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Galaxy Swril


Just another girl who reads peoples stories as well as writes original's and does art

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Soarin has had a crush on Rainbow Dash since the Royal wedding. When Rainbow joined the Wonderbolts they've become closer. Now Soarin can't get Rainbow Dash out of his head and it's having a minor effect on his job as the co-caption of the Wonderbolts. One day Soarin asks Rainbow Dash out on a date and he plans to tell her the truth. Will things turn out into a fairytale in the end or will the drama start?

WARNING: Swearing, sexual content and lots of fluff

Chapters (10)
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Comments ( 28 )

A little choppy around the edges with some word choice and structure; some good proofreading or a competent editor will straighten all this out and allow your story to flow more smoothly. Arguably, this is completely cliche — but, really, who doesn't love cliches when it comes to romance, even when they say they don't? :rainbowwild:

Still, it's plenty entertaining to read for your average MLP schmoe like me, so keep it up!

9219321
Thanks for the advice, I'm kinda new to this :pinkiehappy:

Look like I'm really gonna enjoy this story here.

Loved this chapter.:rainbowdetermined2:

9226018
I'm being honest with you, I started cracking up while writing that part :rainbowlaugh: I mean ALL of Fleetfoot's immature stuff

9226285
And I cracked up when I read that part too! I really love her funny personality.:rainbowlaugh:

Yeah the story is a little rushed (and a little cliche) but it's still good.

"Yea Pinkie nothing like that. 'F-R-I-E-N-D-S, that's how you f-spell 'friends'. F-R-I-E-N-D-S, get that shit inside your head" I replied.

Me:*sings the song and dances like a wierdo*

A little rush but I didn't mind it to much, but I love the childish nature of both Soarin and Dash have while on their date.:pinkiehappy:

Sooooooo






They're going back to her place *insert lenny face*
*cough* okay I'll go now

There were those few little moments in the story that had me laughing (the fact that AJ was not bothered by Soarin’s sad rejection story), not many stories have me doing that. As for someone who doesn’t really ship SoarinDash, I like this story!! :pinkiehappy:

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Aww thx so much! Stay tuned for the next few chapters coming out soon! :pinkiehappy:

"WHAT DO YOU MEAN YOU LEFT HER?!" Fleetfoot shouted.

Oh.....No 0_0

I think it's funny how pinkie pie reaches the fourth wall, I wonder if she can ever reach the fifth wall too. And I really do hope Soarin's plan works and otherwise Rainbow Dash is just going to reject him again and make it even worst because of her past. I love this already and liking it alot and excited to see what happens next.

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Glad u like it! Wait theres a fifth wall?

9401597
Yeah didn't you see the gala con episode of the cartoon pony saying "will Pinkie Pie ever reach the fifth wall" :pinkiehappy: part. You should go to Youtube and see it. :raritywink: Just type in Gala con and you'll see.:pinkiehappy:

"Come on Soarin! You've been acting like this for five days now. Six. Bloody. Celestia. God. Damn. Fucking. Days." Fleetfoot whined. Again Soarin moaned even louder and did nothing. "I KNOW YOU CAN HEAR US!"

This is one of the best lines in a story I have every read...Fleetfoot that was amazing :rainbowlaugh:

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I'm glad you liked it so much! :twilightblush:

Guess Dash doesn’t understand that rejection is a way of still hurting someone. Also chances he might do something stupid.

9432612
Maybe Soarin might do something stupid maybe he won't.... who knows :trixieshiftright:

OH.....MY........SWEET CELESTIA OF THE SUUUUN

Wait!.....so, that mean that all of Equestria know the new!?:pinkiegasp:

Imma cry now:fluttercry:

And if Dash parent know about this.......

OOF....

9439647
Dude.... you just gave me a good idea.

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