Ponyville is a quiet town, no murders or criminal activity of the like... Most of the time. But that's what the Pony in the Gray Trilby, AKA Philip Finder is for. With the skills of Sherlock Holmes, no case is left unsolved for him. But this time, he might need a little bit of help when somepony starts kidnapping ponies for a sinister purpose...
The Doctor's in a bad place. His best friend's left him, and he's traveling the universe to give it a fare-well tour before retirement. Might become a bee-keeper, worked out for that detective after all. But now he's crash landed in an Equestria that's different than the one he's used to and is about to get embroiled in a mystery that involves two old foes...
Name provided by Magic Step and Philip Finder belongs to PonyJosiah13 so credit where credit is due. Edited by mouthofmush and Ponyjosiah13.
Not bad Rarity not bad. I do wonder what the relationship is between Twilight and the Doctor is like?
Wait a second. You rewrite this story as a one shot. Why?
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Point taken. Of course you won't see me using profanity in any of my stories.
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Indeed it is.
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Well, to be honest writing it, I found it worked better as a one-shot instead of a multi-chaptered story, simple as that.
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Yeah, I wanted to leave that open-ended really. As for Rarity writing something like this, I noticed it's usually Twilight or Rainbow writing fanfiction so I wanted to subvert the usual trends. (Plus, this way it allows me deal with any continuity errors that arise from both Phil and the Doctor's sides of things.)
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Okay, though now that I had the time to finish reading it, I find some two major problems with that.
One, the part just after you stop when it was a multi chapter felt rush. Especially during the confrontation with Baldwr.
Two, the last segment reveals this all story was a Noir fanfic from Rarity, but it doesn't fit at all. Because she describe the eleventh Doctor while you stating he's still the tenth. It's really far-fetched, even when putting the notion of time travel in the bask, that she would be privy of some much detail about the Doctor when we know he never reveal this much to any of his companion.
Overall it's still a good story, it already was before, but as I said Rarity's segment fits really poorly when you know about the context of the stories this one originally ties.
Two more things. The pony Red Lightning, his name is the same as first red Turbo zord from Power Rangers Turbo. Was that an intentional reference or a coincidence?
Bradwr's brother, first presented you name him Elias, but when mention afterwards you named him Eilas. Might want correct this.
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Yeah, I admit it was rushed a little. Honestly, I wanted to bring in someone to help me with the fight scenes, but all the people I knew were busy with their own work or lives so I thought I'd be kind to them and just go for it myself. (Also, thanks for catching the naming errors. My fault, though in my defense Elias is a rather hard name to get right. Not exactly common.)
As for Rarity's segment, this being a fanfic she wrote she was just speculating with Eleven might be like in her mind. After all, Eleven did use some of Ten's demeanor and one of his catchphrases, namely "I'm sorry. I'm so sorry."
As for Red Lightning's name, no that wasn't intentional. It didn't even cross my mind with what he shared the name with until now that you mentioned it honestly. Lastly, that last little error of the Doctor saying he was the King of Okay, that actually was what I meant for him to say. Not kind of okay, but King of Okay. He's used that phrase once before in one of his episodes, to Amy Pond if I remember correctly.
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Okay, I earnestly apologize for what I've initially said previously and only said it in not reading the entire story. But now that I actually have, I now have a solid and positive opinion on it.
Okay, I've read the entire story now and I honestly think it's rather amusing that Philip Finder and the Doctor have developed an odd and vitriolic friendship here. Kind like that between Superman and Batman in the DC universe.
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Wasn't actually going for that kind of comparison, even if I was going for the vitriolic part, but now that you bring it up, they are kinda similar to Batman and Superman in some aspects.
And as for the cursing, quite a few stories on here, mine included, have a lot worse in language.
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It's my choice to do so.