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Vivid Syntax

Convention Runner, Statistician, and lover of all things Soarburn


Big Mac and Sugar Belle have been dating for a few month now. One morning, Big Mac seems more contemplative than usual, and Sugar Belle asks what's on his mind.

Hugging his special somepony close, Big Mac recounts the dream he had last night.

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really sweet. formatting was interesting, but not in a bad way.

Dan #3 · Jun 3rd, 2017 · · ·

Luna, you silly scamp.

This was short and sweet.
The formatting felt very intuitive for the ongoing dialogue, leaving little doubt as to who was speaking which part.
I keep being amazed by how personal and involved your stories generally feel.
Either we are the characters in question, or simply experiencing the moment with them.
It's your writing style it seems that keeps the reader feels involved.
I can't help but be reminded of the intros to Sex and the city or Grey's Anatomy, that share a similar quality.
Thanks for sharing this story ^^

One factor your missing.

Did the do the thing before or after?

Awwww! The adorabetus is strong with this one.

"Adorabetus" is my new favorite word. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm sorry, but I don't understand: what thing?

You know 'the thing' *nudge, nudge wink, wink*

Gotcha. The answer is, of course, both before and after. :rainbowlaugh:

I really like how you wrote this! With Big Mac narrating and Sugar Belle making a comment as he talks. Very creative! And also it's very sweet and very in-character! :rainbowkiss: It's nice to see some people are giving this couple a chance even if it was out of the blue. It's too bad there aren't any more fanfictions like this, so I hope you'll keep writing more SugarMac stories! :pinkiehappy: Great job on a great story.

Thanks for the feedback, CartoonNerd! I really appreciate it! :pinkiehappy:

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