After finding an alicorn filly in the Uppercastes and having everypony she knew turn against her, Lucky Favor makes it her mission to take the filly across the lands of a pre-unified Equus to reach a safe haven in Equestria. But first, she has to hire a housecarla for the job. Who better than this "hyoo-men" she's heard so much about, and who just might be the first one she's met who does not want to kill her and the alicorn?
This story takes place in the RGRE (Reversed Gender Roles Equestria) universe and has been converted to prose from its original greentext state.
On hiatus for extensive rewrites.
Chapters (9)
What's greentext?
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Greentext is the writing style the people on the 4chan /mlp/ board use
Keep it up read the story on 4 chan can’t wait for the next chapter
I never see a "Preunification Anon" but have always enjoyed the concept in my head. Here's hoping it's something great. also your pfp is great
Read it on 4chan first. It's great, good job
I'm curious to see where this will go!
Really good so far. Now to go greentext hunting...
First chapter, 9000+ words, different story concept, character depth, delicious tension ..?
You have a like, a follow, and my full attention.
Oh snap, the mother to us all is revealed! Looking forward to reading this, and happy its staring off on a high note.
This story is very interesting so far, wasn't sure what I was expecting, but this is definitely exceeding it!
I really enjoy the tension and the grabs that make me want to read more and more.
Great story so far! I can't wait to read more.
Oh this looks like it could be quite a gem
Haven't started reading it yet, but I will once I get free time. The concept alone is very interesting.
I like this. I wholly approve despite the classic anon name, it doesn't detract from the story as a whole.
Wonderful start. And I didn't see any grammer, spelling, or punctuation errors.
I will be eagerly following this story.
Now this looks interesting.
Good world building. Lots of interesting subtleties that I suspect most readers will miss. Interesting characterizations with an unusual mix of personalities that aren't alerady overdone. And of course:
It's always nice to see some casters who aren't too stupid to see how easy it would be for a unicorn to deal with magic immunity.
Curious to see where this goes. It has all the makings of a long and epic journey.
I hope that is supposed to be Lucky Favor and not Red Letter or a whole different set of problems is about to pop up.
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...fixed
Hell of a shot on a fastish moving target and a friggin blowgun.
Well shit
Wow, another well done RGRE story.
Hopefully this one will survive the four chapter curse. So far it's one of the better "new" stories in a while.
The Monk
"Thirty minutes, Celestia. I was gone for thirty minutes," he said to her in an annoyed tone. "And in that time, Canterlot has been overrun with insect-like creatures, the groom is hypnotized and unable to perform his job, and you are being flung across your own throne room by...whatever that is. In thirty minutes." -Onomonopia
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>that I suspect most readers will miss.
I know I will
Where?
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Darn. It's fixed now
I normally avoid RGRE because they tend to feel like they are an excuse to have a harem or have all the mare's attracted to the MC. But so far it is done well enough that it is not just tolerable, but actually an interesting/integral part of the plot. Congrats, I never thought I'd say a story is better for being RGRE.
This is The Mandalorian isn't it?
I know this is just a re transcribe, but man, the pov of convos got a bit confusing at the beginning for me.
I don't know why, but I just really hate the use of the name "Anonymous." That said, I really like the story so far. I also hope Anon here gets to have a real name later in the story.
I will be honest, as interested as I am in this story this is hard to follow. Half the time I don't what what is even happening like I'm missing a few details.
Awesome
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use something like greasemonkey if it bothers you enough, anon -> james, anonymous -> james may, the rest works out well enough
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Oh, I do. I've thought about writing a script to do it on the fly for me, but haven't gotten around to it. Partly because I don't like changing or censoring another persons words, and partly because I'm lazy. So I occasionally toss a different name in as I read.
Also, my apologies for those I seemed to offend with my comment. I'm well aware that I'm a broken individual, and that my thoughts aren't always popular. For those who like the "Anon" naming scheme, great! There's nothing wrong with it. While what I think certainly doesn't matter, I am, never-the-less, happy for those of you who are happy with "Anon." I'm also aware that some authors do like feedback on specific thoughts their reader base has. If the author doesn't want my thoughts, good or bad, I can keep my mouth shut.
