walked in on Twilight and Fluttershy at the hospital: Pinkie Sense
2927149 I am guessing we will never find out where Pinkie Sense comes from huh
There should really be more content around the dialogue. Obviously you don't need to go back and fix that now, but for future reference, try to better describe what the characters are doing and what else nasty be going on around them.
Don't you think Rainbow Dash was a bit harsh? Obviously she's not the most patient or mushy pony, but she would certainly be more happy than that for her closest friends finding love.
I foresee some lovey-time while Twi stays over ;D
2007463 This is late, but it's better than nothing, right?
I know that this fic has many mistakes, I still don't know how I got so many follower with this!
Anyway, I have improved a lot since I wrote this fic and I'm currently revising this one and correcting all the mistakes I see, although I'm trying to not to modify it much so everyone can see my improvement