Orion Selenevsky, a half ukrainian half german, graduated from Bundeswehr University Munich, he has knowledge on engineering, politics and military, and yet he did not find a job...it find him as Ukraine and Russia face combat and its his duty to defend his home from the Russian as the guy that assist in Engineering, but one day a russian rocket hit the building he was resting resulting in him dying....that is what he thought happened anyway so how the hell is he in a crystalline throne room and how is that evil looking horse talking.
Also please understand this is but an experiment, I am only going to see your reaction to this story
Please Support me to keep writing......thank you
Chapters (5)
Show on this picture where Putin touched you.
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Hahaha....you're funny, anyways please wait for an update anytime soon
Did MC know about the Crystal Empire before he arrived or did he learn about it some other way? How does he know it’s called the Crystal Empire?
It’s been weeks, but MC interacted with the crystal ponies in any way? The readers haven’t seen any of these.
Are humans’ engineering and magic compatible enough for a “macguffin” to be built secretly in such a short time frame? Electronics require lots of specialized tools to make from scratch especially if no such thing exists in the Crystal Empire beforehand.
Crystal Empire is made of magical crystals and sustained by the Crystal Heart. How did they fall into disrepair?
Was Sombra defeated prior to the Empire’s disappearance? Does this mean it won’t disappear now? Do Equestria’s princesses know what happened?
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Thank you dear reader for your inquiry, but you are right there is missing info in the story please wait for an update on the story, Thank you
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And for the Question of the Crystal Empire is made of magical crystals and sustained by the Crystal Heart. How did they fall into disrepair? My answer is While it is from the original Eques, this is an Alternative Universe with a tiny mixture of Equestria at War.
And was Sombra defeated prior to the Empire’s disappearance? My answer is Yes and Does this mean it won’t disappear now? My answer is also Yes and to the question of Do Equestria’s princesses know what happened?My answer it's already in a chapter
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I like you questioning of the story my experiment is working thanks to you, Please keep on commenting because I am the only one writing, editing, and proofreading my own work so sometimes I make mistakes and also I not that good in english for I am not a well spoken english speaking person
great chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
So intriguing idea but definitely needs more buildup before a fight like this. Also is the MC still human or a pony, where did he get the amulet, does he have his own power? So many questions but still a good premise.
Story feels a bit out of order by having them receive the invitation first in section two then he decides to send it in section three.
So does he look like a pony of a different kind or does he look human? If he looks human than they would probably compare him to a Minotaur as they often do…
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If you compare human and minotaur they both have similar body frame but different muscle ratio, hair growth and etc..., so they in did thought of him as a slightly disfigured Minotaur.
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Ah ok, it was just hard to tell with the wording. Good story so far and hopefully you can start on the full version soon.
Dark magic-resistant bullets, we all know that's a super cool way of just saying he carries pure silver bullets with him. I doubt he has the power of light Aether, which can destroy Darkness and all matter quick.
Welp that last part not gonna last.
Very bad writing.
MC doesn't know that he is in Crystal Empire, but he describes it not like it looking, but how it named, even if he don't know how it called.
Also pacing, it's too fast, one moment MC is in Germany, the other in Crystal Empire, not enough descriptions and there is near no transitions.
I'm somewhat great full that someone wrote with this war in mind, but as I see, it's just or lazy writing, or try to improve the quality of it.
The concept of this story is great, but you needed to take more time for the details.
Interesting style, I think? Third POV does need some clear perspectives and etc, but the pacing was very rushed and felt boring. The timeskips was too much, making the character development is just nonexistent.
Tell us the story, the progress of how the Main Character got into place. How did he achieve his role as a king, hardships he got, and then you can add the aftermath. Thank you and sorry if this doesn't sit well with you. :)
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It's all right this is an experimentation story of trying a new approach on writing so any comments here are compiled and studied for further development
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Oh, okay! :D
Moonlight0405... я слежу за тобой... И за историей твоего браузера, тоже. Как сказал однажды Гоблин: "Честно, потраченного времени - жаль"
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Что за чертовщина? Кто вы? Вы русский?
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Что за чертовщина? Кто вы? Вы русский?
Hm interesting way to tell a story you have going on here, it’s a very intriguing way of story telling and I’m alright with it. I do hope to see more soon for I am really interested in how this story will develop!
I love the story I give it a 10 out of 10 keep it BTW you are a amazing writer
Well, the scene is... kinda epic, but without buildup and without any worthy detail whatsoever, scene and a page as whole feels like nothing.
The whole situation to me, as to reader, seem too unjustified, as if you get a porshe for nothing. It`s just doesnt feel earned, nor interesting for that matter.