In Tartarus, a rather unusual situation unfolds. After being banished to the prison plane of Equestria, an unusual entity comes to a horrifying realization. He should not be here, he’s a good guy!
Sure he caused some havoc, but he was trying to protect trees and forests from development. Yes he crashed a few parties, but the silverware didn't match. Indeed, it was he who stole all the socks that didn't match, but it was an affront and crime against fashion. Okay maybe invading Canterlot in order to deliver a letter was a bit much, but it was an important letter.
After all, he really needed to know who was best princess.
Nothing he did was all that evil, he really was trying to be good. How could he be a villain? Obviously this is just a misunderstanding, right?
(A one off humorous one shot)
Cartoon cover art is a PT test piece about Tartarus I made for physical therapy. I know it’s not that great!
This is pretty great. I'd def read more if you ever decided to make that series.
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it.
I do plan on doing more stories in this series, after my current story backlog is slightly better.
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Ocer already?
But I LIKED reading this.
Can I have just 1 morechapter?
I once read a novel where the "evil" king was evicting peasants for their land and arresting anyone who objected and sending them to rehabilitation camps. A band of heroes emerges to fight him.
At the end you discover he was clearing villages and individuals from the flood plain areas by the river in order to build a dam. The dam would prevent lives and property being lost every spring and to provide irrigation all year round. And the rehabilitation camps were temporary villages where his advisers, all foreigners from a wealthier and more advanced country, were teaching the farmers how irrigation farming worked and ways to protect the soil from washing away.
And trying to retrain flour mill workers and owners to new jobs as the dam's flour mill easily replaces them -- and reduces taxes by charging less than what the smaller mills charged (economy of scale).
And protesters were arrested for the same reasons they are here: they were creating a disturbance and causing riots and property damage to honest merchants and tax-paying citizens in the capital!
Beautiful writing! In all truth any sequel I'd read just for the Celestia-Forsaken humor xD
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I need to read that story now. If you ever remember what it’s called I’d love to know.
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A sequel will be happening, after I get a few other works finished first. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Glen Gorewood
No, not the clowns!
A genuine good read. Fun story, and great break for inbetweening all the major fics anyone could read.
Reminds me that I should work on my "Incoherent Mess" series. I called my insane human Al Harrington and use an Edward Lear style to his speech. Here's hoping you get way more views though! I always end up making my fics T or M. Should try to write an E title.
P.S. I do all my own cover art, so I get it. Your cover art is great though, fits the home spun feel of fics. Don't harsh your own mellow.
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I’m glad that you liked it.
Al Harrington made me think Honor Harrington immediately. And he speaks like Edward Lear? That sounds quite interesting. I’ll look into this “Incoherent Mess” over the weekend. As for fic titles, why not go for one that starts with W? Or Z? Or the often ignored K. I hope your Incoherent Mess series gets more views too.
The cover art comment is because I had a recent health issue and I’m in PT right now to recover my ability to draw. It’s not the issue of making my own, it’s the issue of “I used to be good at this and now I am not as good because health issues”. Though I’ll admit, my not that great cover art does catch the feel this story fairly well. It’s cool that you do your own cover art as well.
Glen Gorewood
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If he didn't bother to explain that and convince people his plans were sound, that's his own damn fault, honestly.
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And since when does ANY feudal King condescend to tell the peasants what his plans are? Plus, even if he wanted to, how would he do it? No newspapers, no radio, no mass communication of any kind. Town Criers were it -- and not every village or town had one. And that doesn't mean any peasant would believe him, now does it?
Heck, when the US and Mexican governments were eradicating Hoof-and-Mouth disease in the North Americas ( in 1929) by going to every ranch and farm on the continent and killing infected animals they STILL had to face off against armed peasants. Especially when the infected cattle looked perfectly healthy, Plus, the government was offering replacement cattle and cash payments -- and the peasants STILL didn't believe them.
And feudal societies are not known for their generous interpretations of 'civil rights'. Most considered peasants to be little more than property (see Russia where a peasant running away from his farm was subject to execution). To expect a feudal king to somehow ignore that societal upbringing and act in a modern-day civilized manner is beyond anyone's suspension of disbelief. It would be like writing a story where slave-owners paid their slaves for their labor -- totally unbelievable. You don't pay property.
The merchant-families might be more agreeable, but then there's the question of trust. Do the think that the nobles and king are REALLY going to reimburse them, even if they say so? Laws about Eminent Domain are a modern invention.
Glad I found this
This really cracked me up.
I love it, especially since it appears that denizens of Equestria are capable of being more dangerous than those that have to be imprisoned in Tartarus. I also like lazylestia, the entire solution of Tartarus for unreformable villains of the second variety just screams "I'm so lazy I can't even think about improving conditions for those who are delusional while also having trained employees to help take care of them because they're clearly not experiencing reality in a meaningful way and might hurt themselves, so I'll just throw them in the same prison that the worst villains in existence are in!" which as a whole is incredibly comedic and really helps the setting.
Watch Ted legitimately be a God-Tier entity.
WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT TO TACOS?!
I feel bad for Ted. Also, I didn't see anywhere that he read the words inside the guidebook. What if he opens it and it looks empty to him?
Then again that could be just a myth, since there's no way to see it without first being banished.