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Nefarious Porpoise


Dolphin Mad Scientist. Also, respect trans people.

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Keep it going! This has my attention!

Dazzlings using hypnosis and brainwashing to seduce Sunset and the Humane 6, yes please. Eager to see more of this

That was hot, please keep up the good work.

Gotta say I'm especially interested to see how the Dazzlings go after Rarity.

Mind control and hypnosis focused smut, AND decent writing? Yes please!

This is amazing so far and I can’t wait to read more of it :pinkiehappy:

I'm a bit confused why the sirens need Sunset to explain Human/Pony Twilight. Do they not know Sunset and Twilight were ponies? I would have thought the presence of the elements and Principal Celestia would be enough context to guess what she meant.

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I'm a bit confused why the sirens need Sunset to explain Human/Pony Twilight. Do they not know Sunset and Twilight were ponies? I would have thought the presence of the elements and Principal Celestia would be enough context to guess what she meant.

My thought is that since they never met "Human Twilight" and don't know she's friends with the Rainbooms, it didn't really have any context for them until Sunset spilled it out. It could have also meant "Princess Twilight in her human form" or something, which would have been more relevant to their schemes.

The problem with a lot of hypnofics is that they try to achieve the end result too fast. This fic doggedly avoids that. The buildup is slow and sweet. Sunset is not quite there yet, and Adagio realizes this, meaning the antagonists are acting smart.

I do have just one really minor nit in part of the dialog:

Sunset chuckled and scratched the back of her head. “Dinner-slash-study meet with Human Twilight.”

She caught herself with a weak grin. “I mean, Twilight. A friend of mine.”

Since this is being said by the same person, this should be combined into one paragraph.

Really glad you're writing another hypno-fic.

Gotta say I love a good hypno fic. This should be goooood

Hmm. More than a few contrivances to get everything into place, but i can't argue with the results this far. Let's see where this goes from here.

Not gonna lie, I do kinda hope this has some kind of twist ending where the Dazzlings end up controlled before their scheme is fully complete.

Probably won't happen, but I figured I'd get it out there.

cant wait to see what later chapters are like

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Really, the biggest one is the idea that the Sirens were forgotten about completely. I'm willing to stretch my suspension of disbelief this far, if for no other reason than the quality of the writing. Also there are hints that Sunset almost remembered them, so perhaps this will be played up in later chapters, depending on whether the author is going for a "good" or "bad" ending.

This is very nice story, NP, and I’d like to see where it goes next.
However, I do pray that you don’t cut all of this off right at the end to give the Rainbooms their ‘good ending’, as I’ve seen numerous fics in the past play out that way, and it very much ruins them for me, no matter how good their start or even middle sections are.

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It was definitely a "fuck it we gotta start the fuckin story" way to get me out of the gate without making them wear disguises with false names or whatever. But attributing that kind of hazy-memory power to magic creatures who specialize in hypnosis, manipulation, and misdirection felt to me like an okay excuse author's prerogative. >_>


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This is very nice story, NP, and I’d like to see where it goes next.
However, I do pray that you don’t cut all of this off right at the end to give the Rainbooms their ‘good ending’, as I’ve seen numerous fics in the past play out that way, and it very much ruins them for me, no matter how good their start or even middle sections are.

Weirdly, I know some siren hypno-smuts and can't think of any off the top of my head with a good end (it's been a while, admittedly). At any rate, the ending is already planned and I hope you enjoy it but please note the lack of a 'dark' tag.

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Hmm well Sonata was able to fool Sunset do to a combination of glasses and a change in demeanor which could work. I think it also helps that as far as I recall in the movie Sunset never actually learned the Dazzlings names. Granted I feel this probably would've worked better if it took place before the events of Rainbow Rocks as that would remove the issue of Sunset knowing what the Dazzlings looked like. We see in Backstage Pass, Sunset pretty much immediately recognizes the Dazzlings at a glance, so unless said girls did a decent job disgusing themselves it is hard to believe she'd not recognize them.

An example of this is the story Songs and Seductions https://www.fimfiction.net/story/409568/songs-and-seductions. Here Adagio seduces Sunset before the events of Rainbow Rocks takes place, acting as a much more shy student while using her magic and her own allure to seduce and take control of Sunset.

Obviously another solution would be to wear wigs and disguises which in theory could work but I doubt the Dazzlings would be especially crazy about changing anything major about themselves most obviously their hair.

Still not a bad chapter overall and I'm sort of willing to suspend my disbelief, atleast with Sci-Twi being the next target that will be easier to believe since she never met the Dazzlings.

