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So Twilight was assimilated? Kinda what I'm getting from the end. Or I totally missed something.
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Thank you for reading. Could you please spoiler the first four words of your post, even though I realize it is a question?
The last three words of the story's penultimate paragraph may clear that up. If they do not, please feel free to Private Message me.
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Doesn't ruin the story, but it's driving me nuts.
Done, and I read it again. Still lost
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Sent a Private Message. Hope it helps!
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Same here.
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(Semi-Spoiler) The last four paragraphs hold the key to the mystery. I have now added bolding to make it clearer that something comes from a book.
Fluttershy also states: "...resemble an egg..."
If you send me a Private Message, I can explain more.
I think I get what happened but I can’t say I get the point? It all seems very random and intentionally confusing in its presentation, which can be a good thing sometimes but I don’t think it works in this case. It feels more distracting than mysterious.
I’m afraid this one isn’t for me. But, regardless, best of luck in the contest, fellow competitor!
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Thank you for reading. Understood concerning your experience.
Everything has a purpose and story points are wrapped within themselves, like a turducken--the underlying touchstone.
The story is told in two alternating perspectives: Pinkie's and Twilight's. After the "**********", it shifts to only Pinkie's perspective.
Given a few comments of a similar nature, here, in spoiler tags is a general timeline of the mystery that is peeled off in layers and is revealed in Pinkie's conversation with Twilight.
Far Past. Twilight has an encounter with Screwball, the "vagrant".
0. Ponyeater at some point arrives at Fluttershy's house.
1. Ponyeater escapes Fluttershy's house.
2. Old Pony verbally jousts with Twilight.
3. Old Pony is eaten by the Ponyeater.
4. Fluttershy "borrows" books on the Ponyeater from Twilight's library. Twilight later cannot find the books.
5. Kirin goes missing. Eaten by Ponyeater.
6. Ponies, noticing the disappearances, investigate, led by Twilight.
7. Fluttershy buys up all the eggs.
8. Twilight visits Fluttershy but is unable to see the Ponyeater.
9. Pinkie suspects Twilight (after seeing physical evidence missed by Twilight's investigation and reflecting on Twilight's encounters with Screwball and the old pony) and brews her Pinkie Pie-logic-based entrapment scheme.
10. Pinkie cannot find eggs at the market but finds a big egg on the side of the road--the Ponyeater in disguise.
11. Pinkie uses the fake egg to cook the pony equivalent of a Turducken (Piesweetcluckin') in the shape of a pony to entrap Twilight. Pinkie Pie detective logic called out by Twilight, although Pinkie does not admit to Twilight that Twilight is being investigated.
12. Twilight eats the Piesweetcluckin'. Pinkie does not. Twilight considers how foolish Pinkie is.
13. Pinkie investigates Fluttershy and learns the Ponyeater does not just consume, digest, and excrete its prey, it absorbs their organs, much in the same way that the Piesweetcluckin' is arranged.
14. Pinkie realizes the ponies were eaten by the Ponyeater, which (as part of the Piesweetcluckin') was eaten by Twilight.
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Pinging you in case the above may also be helpful.
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Thanks for explaining it in plain language.
The implied ending is a real organ wrenched (especially for Twilight).
A bit of a mazey mystery story, but interesting nonetheless.
This was pretty clever good job
I have to say, on first read, I thought the implication was that Pinkie was the Ponyeater, or at least one of them, disposing of a rival.
well, that does supply a motive of sorts…
yay new vocabulary!
well it seems to be working for her so far, and if anything she is proof that ponies do not get diabetes, so hooray!
now that is circumstantial evidence!
glad the ponies figured out an equivalent of Turducken that is just as unpleasant somehow
so true, love justifying things being in-character with canon events
ah the consequences of ponies naming themselves after common nouns
hehe, love that the party lab has a full suite of working scientific equipment
good scientific name for a Ponyeater. very nice ring to it!
oh hey not the first time i’ve read a story about Pinkie Pie concocting a dish made to look like a pony carcass
yay egg continuity
well, that certainly wraps all this up nicely!
ah, so the title is referring to the Piesweetcluckin’ in the shape of a pony, thus making it technically true, nice! and said invention sure is horrifying enough to be an original Pinkie Pie culinary creation. though the fact that nothing about the single large egg secretly being the Ponyeater giving Pinkie Pie pause during her cooking raises a lot of questions! and quite Pinkie Pie to not raise said questions herself as she goes off on a scheme to expose her suspected pony cannibal that is, in the end, not a very good scheme at all. rest in peace, book-defacing family-less old pony as well as exiled Kirin. (does the Ponyeater specifically target ponies having a bad time in life?)
Poor form with the Wikipedia link. Bad enough that you had to explain the joke, you didn’t even work the hyperlink into the text. I can’t recommend breaking tone and immersion in the same quip. The constant section breaks and bouncing between perspectives and time periods didn’t help either. When you have to explain what even happened in the comments, something’s gone awry, especially when the entry isn’t in the Experimental category. Sorry, but I just couldn’t sink my teeth into this one.
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Thank you for reading the story.
Noted that you dislike the Wikipedia link. Although I am sure a reasonable amount of other people also share the opinion, I will keep it for reasons stated below. I assume there may be two layers to the dislike (maybe there are different reasons?):
Assumption (1): Disfavor having definitional links in general?
My response: Not everyone has English as a first language and the link makes it easier for them to reference this relatively obscure term. It is a fallacy to assume someone will tab over to run a search on a term--the process needs to be made easy--rich text is amazing!
Assumption (2) Disfavor spelling out an entire link rather than highlighting the word and linking?
My response: I agree, this looks clunky. But, it was done intentionally. On phones, it is unclear where a link will lead as many lack a safe mouse-over function. I usually create highlights on words because full hyperlinks look odd; however, in this situation, I was concerned people may not realize I was linking a definition. I want people to know they are reading on a computer. We can do more than merely have a digital story behave like something in print!
I did not need to explain the story in the comments. I chose to explain it.
People will be skimming stories. I do not expect people to always read things extra-carefully as though they are in some literary analysis class
for fan fiction. Further, people are not likely to give the benefit of the doubt that a fan fiction author was intentional in making decisions. All of that makes sense since much fan fiction is not carefully written and people have limited time. 
The explanation is: (1) for the readers who either explicitly or implicitly requested a description and (2) for people who are interested to read but who, before reading, want to know there is a purpose behind story decisions.
I wanted people to know that indeed there is a reasoned puzzle to piece together--just as puzzle books will have a solution in the back, it is present for convenient checking. People can take away what gives them enjoyment from the story; however, the solution's keys are stated for those who are interested. For those who would rather unravel mysteries themselves, the story itself contains the conclusion explicitly spelled out in the final four paragraphs and readers can reason backwards to discover everything else.