Been around the Fandom since 2011, only now deciding to add to it. Here's hoping I continue to improve as a writer.
When I woke up this morning, I was expecting to curse at the sun for ruining my rest. Instead, the sun is cursing back at me for taking its place.
On the plus side, neither of us are okay with this turn of events.
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FINALLY! Someone who resolves this steaming pile of horseshit that people swear is a story genre, in one chapter. Well. Mostly. 99.999% of these stories don't. And they all come from newby writers too.
Oh well. Still worth it.
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This is less of a Displaced and more of a taking someone's place; a body swap, which is something that existed before the Displaced came to be where a human becomes a mlp, or takes their place.
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Still counts as Displaced in the true sense of the word. Being sent to another world? Especially when it wasn't by choice? That is Displaced. It's about the only thing the usual and done to death, cosplaying route gets right.
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But there are more requirements. They need to meet other Displaced, mention the multiverse, the void, etc, to make it an official displaced. You don't see humans in Equestria stories being counted Displaced despite being another world, do you?
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See. That kind of thinking is why the genre is the steaming pile of horseshit that it usually is. They're not in the site rules or requirements. So no. Displaced don't need those to fit into the genre properly.
People are just SO unoriginal that they default to doing those things. Except for a few. But most don't seem to.
Edit: Having just read the "rules" Displaced should work under, no wonder the genre is a steaming pile of horseshit. People think seem to think that this is the very definition of displaced. It's not.
Being removed from your home? On purpose or not? That's what the word means. Just look at the real world we live in. We have plenty of examples.
People being sent to Equestria? Yeah, that counts. But so do examples of ponies going to another world. Especially if they're forced to.
Equestria Girls is a textbook example of displaced. Even if Sunset did it on purpose
I love this story, I'd love to see it become a full series.
If the human gets tired of being a disembodied spirit, he should try to find a pony couple boning and attempt to possess the mare right at the moment of conception. Call dibs on the body of the baby and skip to the front of the line for reincarnation.
But why is Celestia being so relentlessly horrible in this story?
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It does feel like a good springboard to a series, yes.
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I second this. The story and idea was funny on it's own, but rather than playful, a tease, or a prankster etc. Celestia was downright unlikable and awful here. Her having a bit of fun and secretly enjoying people messing up is one thing but if the goal was to have a bit of comedy from her having some sadist tendencies the dial went past the point of being funny. Enjoyed much of the story and initial anger etc. but the whole, casually possibly killing a victim and sticking to the they held my body "hostage" afterwards by her soured the whole thing.
Luna having a new passenger instead of nightmare moon was a fun way to end things at least which helped.
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The adventures of Luna and her ghost human freind going through an avarage princess life while psyco celestia does her stuff
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A ton of Displaced stories are horseshit, yeah. But this genuinely isn't one of them. This is more of a standard HiE with a twist. And this isn't just me trying to argue semantics.
HiE's have literally been around since Megan and her brother in the very first MLP movie in 1986. The act of putting a human in the fantastical world of the ponies as an audience surrogate helps readers/viewers experience the world in a more in-depth way. It offers a certain level of wish-fulfillment, while simultaneously helping to explain the world from the perspective of a "fish-out-of-water" character. It also speaks to the human desire to live in a better world.
There are also a lot of more specific stories where the human takes the place of an established character, or body possession, which this is closer to. Stories like this often show the human desire to fit in, while outlying the struggle to maintain your individuality and human identity. Often times there is also a plot in the story to rescue the soul/mind of the person possessed because the author feels inherently guilty about stealing their body.
True displaced stories, where a human ends up in Equestria in the body of an overpowered fictional character, after buying an item at a convention... Those also speak to the desire to fit in in some way, but with the added benefit of being completely badass without having to actually work for or deserve your powers. It completely bypasses the personal growth required to gain the powers and as a result, often attracts younger, less talented authors who put less importance on the idea of working hard for what you get, and more on just how fun it would be to have the ability to shoot a freaking kamehameha out of their freaking hands.
So, a lot of (but not all) displaced stories do get a lot more upvotes and attention than their premise, writing, execution, or story realistically deserve just because it appeals to that widespread desire.
But not all displaced stories are bad, and not all stories with humans in them are displaced.
nid more bruh!
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A very fair analysis, good sir.
I am kinda stumped upon hearing "good displaced stories", however.
Since sorting by amount of likes/words is incredibly unreliable for the subject matter, any specifics you could name?
Hope there is more of this later.
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The whole genre is kind of a guilty pleasure, but five that I could personally recommend would be:
"Skeletor, Master of the Empire"
Bizzaro am not in Equestria" (discontinued but up for adoption)
"The Black Digi-Knight"
"Puppets of Tragedy"
"The Shipmare of Great Harmony"
These are all pretty well-written and actually allow for the displaced protagonist to either struggle with their power or occasionally get defeated because they aren't so over-the-top powerful that they can't face hardship.
A lot of other stuff is up to a persons personal taste or knowledge of the source material, but a few rules to look at to guess quality would be:
1.Read the first couple of chapters to check for grammar and spelling. If the author didn't put care into the small things like sentence structure, they probably didn't put much care into the bigger things like plot.