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Just so you know they're all gonna be like that. :p From the prologue:

Not that she could have caught them. The sirens were always careful, always smart, letting their magic haze image and memory. Even the Harmony-protected humans could only recall them to appear bland and forgettable – a far cry from their true nature.

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Eh, works for me I guess. I'm just hoping to see some more chapters soon. Sunset and Adagio didn't get to do too much in the first chapter, eager to see more .

Will we get a new chapter soon?

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Yep! If I can swing it I'll be releasing weekly until the fin.

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Sweet. Also if you ever need and editor or proofreader, let me know.

The source link lands on a NSFW image. If I understand the site rules, that can get the story pulled, so you may want to switch to a non-linked attribution instead to avoid the hassle.

Whew. That was nice! I haven't read many Hypnofics, but I was lured in by the cover art to give it a go, and I wasn't disappointed. Can't wait to read more

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You know, I thought I was in the clear because it went to a warning page first, but ya good idea let's not play with fire.

MMMMMM. That chapter.... I kinda hope RD and AJ, or maybe RD and Twilight, get maybe kidnapped into the spa as sort of an escalation of what happened here. Pinkie I can see dipping in and out because.... well.... it's Pinkie.

Hmm not too bad, Sunset's pretty much lost at this point and Rarity and Fluttershy following suit. Granted I always figured Rarity would probably be one of the more well endowed of the group, not huge but decently sized compared to some of the girls but eh that's just me.

Curious to see how RD and AJ go since they have the strongest will out of the group. Much harder to tame.

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I personally find it refreshing that some of the girls have realistically-sized breasts. I get rather tired of story after story that has them having ginormous boobs. Fluttershy often falls into this category more often than not. Simply put, the story doesn't need to have big tits all over he place to be good. The story has plenty of heat as it is without it.

This is very nicely written, with the sirens being very cautious and slowly warping the Rainbooms’ minds to their whim, with at least a millennium of practice.
It’d be hard to beat, especially at a moment’s notice by a character far younger than them. Hopefully they actually get what they want, as they’ve certainly put in the effort for it.

Also I noticed the Sirens seem to stick to relatively low key stuff when it comes to what they make their victims do. Will they get into more hardcore acts once they've captured everyone?

This story has my full attention. I can’t wait for more :ajsmug:

No surprise Sci-Twi picked up on something being wrong. Even if she isn't as assertive or confident as Regular Twilight she's not stupid and the stuff she points out proves the Dazzlings while they have centuries of experience are still so arrogant they didn't fully think this plan through since the number and website or lack there of are dead giveaways something fishy is up (no pun not intended).

Question of course is if Sci-Twi and AJ are smart enough to figure out something is up and do something about it before it's too late....assuming it isn't already.

It would be fun if they got princess twilight!! But transfer Sci-Twi!!! (Ha Ha)

She said it was to help drum up business, because they were still getting on their feet.

"Drumming up business."
"That's what she said."
"Despite all the complaints about them constantly being overbooked."
"Well, then she's doin' a bang-up job, ain't she?"
"You realize you're walking straight into a trap."
"Yeah, prob'ly, but how else is that fella behind th' keyboard gonna get me in a spa?"
"Rarity."
"... Dang it."

(All meant in good fun. I just couldn't resist pointing out that bit.)

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Well sure but the whole point is they're investigating because it's suspicious. >_>

Oh I have my fingers so crossed for a Siren win, haha, but hm with both Sci-Twi and AJ on the case, that'll be a hard one to pull off...

I forget, do the Rainbooms have their magic geodes in this? (If so, lucky they nabbed the mind reader first, but super strength will still be a bit of a problem)

Ooh. The plot thickens. Always happy to see horror movie protagonists acting with any degree of intelligence.

While the use of chloroform here is a bit cliched, congrats on actually doing the research and having it take a few minutes for AJ to react to it. It is not instantaneous like Hollywood seems to believe.

MMMM. Now that was a bit sensual to me. Can't wait for the others!

Comment posted by CrimsonCrystal77 deleted April 17th

Applejack being obviously compromised in her texts seems like a strange oversight in their otherwise pretty meticulous plot. But I guess it's hard to beat so much suspicion from targets you haven't got your hands on yet.

The plot thickens! I like that they were avle to get Applejack, and how. I wasn't sure how they'd be able to handle the farm girl! Great how the plot shifts from kinky sex to psychological thriller at the flick of a switch haha. I wonder if AJ is still resisting under there, or if her element of Honestly just makes her a bad tool for subterfuge.

Very nice hypnosis, it's hard to find a good tickling scene that doesn't just all caps HAHAHA for 3 paragraphs, this was really sexy and descriptive.

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