It was supposed to be a normal day, or at least it should've been, but in a world were 10% of the human population has strange and bizarre powers normalcy is a rare thing. but for one young man with said strange powers, today was going to really flip everything on its head when he finds himself no longer in the world he knows, but in a world that ruled by talking animals and other mythological creatures. its going to be one weird and strange ride.
-Authors Note for Reader: the human MC comes from the Un-Natural verse that a few of my other stories has connections to. but this is a separate story, and will not feature any main characters from my other Un-Natural stories.
Contains: human on pony/interspecies. but clop will be fairly light in this story.
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Off to a good start 😌
Thanks for the new story!
Well, let's go with my initial impressions, it has that basic premise that I love about humans going to Equestria, but it comes from a world where supernatural powers exist, which is already a nice difference. But, I confess that his powers disappointed me a little, like when I read that he had strange powers even for the world itself, I imagined something very different and even very powerful, like manipulation of matter or he can permanently absorb the powers of others in his world. , something like that.
But can he only create barriers?
It seemed very common to me, however I know it's wrong of me to simply judge something like this with so few chapters, it can evolve this power a lot and if there's anything that the Black Clover movie taught me, it's that barriers can be very versatile, and It's also my fault for having such high expectations.
In any case, I'm going to follow your story more, I want to see if you gained more knowledge about the history of G4 and it looks like it's going to be good
More good love it
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don't worry, Baricade can do more than simply make a dome force field around himself, that can bumbercar attackers, or play ping pong within if they are inside. but you'll see what he can do with his powers later on.
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Lets be honest Barricade is uninformed and might believe that the ponies are lying to him about the princess's invitation and think they are trying to kidnap him.
Interesting, a start which isn’t somebody getting beaten by the Mian 6.
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Thanks for the chapter!
Now Barricade's powers proved to be very good, controlling the synthetic force and gravity within the barrier is very powerful and has multiple applications: it could fire a stone with the power of a bullet. It surprised me positively.
I'm already looking forward to this meeting with Celestia, I think Barricade's reaction will be either very funny or very explosive in a negative way.
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i'm happy your enjoying the story so far. and trust me, Barricade still has more tricks up his sleeve with his power.
I like it, the writing style, I'm enjoying this a lot.
Thanks for the chapter!
Well, it looks like things got heated for a moment. Honestly considering how the Canterlot nobles were talking about Barricade when he arrived, I think he trusted Celestia pretty quickly. But we will see if this apparent peace will last for long.
Question, where are we in the timeline, after Discord's first appearance? Or after Chrysalis' first attempt to dominate Equestria?
This story has potential. Keep up the good work.
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"Bucko" is crazy
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Also is his name actually Barricade or is it a sorta nickname?
Amazing chapter, you never disappoint!
I can already see that Blueblood and the nobles who are like him are going to be a huge headache for poor Barricade. But, we also had the appearance of Luna, the best pony!
Question, can Barricade create more than one barrier?
And is Barricade really his real name? Because it looks more like a codename, like a superhero codename.
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to answer your question, when in public around Norms, Un-Naturals use their given names. but in private, with other Un-Naturals, or in this stories case with ponies, Un-Naturals will use a code name that refers to what their power is. they do this to distance themselves from the Norms, or do so to not remind themselves that they are not normal people anymore. some Un-Naturals are given their Power Name from others, mostly from older gen. Un-Naturals or what scientist and researchers dub the Un-Naturals they have either in captivity or have seen from footages.
another reason why Un-Naturals don't use their given name is because it reminds them of WHO they were before their powers emerged, which often brings a lot of bad or painful memories. so they don't use them to avoid remembering such things.
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i'll try.
by the way how do you like Barricade so far? i've never written a character in this style of pov writing before.
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Thanks for the chapter! Barricade is showing how his power has different applications, each chapter that passes gets better.
But, as poor people's joy is short-lived, we have a problem from the world of Barricade to deal with, none other than a mecha.
awww man, I'll have to stop reading here, I'm not a fan of the "human arrives mlp, human talks to other ponies a bit, suddenly he's not the only human anymore/completely external elements appear" stories, it's early though to know, but will only this external thing come out or will there be more? in which case this begins to have many external elements, well at least it was a good read.
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I'm the same most of the time I'll give it a chance since it's a robot but if it's overused I might unfollow
UUUUUGGGHH, why him.
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don't worry, the Collector is the only other entity from the Un-Natural verse to come to Equestria. plus i think its more than enough of a threat for not only Barricade, but also to Equestria itself.
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i'm happy that you like the story so far
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I know I should have asked this before, but... Does the protagonist's name refer to a certain Transformers character with the same name and who is the bad cop?
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no. all Un-Naturals names is a refrence to an aspect, or out right explains or says what their power is. Barricade named himself because his power is barrier or forcefield base, something he can use to 'barricade' himself off from the dangers of the world.
I saw a few minor mistakes as I was reading near the end and I thought that I might point them out to you, author.
"Lyra stop that! your being rude!" should have been more like "Lyra, stop that! You're being rude!" as you missed a comma after Lyra's name and got the two similar words "your" and "you're" mixed up with the word "you're" being the right word to use in that situation.
"Nah its no problem." should have been: "Nah, it's no problem." with a comma after "Nah" and the word "it's" needing the apostrophe due to it not being the form of the word to signify possession/ownership (ex: "its arm was covered in very lean, corded muscle") and in this case is a combination of the two words "it" and "is" instead which does have an apostrophe in it.
And "incase" in the last paragraph needs to be separated into "in case" instead of being smashed together.
Other than that though I didn't really see any mistakes near those after a quick look and I hope that this helps and please keep up the good work on this story, author.
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Bro are you even aware of how creating barriers is broken? if you're smart with it.. you could insta kill someone with it