A bored delinquent and an exiled prodigy. When a MyStable profile called Anon-A-Miss sabotages all of Sunset's hard work and leaves her friendless except for a chance encounter, will she come back from it?
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HAHAHAHAHHAH!!!!!!! this chapter is alot funnyer then i thought !!!!
Cadence: *Whaps Celestia with a Newspaper* NO! Bad Auntie. That is MY job, not yours.
Another amazing chapter! It has been forever since I was this excited to read anything.
Well that settled the portal stuff nicely, though the Celestia scene was a bit over the top/out of nowhere, IMHO. Unless I just totally missed all the foreshadowing of it.
Best line in the chapter
That has to be, hands down, the best Celestia entering EqG world scene I've ever read in this site.
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I don't know if it was foreshadowed, but I think it snowballed well with the theme of the moment. I mean, the entire thing was about Sunset cutting ties and deciding that she was going to stay on Earth. Maybe not forever, but for the vast majority of her time at least. First she affirmed the reasons she was staying, and the reasons why she couldn't go. Then Twilight and Celestia came through and gave her their support, which further affirmed her decision. Aside from her injuries, they were the only reason she might have regretted staying on Earth, and by giving her their support they made sure she won't agonize over other people paying a price for her decision on the matter. They only person who has to pay now is Sunset, and that she can handle.
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FUCKING THIS.
Like. Hoooly shit. God damn. That was awesome.
anyone reading this comment. Don't hover over the spoiler. Go READ this story. It's so good. Don't spoil anything.
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I would prefer you mask that in spoilers if possible, so you don't spoil that appearance scene.
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Celestia is uncontrollably extra in pretty much everything I write, its part of her character in my head.
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That is a huge compliment given how many you must've read, thank you.
When's Sunset gonna see the rainbooms again?
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a couple chapters
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Keeping the humor fresh is part of what makes writing interesting for me, what was your favorite part, out of curiosity?
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Agreed. With something so magically incredible happening, I hope Adagio shows up later and asks about it.
Relatable content I’m also dyslexic it takes a lot of work to do things like writing adequately
My only regret is I already favorites this story, so I can't do it again for that Celestia scene.
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Near the end starting just before they went to 5he portal
You say “degenerates” like that’s a bad thing.
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Sorry about that, fixed it.
Holy Shit. Just holy shit.
Well this had a lot of surprises from Octavia & Vinyl becoming Sunset & Gilda's friends as well as finding out that Sunset always knew about them being in relationship, back when she was a total bitch to Princess Celestia's debut in the EQG world!
3 things I love about Celestia's debut, 1. She was freaking amazon! 2. Her tearful reunion with Sunset aka her beloved daughter. & 3. She decided to engage Sunset & Gilda, which Gilda's reaction was hilarious!
Glorious job I-A-M, can't wait for the next chapter for the obvious reason!
"girlfriend while sitting her in her lap, cuddled"
"girlfriend while sitting in her lap, cuddled"?
"Sunflower,” Gilda shoots back with a wry grin."
"Sunflower,” Gilda shot back with a wry grin."?
"she responded glancing over to the polished metal"
"she responded, glancing over to the polished metal"?
"to possess an understand of syntax and"
"to possess an understanding of syntax and"?
"Gilda said, he voice uncharacteristically soft."
"Gilda said, her voice uncharacteristically soft."?
"shoulders lever herself up and stare the bigger"
"shoulders to lever herself up and stare the bigger"?
"It wasn’t you’re responsibility to stand up for me"
"It wasn’t your responsibility to stand up for me"?
"as she punched her number ino the contacts"
"as she punched her number into the contacts"?
"voice from Gilda’s shoulder as her years subsided"
"voice from Gilda’s shoulder as her tears subsided"?
"holding a couple of thermos’"
"holding a couple of thermoses"?
"to take a sip, Gilda, screwed it back on and"
"to take a sip, Gilda screwed it back on and"?
"Where does it refill it from?"
"Where does it refill from?"?
"sorry Gil, I don’t really have answer right now"
"sorry Gil, I don’t really have an answer right now"?
"and I just wanna know you’re gonna okay, savvy"
"and I just wanna know you’re gonna be okay, savvy"?
"Gilda asked, even know that seeing Sunset that seldom"
"Gilda asked, even knowing that seeing Sunset that seldom"?
"Sunset takes a deep drag of her cigarette as she considered"
"Sunset took a deep drag of her cigarette as she considered"?
"tears as she and reached out for Gilda again"
Missing words?
"attractive, bubbly sound that honestly very pretty"
"attractive, bubbly sound that was honestly very pretty"?
"Her confusion last right up until the portal"
"Her confusion lasted right up until the portal"?
"The silence last for another half hour"
"The silence lasted for another half hour"?
"Grimaced, Sunset scoffed and smacked the lever"
"Grimacing, Sunset scoffed and smacked the lever"?
"taking up her usually position behind Sunset"
"taking up her usual position behind Sunset"?
"Shimmer the Unicorn prodigy, she was gone forever."
"Shimmer the Unicorn prodigy; she was gone forever."?
And a good chapter, with some things nicely settled and others making good progress. :)
But there is that issue about where the magic refills from, and what happens if it doesn't. Perhaps it might be worthwhile talking to the sirens about that, actually.
Oh, and the walk home seems to have been mostly skipped over; was it just, while cold, really uneventful?
Yesssssssssssssssssssssssss! I'm so glad that Celestia come across as a Greek goddess like being. So much fucking awesome. God this story makes me feel so good.
