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yeah just giving advice that a fellow author give me

It’s ok that for the advice

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Okay I'm gonna be honest to you even if I admit to not be a good writer but I will say that you write fast you need to slow down on the events that is happening I mean slow down the phasing of events that happening I don't what to be seen as a cocky author to others I'm just giving you an advice that was said to me by a fellow author

If you want to please tell me what you think of it

Your name is anon, you were just taking a walk like you like to do every. Tuesday, followed by working on something, be it writing something or painting. You were on your way home from the store. And decides to go down the fasted way home, but as soon as you entered the forest a fog came in, and you noticed that. The fog was, a rainbow of colors, and, when the fog passed. The forest of different you look at your arm because you felt a pinch on his arm, and he sees a mark that looked like a pencil drawing, in a book. You continue walking, thinking you went the wrong way but noticed it's night you are confused because it was daytime, so either I was in the forest the whole day or that fog wasn't normal fog. You now find yourself in the sight of, wood-like a wolf or large beast, you can't tell. Because it was dark you see, the wooden beast moving towards you, so you run the other way then you noticed a light coming out a tree you see there is a door on the tree, so you knocked on it the door opened, but there is no one there, but then you hear a cough from below you, so you look down a saw a small, zebra with big eyes the zebra said hello. She asked me if I would like to come in, and I say may I, and I said thank you. You ask the Zebra for her name, My name is Zecora know what is your name. My name is Anon, nice to meet you Zecora if you could answer me a question, you may ask where am I. You sure sir please just call me Anon, ok anon we are in the Everfree forest. Well then I was right!, Right about what Zecora asked what he is right about Anon answered the question when I entered the forest in my world a rainbow fog set in but after 5 minutes of walking the fog lifted then I noticed it was night but when I entered the forest it was midday. Ah, zecora said Anon zecora said do you have any other questions, Anon said one last question when the fog cleared this mark appeared on my arm Zecora is shocked a little Zecora Said that is what is called by ponies it's a CutieMark. Anon is now confused What is a CutieMark, Zecora answer it's a mark that appears when a pony finds their special talent. Anon is still confused but then asks something else what else does a CutieMark, Zecora then said it also might mean you have magic. Anon now more confused what does she mean by he has magic, Zecora Said's that ponies get CutieMarks from a combination of magic and finding there true talent.