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I write stories because I enjoy them. I want to do better and am willing to take any advice to improve.

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We don’t see AJ look like that in the comic or series.

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I know, but it was the best cover I could find when trying to search up her werewolf transformation.

A spelling error in the short description... those who notice will have their expectations reframed by it; which is why authors should refrain from doing it...

Which is ironic as... you didn't actually miss spell anything...

Has a non consent tag yet...

"NOT RAPE, I'm not going there so get over it,"

So... do you know what non con means?

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Do you know what Dubious Consent means?

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Plus the context here is Applejack is out of control, and Fluttershy let's herself be taken willingly to contain him.

That's not rape.

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Then it doesn't deserve the tag. Especially since you spoiled it by telling us (right after) that you were not going there.

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Thank you for catching that. Now fixed.

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That's why the spoiler cover exists. Yes, the tag is still required because not everyone will read the spoiler bar, nor the comments. Second, we are only aware of Fluttershy's perspective in this story. Applejack's is still unknown due to the transformation. Yes, the consent is still in question, and can also be considered nonconsent under the right lense, that is what the word dubious means, questionable, not certain. For the readers, it's unsure until they have more details which is given by reading the story.

well considering that this was my first applewolf story I must say that I don't feel disappointed at all keep up the good work friend

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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was hard since a lot of Applejack/Werewolf lore is fandom-exclusive. I wanted to keep the vibe the fandom had created around this while also leaning my details for this piece.

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Glad, I've got a bad ending planned too. Hope you come back for more.

it was ok but prefer the good ending better:twilightsmile:

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And that's a perfectly fine choice. That was the sole reason I wrote this whole story in such a way, so you people can have your porn and I can have my gore.

And so, the legend of the Apple Family's Curse, the Werewolf of Ponyville, would continue for all time.

A bunch of moron/idiots.

If only they could ask Luna for help or something.

P.S. Why the hell didn't she and the other guards show up in the good ending? Because this is suddenly came out of nowhere and makes no sense.

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The logic of the bad ending is all the worst possible things ergo, no saving Applejack from his mistake. Plus, we don't know the full scope of this transformation since its mostly fanon. Maybe Luna could have cured him, maybe it couldn't. In the end, the point of the endings was to show how they could live with the curse and how things could get worse, not how to cure.

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Because this is suddenly came out of nowhere and makes no sense.

Think about it, in the other versions Thunderlane's body was disposed of. Yet, there is a reason I just left his destroyed remains out in the open in this story. First, off, werewolf attacks tend to be harder to escape from alive and don't always result in another werewolf due to the heavy damage. I never state it, but you could assume the town folk stumbled upon the corpse of Thunderlane. Ergo they must have already been looking for the killer.

In the good ending, they walk past the cottage, not suspecting a thing because it is just two lovers having a moment.

However, in the bad ending, while searching for the killer, it would be rather hard not to notice a cottage covered in blood and possibly Fluttershy's agonizing death.

The simultaneous good and bad endings put a nice bitter touch on the story, I must admit.

With apples, is there a last name from Belmont or Halsin in your family tree? They have a special ability to kill monsters, honestly.

By the way, I have an idea that I had a long time ago, well actually there are two ideas that I wanted to recommend to you. I made them for a version of Spiderman I did Which, in order not to make the three-legged joke, this occurred to me: the manipulation of stimuli by increasing people's sensory receptors in addition to influencing their subconscious to make them feel much more pleasure .

This could be useful for a fic with ocs or as another alternative for a story of this type.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/398053/tres-vías
I mention it because it highlights the sexual characteristics of all three races except unicorns and this could perhaps be used to fill in those characteristics.

The other one that is a little crazier was a tantric aura, being something that allows the individual to be adjusted so that he does not die from snu snu, for example if the partner outweighs him or is too strong, in addition to giving him intuitive knowledge to know where to touch the areas correct erogenous

although as with the suggestions in the previous story it is just an idea that if you want or not you can use it without problem

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With apples, is there a last name from Belmont or Halsin in your family tree? They have a special ability to kill monsters, honestly.

I've seen some fan art that puts an Apple member as a Belmont so I'm certain there are fanfictions exploring that idea. However, if you are asking about taking on this idea, no. I'm still trying to finish my Hoodwinked crossover. I don't have time to take other crossovers. Maybe ask me again when I finish that one.

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the manipulation of stimuli by increasing people's sensory receptors in addition to influencing their subconscious to make them feel much more pleasure .

As for this, I suggest you read some of SWWC Side Stories. The first one in particular deals with a clop where a special fruit of the apple family enhances sense through pain or pleasure. A mysterious ghost connects this fruit with the main series, Something Wrong With Canterlot.

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The other one that is a little crazier was a tantric aura, being something that allows the individual to be adjusted so that he does not die from snu snu, for example if the partner outweighs him or is too strong, in addition to giving him intuitive knowledge to know where to touch the areas correct erogenous

You're talking about pressure point sex. Yeah, those kinds of stuff have never been my kink, can barely write bondage well.

ok I'll go in parts
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To clarify, what I said was a joke.
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I think I've read it once I'll go over it just in case and this idea was more like a suggestion for any story of yours that involves a clop with unicorns or alicorns
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a 50/50 but yes of course with a plus of not dying from too aggressive sex or having the life sucked while doing it

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sex or having the life sucked while doing it

Actually, sex is so good it kills you. That will be happening in a later one-shot.

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