A bored delinquent and an exiled prodigy. When a MyStable profile called Anon-A-Miss sabotages all of Sunset's hard work and leaves her friendless except for a chance encounter, will she come back from it?
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It's interesting to see the parallels between Twi and Zee's relationship and Gilda and Sunset's.
Oh, I cannot see Twilight and Zee's relationship ending well...
I see a storm coming captn'
*wince* Uh-oh...
Hoo boy... double uh-oh.
Seriously though, great chapter! The tension is immense!
I love zee having such a different dialect from Gilda it's amazing to read and her being a good yin yang is great literary work my friend!
Dammit man, a thousand more words, a thousand more was all that you needed to bring this story up to 200k D: Or 957 words if you wanna be a cheeky twat
We now have our main antagonist, folks!
I-A-M: CAPTAIN!!!
Readers: Y-Yes?
I-A-M: LOOK!!!
*Another powerful artifact, most likely from Equestria*
*Que Dark Souls 3 OST: Nameless king*
No sex scene between Twi and Zee?
So, See seems pretty toxic for Twi.
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Yeah, in case it was ambiguous, Twi & Zee are not an example of a healthy and positive relationship.
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Nope: one, because they're underage, and two, this isn't a 'sex' story, it's just got a sex scene in it, that's all. Not sure I'm even ever gonna do another one.
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Oh trust me, it wasn't. It seemed pretty on the nose for me. And in a way, I'm kinda glad you made it so obvious. It provides a nice contrast to her and Gilda's relationship and how what she and Sunset have is much healthier
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Zee's voice is insanely clear in my head, so writing is a lot of fun, but at the same time harrowing because holy crap is a Yorkshire accent nightmarish to translate into written word without it all just falling apart into illegibility.
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Gonna be completely honest with you. I read her parts out loud just so I can practice my accents to mess with the drive through attendance. Because nothing makes people go wtf than hearing a Yorkshire accent and seeing a 6'1'' Mexican from in the middle of SC picking up their #3 combo.
Goddamn the Storm King is an utter asshole. I've sister he made believe the younger was dead. The other, that the older has betrayed her and left her dead.
And it's most likely going to end not in blood, but ashes and sadness. I really doubt Sunset would let Zee hurt Gilda, and in the end deadly force might be the choice.
Also, Zee isn't as scary as Twilight is. Because Twilight is into it not because of revenge for a loved one (no matter how wicked that one is), but because her criminal girlfriend wants. And she's willing to go just as deep.
I just hope Gilda and Sunset don't ge broken by the end
Not much related, is there any special reason for Sunset not to make her life easier with magic, e Just haven't seen it or is she not doing in order to adapt without?
"vanished in a suddenly flood of fire"
"vanished in a sudden flood of fire"?
"Gilda grip tightened further and Gilda clenched in her teeth in anger"
"Gilda's grip tightened further and she clenched her teeth in anger"?
"endure almost anything to get it at it"
"endure almost anything to get at it"?
"her down on the the seat of"
"her down on the seat of"?
"think she even known I had a sister"
"think she even knew I had a sister"?
"so the no one looked too hard"
"so no one looked too hard"?
"big metal case that I put it in this titanium"
"big metal case that I put in this titanium"?
"he took me and couple of other"
"he took me and a couple of other"?
"staring it and thinkin"
"staring at it and thinkin"?
"agreed,” Susnet said, “now"
"agreed,” Sunset said, “now"?
"looking up at Gilda sympathy in her eyes"
"looking up at Gilda, sympathy in her eyes"?
"all while smile warmly up"
"all while smiling warmly up"?
"a random passin’ though"
"a random passin’ thought"?
"side and set in on her lap"
"side and set it on her lap"?
"Time to go talk my shit-head gang boss"
"Time to go talk to my shit-head gang boss"?
"kind of organizational system to Zee had"
"kind of organizational system Zee had"?
"smiling setting a small bowl with"
"smiling and setting out a small bowl with"?
"Zee let the flask she’d had a deathgrip on clatter to the ground, sloshing slightly inside the metal well"
What does "metal well" mean here?
"“No, I won’t,” Twilight firmly"
"“No, I won’t,” Twilight said firmly"?
"been crushing on your for more than"
"been crushing on you for more than"?
"straightened her glass and glared"
"straightened her glasses and glared"?
"or in some case ‘heavens’"
"or in some cases ‘heavens’"?
"to tune of a few cracks"
"to a tune of a few cracks" or "to the tune of a few cracks"?
"around Twilight pulling the covers"
"around Twilight and pulling the covers"?
"said with grin, moving to to press her"
"said with a grin, moving to press her"?
"wide-eyed at Twilight chuckled nervously"
"wide-eyed as Twilight chuckled nervously"?
"shuffled around rolled off of the couch"
"shuffled around and rolled off of the couch"?
"turning back Twilight"
"turning back to Twilight"?
"and subdued, she’d curled up"
"and subdued; she’d curled up"?
"Of her original outfit all she could actually find were her socks"
Didn't she just spot the shirt, though?
"Zee said with laugh."
"Zee said with a laugh."?
"Y’gonna driver me fuckin’ bonkers"
"Y’gonna drive me fuckin’ bonkers"?
"So did everyone guess that part?"
I guessed it, but only a bit after Pawnee was revealed as Zee.
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"Yeah, in case it was ambiguous, Twi & Zee are not an example of a healthy and positive relationship."
Naaah, that's all in how you look at it. I'm sure the Storm King, for instance, will, when he finds out about it, reassure them that it's very healthy and positive! I mean, for him, of course, but isn't that what really matters? Except of course that whole thing about them thinking they can go legit, not very healthy and positive for him at all, but I'm sure he could think of something for that...
After this chapter I can't help but think with that voice/tone twi's gf uses
Well I'll be damn, despite only being together (in person) for a for short, Twilight & Zee's relationship is just as strong & lovely as Sunset & Glida's!
But now, it looks like we're about to get in needy greedy with Sunset & Glida heading to see "daddy dearest" as well as Twilight gonna be helping Zee on her mission! If business wasn't picked up before, it is now!
P.S. Did Twilight & Zee have off scene sex?
damn it
now im hoping twilight and Pawnee will be happy.
This story is just so wonderfully gay
I might be very late to asking this but I may have a small idea for when they make it to Las Pegasus. Plz hear me out.
i like how we never see the diamond dogs anymore.....gilda got to them huh?
i mean she can fly....so...yeah.
not to mention they have sirens as back up. pretty sure adagio knows how to hide a body
Poor See, so used by the King
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Fuck, that ending got me super jealous of Zee. God what I'd do to see Twilight being so adorable/adorasexy.
Twi and Zee's relationship is so god damn unhealthy but I can't help but love the contrast between the two. At the very least, Zee did explain to Twilight what she was getting into. Even if it's possibly manipulative and malevolent to drop it so sympathetically like she did. God I hope they come out of this okay.
Them 'having sex on the first date' is kind of funny but totally understandable. I made the same joke in my long-distance relationship. You've known each other for so long; you're not strangers.
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Yeah zee is probably the first person close to her age be nice to her in forever so she ignores anything bad to keep the only person in her age group who is nice to her. The adults in her life might care but they can't take the place of friends her age and when the choices one vs none probably anyone would pick the one even if means trouble.