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This was certainly charming.
This story has a very interesting story line, the characters sound like they do in the show, and you sure do know a lot of big words. Great story!
Cute little fic. Adorable seeing Twilight trying to get her mentor's approval even so young.
The DAAWWWW is strong with this one.
Ah Twilight has always been such an adorkable little filly, and that's why we love her so much!
Two things:
1) Hnnnnnnn to the picture!
2) Good read, good read indeed.
That was short but good!
Just
Daaaawwww
You had me going. I thought she was trying to raise the moon!
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Ditto here. Least till the "move to the magic" bit; then I figured it out. Be rather awesome if she did move the moon though!
Come for the Pic, 'Cos who can deny Filly Twi anything. Stay for a delightful tale....
Short and sweet, that was pretty fun.
This is exceptionally adorable. Thank you for writing it.
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Was the 'k' in "adorkable" intentional? Because I SEE WUT U DID THAR!
DAWWWWW
I like world building, and I like this! *likes*
This was very enjoyable. You captured the characters very well and did an excellent job of describing a completely alien concept. Good job.
I loved this.
Especially the last lines, I almost died of adorableness.
Short and sweet
Incredibly captivating and well worded little story. This is how descriptions should be done. Makes you feel like you're right there.
"God is in the rain." --Alan Moore, V For Vendetta
I mean that in the metaphysical sense, not the religious. Though I suppose it could be religious.
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"Twilight" should be capitalized here.
You're missing a quote mark at the end of this paragraph.
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Thanks for catching those. By the way, can you tell me how you discovered this story? The number of likes and favorites for Rain tripled in the last 24 hours and I feel like I owe somebody a big thanks.
Speaking of which, a big thanks to all of you that read/liked/commented on my story. It feels amazing to know that my work is appreciated.
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I found it from this page.
Rarely do we see anyone putting this much effort into explaining how magic works. Most people use a few words like "she teleported".
So good job on that :)
That was cute, very cute.
1655135 Yeah, this sudden burst of attention has certainly caught three author off guard. I find it very amusing.
This was just delightful. Very short, and yet it did everything that it needed to. Brava.
well, I honestly wasn't expecting too much from under 1.5k words, but you certainly delivered! Good job.
Short, but awesome.
So. DAMN. CUTE. Thank you for an adorable experience.
Had to come back and read this again. Added to favorites.
Certainly worth reading. I loved how you portrayed filly Twilight.
I read this when it first came out.
Then, a few months later I saw someone mention it and read it again.
Then, I thought of it a couple months later and read it again.
Then, again either someone mentioned it or it occurred to me and I read it.
And so on.
There is nothing--I hope I do not offend, though I can't imagine how it won't--particularly original or marvelous about this story, and yet I keep stumbling back to it and liking it every time. You overuse "then," overuse Twilight's name, "and then" should really never appear as a phrase, and you misconjugate "to lay" (it should be "the secret lay," not "the secret lied"), and yet it all holds a particular gravity. Characterization is wonderful (Twilight's stubbornness, her nascent conflict with authority, Celestia's patience), the metaphor--to move like water--is tired yet highly appropriate and works despite itself, even the way character's are described--we are in Twilight's head, when she refers to Celestia's thought, it feels properly intersubjective, as if Twilight had simply assumed Celestia had only humored her. Ref, the paragraph beginning "Celestia cringed ..."--all works magnificently to bring a whole.
I really enjoyed this, and I need to read your other stories, and thank you for writing this almost two years ago. It is good, is what I'm trying to say.
So, teleportation is more like using magic to open a personal wormhole?
Dang...
And don't worry Twilight, the concept of moving a substantial object towards an insubstantial one hurts my head as well... (Unless the substantial object is just getting closer to the SOURCE of the insubstantial one!)
Cute little story, Filly!Twilight never fails to bring the dawwwws.
Think you meant for that to be "It had become a gate, made especially"