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The REAL Mister Pkmn


I'm a guy, and I was born the year the Pokémon company came into being, so yeah. Trixie is best pony, Luna is best Princess, Rainbow is best Mane 6 member, and Starlight is best reformed villain.

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Nightmare Moon. Discord. Chrysalis. Sombra. Tirek. Starlight Glimmer. The Pony of Shadows. The Storm King. Cozy Glow. And the final threat. Maestro Spectrum has tried many times over the cycles to try to break everyone free from the repetition. Through extensive study, and much experimentation, He crafted a seventh Element of Harmony- all in hopes to help the Heroes of Harmony. Though, for cycles upon cycles he has been ignored by the bearers, his knowledge of the outcome constantly questioned. It's come once again. The final confrontation. He knew that things would go as they always did- after all, why should they listen to somebody that made an artificial Element of Harmony successfully? However, he refused to go into the next cycle being the only one aware...

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Comments ( 17 )

If you would like an editor, I'd be interested, This is an interesting idea.

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I'd like that. I hope to have this fic update more often than once a month, but we'll see what happens.

As I was reading this "Maestro" kept giving me "Mary Sue" vibes but seeing as he has relived this life who knows how many times I'm willing to let it slide for now :trixieshiftleft:, also a lot of things the characters said/thought feels a bit robotic, but maybe that's just me :unsuresweetie:

one more thing!

Maestro glared at Celestia, and Twilight saw venom in his eyes. He whispered to himself. “Not for you. Never.” He shook it off, and looked to Luna with sympathy. “For her, partly. For Equestria, certainly. For myself, an experiment. Might be fun…”

The rest of the day went rather similarly to last time, with Celestia taking the Elements for safekeeping before she and Luna went back to Canterlot. Though, during the festivities of the Celebration, Twilight took Maestro aside. “You looked at Celestia with such venom… Why?”

try not to use the same word to describe the same thing twice, it stands out like a sore thumb :facehoof:

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Changed the second venom to disgust. If the characters feel a bit robotic, I'll see what I can do to fix that. Though, I think I'll keep it that way in the pre-reset section... just for contrast.

9382853
good; this story has potential, so I'd rather not see it get weighed down by these issues :pinkiesmile:. something that would help with the "Mary Sue" feeling I was getting would be to have Celestia still not as good as she seems to be, but not as bad as Maestro was implying; although that would be for later down the road, and that could mess something up you have planed, so I'm not sure about it... :unsuresweetie:

9383098
Yes, I do have plans- Plans that will hopefully tone down those feelings. It may take a few chapters to get that effect, though.

9383938
good to know; for now I'll try to power though it :derpytongue2:

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With help from an editor, I've cleaned up a few things in this prologue. It still probably has a few issues, but hopefully it looks better.

9391984
Just reread it, and yeah this is much better! Looking forward for the rest of this story :pinkiesmile:

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My big question to you though: Do the interactions still feel robotic? It's kinda hard to look past my bias. I want to know before I upload the true first chapter.

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trust me dude it's fine; if I had saw it like this the first time I probably would not have even said anything, and just wait for the other chapters.

although in the future you might want to slow the pace down a bit.

9393054
Pacing, huh? I'll see what happens with that in the first chapter. I write the way I feel makes sense, and most times I just leave it be for a little bit before taking another look. I sometimes do go back and adjust things that made sense at the time, but no longer seem to. Whatever pacing comes of that is what I stick with, usually.

interesting... also not sure if this was intentional or not but the Pacing felt better in this one

9405083
Really? I was a tad unsure myself of how the pacing felt. As for what comes in chapter two... Well, I don't know when I'll have that fleshed out.

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yeah it felt loads better; couldn't tell you anything specific that you did that did that though...

lots more details in this one, both in the form of vital information from Maestro that needed clearing up for the audience, and the narrator actually describing what is happening instead of just saying ______ happened, and on both accounts this is nice to see, keep it my dude :derpytongue2:

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Wow, thanks. I really wasn't sure. If you think it's good, that is a big relief.

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