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Winter in Equestria. For most, it’s wonderful. For you however, your complete hatred of cold weather has you locked in your house unable to move without freezing to death. Fortunately for you, somepony decides to bring a little bit of warmth back into your life.

This is a short story to introduce myself to the community I have several bigger stories that I’m working on that I’ll finish eventually

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Very cute and wholesome.
Thank you for writing!

posted a link to this in the fluttershy thread on 4chan
should get you some more traffic

So cute i love my flutters 💛 but im not a fan of the swearing in this story

“no, fuck you”

hungry as shit

Momma didn’t raise no bitch.

I love you

I find the dialogue jarring. This story presents itself like it's supposed to be cute but your protagonist swears like a moody sailor. It spoils the mood.

I don't think many people are going to see statements like "Momma didn't raise no bitch" and think daww, how adorable!

Good fluffy story!

Quite the romantic and sweet story ya wrote here! Gotta say, very unique in the sense of dialogue and what not, but it's a very nice chance of pace! Overall, awesome stuff! Hope ya didn't mind, but I just had to make a reading of this lovely fic of yours!

Audio Linkyloo!: https://youtu.be/eE9XLvlnDIM

(I don't mean to offend anyone with this comment in any way!)

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Holy hell I’ve been subbed to you for like 4 months now I am honored to have you do a reading of my first fic! As for the dialogue and the language. I write my human characters as if I was in their place, and I swear a lot, so that is why Anon in this fic sounds like a sailor. Again thank you for making a reading of my fic! I am honored

11077201
Yeah, I’n exactly with this sentiment. If the idea was to make Anon have more character, this wasn’t the way to do it.

Very cute Fluttershy cuddles story.

11077201
I'm actually currently writing a short story that is sort of similar to this since my inspiration for it came from very cold nights, but it's going to be very different from this such as it not being a romance story, and yes, I have no intentions of profanity in that story. Yeah, when you actually picture a human hugging a pony which is supposed to be a wholesome and endearing moment, and the human says something like "Damn, bitch! You're one tender motherf****** pony!", that would not fit at all and it would be so distracting. :rainbowlaugh:

11077974
I see your point, but my reasoning with having as much profanity as there is is that I modeled Anon after myself, and I’m from the southern US, so swearing is just part of my dialogue. So yea that’s why this story has profanity

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I understand. But always remember, writing has mood, and you need to make dialogue match with the type of mood. You can still swear in a story, but just know when to tone it down during certain scenes.

11078081
Duly noted. Thanks for the advice! Other stories I’m working on are gonna be a lot more cuddly and a bit more violence-y so the profanity there should fit

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Both of those are great ideas for stories, so good luck to you. :twilightsmile:

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Meant to say a lot LESS cuddly but more cuddlefics are certainly on the mind

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Whichever is a good idea. Probably my most well received story I made on this site is a cuddle fanfic, but it's also a romance story too.

11077201
It is adorable because that is how some people deal with this type of situation, the reality makes me love this story even more

Yass! love it!

This is worthy of wielding thors hammer

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Thank you my friend. I’m glad you liked the story!

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