Again, my apologies for those I've offended.
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I understand. It doesn’t really bother me, but it is one of those little quirks that reminds me that I’m reading a story on here. Normally it’s not enough to pull me out, but it does almost feel… lazy? I think it feels more out of place when it is not a comedy.
That said, really enjoying this story. Just hope the next chapter comes out soon enough for me to be able to figure out what is going on.
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my view on the anon stories is that they allow you to soft 'reader insert' without being second person ei. "you hug the cute cuddly pony".
but really all it does for me is make a personified 4chan user start walking around /fim.
My only real gripe with it is that they tend to avoid describing the character at all possible costs, no face, no name. Feels like a cheap un-planned character. works okay if they aren't ever the 'camera' for the reader, and you only watch anon from another characters perspective... which loops back around to them having no descriptors to associate with them.
I don't mind if it's well written, but those tend to have developed characters, oh well.
Nice
I'd say that the best authors have the ability to imbue emotion into their work, and also have the audience feel said emotion.
This story is doing a good job if it so far. I already want two ponies to suffer a slow but inevitable death.
Poor Lucky she lost so much this chapter, I feel like she's nearing her breaking point soon, I know I would be.
It's cool. I didn't need to sleep tonight.
Are you releasing your chapters piecemeal or are you a speed demon? I can't believe you're churning out 9000+ word chapters this fast!
I love this story so far, keep up the good work!
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Autistic motivation, mainly
I think this is the first story that required me to listen to the Doom eternal soundtrack just to let out all the aggression I just built up in myself.
And that's saying something!
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Teach me your ways! 🤣
I wish i could write this fast! Is there a method to this?
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) while keeping consistency and Chekhov's Gun in mind. When I don't know exactly where to go, I use the story's overall arc or a recurring theme as a guideline. After the skeleton to the chapter's done I'll write the prose, but I'll still give myself enough creative freedom to change something if it contributes to the story or makes it more condensed, and I'll go back through and edit the earlier parts if it needs to be established beforehand. If I'm not feeling motivated I push myself to write just the dialogue or a sixth grader's rendition of the events, then go back through and edit it when I'm feeling more up to the task. It's always easier to revise and edit than write prose when you're not motivated.
It's nothing special and I certainly don't set out to make each chapter this long, but I have noticed a huge increase in productivity once I switched to a sort of mix between pantser and planner style. I'll put it here in case it helps you or anyone else.
I have a bare bones skeleton of the entire story written out (pardon the pun), so I know where it'll go and how it'll end up. I also have a few major scenes and character moments planned out; the ones that push the story in new directions or otherwise are integral to the plot. Once I get to each chapter I write its own skeleton and revise the crap out of it, adding whatever I think would make it more interesting (when in doubt throw in some juicy conflict
I'm sure there are better methods of writing, but this is what I find works for me
You know, Lucky nags a lot. Particularly about herself.
Monk
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This is a good way of doing it. I'm primarily a horror story writer, and I do my stories quite similarly.
I map out the story in bare bones, much like you. Then I cut my story into three acts. Then I work out two key scenes/confrontations per act and plug them in. From there, the writing is just getting the character from point-A to point-B. The fun comes in when you have to start shifting things around when the story doesn't go where you thought it would. You end up with fantastic scenes that no longer fit.
Yes...
Chekov's Gun
The Monk
"Thirty minutes, Celestia. I was gone for thirty minutes," he said to her in an annoyed tone. "And in that time, Canterlot has been overrun with insect-like creatures, the groom is hypnotized and unable to perform his job, and you are being flung across your own throne room by...whatever that is. In thirty minutes." -Onomonopia
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Thank you, I'll need to try this method out
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Yep.
My need for good reading material has been satiated... for the moment
Holy crap I love this so much. This might be wishful thinking, but did you draw inspiration from Mad Max: Fury Road by any chance?