2. If the author gave the protag multple power sets, like Naruto Chakra and Dragonball Ki, the story will often be even more blatantly wish fulfillment and have to resort to contrived bullcrap to up the stakes to where you think he might lose.
3. Be careful of Displaced that spend too much time crossing over into other stories. The more time they spend doing that, the less time they spend developing their own stories and taking you out of the action. It can definitely be fun the first few times, but watching two displaced going through the obligatory dick-measuring contest of seeing whose stronger, done cooler shit, or boned more ladies gets really old, really fast.
I cannot help that I was brought to this world as the all-powerful Troll God, Alondro! Woe is me! My angst runneth over! As does my black mascara and eye-liner under my Darth Vader mask!
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Also, I have written the ONLY 'good' displaced fic! https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/600294/a-displeased-minific-d
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Replying to both of you on this since the two of you bring up a good point. The original ending point was back when the guards left, but that was long before I had even started to consider posting the story and was using it as a stress relief. When I chose to keep poking at the story, Celestia's role didn't really evolve beyond "stressed, paranoid, sun-god". I admit one the biggest faults in the story is just how vile Celestia comes across as all the way through. There were certainly ways to edit Celestia into a less sadistic character(in fact, that'd probably have made the story better for some), but I felt in doing so a bit of the charm was lost for me.
That said, I did kind of enjoy writing Celestia this way. Even if it's a disgusting misinterpretation of her.
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Just wondering, if you hate displaced stories so much, why do you read them?
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I like this little story. It's an interesting concept.
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To see if anyone can do something original with the idea, and not use every single genre cliche. All of this was original yes. Back when the very original Displaced story did it.
Now it feels like no one can think for themselves, and just copy-pastes. Changing just enough to not break the site rule against plagiarism.
Celestia is laughing like a psycho and Nightmare Moon is gone, replaced by the human... I think that the original Celestia might not have returned to her body...
Well, Luna seems to be happy with her new body mate. oh the shenanigans they could cause, with Luna having an out-of-body partner. Does make you wonder where Moony went though... she didn't switch places with the human did she? that would me Celly still didn't get he body back.
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The thought of Nightmare moon in Celestia's body... *shudders* let's hope she doesn't hold the sun hostage...
Will we get a follow up on what will happen to our traveller?
Meanwhile, nightmare moon finally gets a body in the form of equestria's first ent.
Unfortunately, it turns out trees dont acually have muscles.
Or brains.
So thats a problem that solves itself quite nicely
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In fairness, you spend six hours staring at your own body with no physical sensory input amd no ability to interact with the world around you or distract yourself from the fact youve been body snatched amd see how well you come out. If a part 2 were to happen(and assuming celestia hasnt been made into a nightmare puppet), I think we'd get a somewhat extreme apology once shes had the chance to sleep, eat, smell things, and just generally experience being alive again.
What did Celestia do that was actually that mean? She just seemed to be... kind of a jerk? Which isn't productive, but a tad understandable.
Please tell me there is going to be a sequel.
It's so nice to see Luna growing into her own as a full Diarch of Equestria, and adopting the modern solutions to the many problems the nation faces.
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I've heard cases where they don't even do that much. As 10729233 explains, the basic premise attracts the worst kinds of writer. And there's no worse kind of writer than the plagiarist.
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I did a spit take at this comment. Props!
So this did a lot better than I expected. When I posted this, I was anticipating somewhere in the range of 200-300 views and maybe a comment or two. Safe to say I was a little off on that. The positive reaction this received has blown me away and I am extremely grateful for everyone who's read, commented, or even glanced at the premise of Multidimensional Body Displacement. Thank you all again!
And, seeing as some of you are curious at the idea of a sequel, I can say it likely won't be the next story I submit if I do make a sequel. So keep your eyes peeled either on this page or my profile.
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Tagged all of you since you all specifically were wondering about a possible sequel and I don't like the look of double posting.
I'd love to see a sequel exploring the relationship between Luna and our "Entity" friend leading to a reveal that the nightmare possessed Celestia when she was in spirit form and didn't know it thus when Discord swapped our "Entity" friend with spirit Celestia the nightmare also got put into her body. It could explain why he never returned home or was put in somepony or thing else because of it. It could also explain why he gravitated to Luna instead of staying with Celestia. Maybe unbeknowest even to Discord he swapped more than just our "Entity" friend and Celestia.
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Not even so much a jerk as upset and strung out.
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sounds like you got a big ouchie, bro.
More than neat.
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Why are we booing him hes right!
given i think that this is definitely pretty poor from a writing standpoint, agressive pace, poor description, questionable cronology.
but the idea here is great, and it has great potential. As a standalone, its a pretty above average fic that dozes a lot of bad habits in the genre.
primarily it has a massive amount of growing room should the author/others chose to expand on it. though i must admit that our lovely anon was a bit of a scatterbrained non-character for half of it.
well, it is definitely a fic that I want to continue reading, I look forward to the continuation !!!
Hot damn do I need the adventures of ghost man in poltergeist of a pony princess, shit would be the cashest of monies
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The greatest modern convinces to greet Luna upon her return: "Let Twilight handle it."
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Wait,that means Celestia is now an Ent.