Loved your depiction of Celestia. Fuck awesomeI know I'll be in the minority here but I think you should just let It fade to black. This story does not need a sex scene.
The chapter was perfect i loved every moment of it i love sunset reasons for why she will stay it was perfect and l love tia was not in any way human that just wow
God damn it all these chapters are amazing
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Well that is why it's a separate chapter, personally one of the reasons I'm writing this is to push my literary skills, because I've never written a sex scene before. That and I've been beating on Sunset for a long time so felt like giving her this.
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Glad to hear it, this is the chapter where I was essentially gonna 'explain' it all, so I was really looking forward to people finally reading it.
Hot dam I love this story it's is so going to the bucket list shelf once it's done
Question: Why can't they go to Equestria for a vacation, get fixed up and come back?
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So I had thought it was clear, but the short answer is that in order for her to have her legs back on earth, Sunset would have to go to Equestria and then wait 5+ years for her human template to clear so she could come through with a new human body based on her current pony form.
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It was clear to me you said it in the actual chapter multiple times
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I'm not talking punks or thugs but you have a point. In the end it would come down to physical strength and experience fighting and since the is pre legend of everfree the strength would be fairly evenly matched.
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Thank you much for your dedication to cleaning up my mistakes
Also, yes, the walk back was just quiet.
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So why not do it and reconnect when the time passed. Sorry this just feels like a choice made for plot reasons then actual logic. Anyone of their remaining friends would get it and support it and wait for their return.
This issues is the one real issue I have in this whole story.
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First of all I thank you for asking that. It had been my problem too and you asking made me think about it more carefully. I came up with three reasons. Mind you those come from me not having read further than here.
1. Sunset hates her old self and literally fears returning to it so much that she has night terrors from it. And her old self became that way by "taking the easy way out". Want to be a princess? Demand it. Having problems at home? Run away. Need to let off some steam? Easiest target Fluttershy. (That may have had other reasons too but she hadn't been aware of them at the time.) Want to be the most powerful being in the world? Take magic into a magicless world.
There's literally no easier way out of being paralyzed than to go home and let magic fix it. In Sunsets mind going through that portal is equivalent to going back to her old self. I know that isn't logical or even true but neither matter, because it makes sense to Sunset and that is all that counts. In her, admittedly twisted, mindset going through that portal is like bullying Fluttershy again. She hates that. So, no, she asserts dominance over that part of herself and actively chooses the harder path.
I hope I could put my thoughts into words well enough.
2. Multiple times in the story has Sunset compared losing her legs with losing her magic. She currently considers herself a cripple twice over. And going back to Equestria would not only restore the former but also the latter. She has no reason to believe that, if she takes the step to remove the first half of her problem, incidentally fixing both parts, that she would take that step back to get back that second half of the problem. In short she fears she won't go back to becoming a magical "cripple" after having gotten the "cure" and personally I agree with that assessment. Who would? And at this point the argument loops back to either 1. or 3. or both. She doesn't want to stay away from the human world.
3. In short FRIENDSHIP. Sunset has managed something that she hadn't before: she made friends by herself. In Equestria she was a bitch. Before the fall formal she was the bitch. Afterwards she was a charity case. She never had the opportunity to make friends (by herself). Abandoning new ones she just made herself even for "just" 5 years is like abandoning an achievement, especially one that Twilight (and Celestia) would approve of. It may be difficult or impossible to understand for you and me but neither of us lives in the MLP universe, where "friendship is magic" is taken literally and neither of us is a pony and I think ponies are a lot more into that herd instinct than us humans. Basically leaving friends behind is not something she can do, especially considering how last time she fled through a portal has turned out (it didn't go as planned).
In the end it was a plot driven decision, yes, but it makes sense in the context of the fic if you think about it. It may not be as logical a decision from our perspective but it fits from Sunsets.
I can't speak for I-A-M, but that is my take on it.
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So in short, her entire decisionmaking process is based off of unstable, mostly misconcerted emotion instead of any shred of logicism.
That seems about right.
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I.e. she's a teenager.
Nailed it.
Having Gilda be dyslexic makes a lot of sense. She's better at doing things hands on then sitting in a chair taking notes for six hours a day. I'm they same way although I have a much easier time reading I use the fanfiction.net app and there is actually a way to set the writing so people with dyslexia can read it easier I can read for a longer time with out the words jumbling up and making it hard to read. I'd rather go out and work on a building project or help switch tires then reading and rereading pages of textbooks because im not retaining any of the Information. But then I forget everything I have so much on my mind all the time that I just forget everything. I have a good imagination and can think of good story's but it's the righting part that brings me down as I have a lot of trouble with grammer. I'm also like Gilda In the sense that I'm also bad at articulating my feeling wether they're positive or negative.
My Old-fashioned tradition may be a little rusty but I'm pretty sure that means betrothed I swear to God I have a busted a gut from that
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I deeply approve of Celestia's extra-ness.
Princess Celestia is the best.
Celestia grinned widely and a little mischievously. “Good, I’m happy to hear it, also it’s ‘Your Highness’, ‘Majesty’ is the honorific for a King or Queen.” Turning back to Sunset who was staring at her adoptive mother with naked disbelief, and Celestia smiled. “I can’t stay, this world is not for a being like me, and I risk a great deal stepping through even for a moment. But come visit me soon, my beloved student.”
Sci-Twi is gonna have a field day.
Love the brand of humor in this fic