The Guard, the Bird, and the Monster

A recently hired member of the Crystal Guard makes a strange find while out on patrol. Perhaps he's equipped to handle it alone? Maybe?

Sometimes the wrong place at the wrong time just needs the right Pony.

This is an entry in the Snippet Series, an anthology of old oneshots I (and my good buddy Str8aura) wrote based around interesting pics I found. New ones will be posted every Thursday for the foreseeable future.

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redandready45

redandready45 #1 · Mar 19th, 2020 · · ·

Wow! You made me feel for a creature that turns others into stone. Of course, it ties into the theme of MLP.

“C’mon birdie,” Karat called back as he picked up his missing hoof guard and carried it into the climate-controlled biodome of the Crystal Empire. “First I unfroze you, then you unfroze me. That seems like a pretty good basis for a friendship, dontcha think? And friends don’t leave friends out in the cold.”

Aww!

Nitro Indigo

Nitro Indigo #2 · Mar 19th, 2020 · 2 · ·

They may have only been half birds, but they had all of his awe and wonder.

I like this sentence. It's a syntactic parallel!

This changes from Karat to the cockatrice's perspective too abruptly. Consider adding horizontal rules.

Darkonshadows

Darkonshadows #3 · Mar 19th, 2020 · · ·

Something like how Silverstream could have met Edith.

In any case I love fables...

While I think this a friendlier version of the snake and the farmer... I think it's also a bit like 'The scorpion and the frog' which is thought to be inspired by the same premise.

One version of this is trusting the snake to not bite you if you help it out of the cold to give it warmth. Don't trust in the nature of others too much, unless you know what you are dealing with.

Another version of the snake and farmer is them working out a deal. If you ever betray the snake, you will end up in poverty and with the likelihood of it taking revenge out on not you, but your family to hit you where it hurts. If you treat the snake well, you will receive riches and can broker a good relationship with what could be a life long friend.

This is also like the fisherman and his wife, which shares some similarity as well. Since one of the versions of the snake story involves someone's wife trying to get her husband to betray the snake after having made some good and fair deals, the snake hears of the inevitable betrayal and things didn't end well for everyone involved.

Casketbase77

Casketbase77 #4 · Mar 19th, 2020 · 4 · ·

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Truthfully, I was trying to come up with a story where the protagonist’s idealistic ignorance ends up being their most redeeming character trait. After going back and forth whether I wanted the “Farmer” or the “Viper” to be the dopey one, I eventually decided they both would have their own flavor of naïveté. Tossed in some duality themes with the bird/snake dichotomy and this was the result.

Ice Star