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While practicing a new trick for the Wonderbolts, Rainbow Dash crashes into the Everfree. After a desperate search fails to find her, Rainbow's friends wonder if they will ever see the Wonderbolt again. After sixteen days, a tired, worn and wounded Dash exits the forest.
What happened to her during those fifteen days?
How did she survive while lost in the wilderness?
And why did she rush back into the Everfree the day after escaping it?
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Extremely good start.
This seems a bit too fast paced, but its good
Will Scootaloo be playing any major role in this story?
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At this point it is unlikely.
Not bad mate, keep 'em coming.
Can't wait to see how the story progresses.
Especially with a language barrier that can't be overcome in the time period set by the story premise (16-17 days is barely enough to learn word association for the most basic of things like "food", "drink", "shelter", "danger", names, and other things of that nature.
"I gotta pee" is going to be top of that list.
This fic is absolutely wonderful.
My one and only complaint about it is that the chapters are so short. 
Good HiE fics are one of my ~relatively few~ vices, and this is top quality stuff, but it's barely enough to keep me from going into withdrawal!
Not starting out bad, although I'm really not sure how you'll stretch that concept out to fifteen days without needing to have some outright silly things happen to the two of them.
Some chase music to set the mood:
This is a singe paragraph :L
Possibly two, but still to short.
Short but funny......I love it
...but next time make it longer ... If it not a problem 
Short and sweet. Is this really the whole day?
To me, this story is a drug.
(I think my dealer is trying to ween me off it!)
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Some days not much happens
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Don't do it. Get your highs here!
Found a few mistakes
instead he move on to the next part of his project, collecting as much rainwater as he could.
*Moved
Sitting near the fire, he absently poke at it with a stick,
*Poked
Oho, this is an interesting little gem. Looking forward to reading more!
Hmmmmm!
Pretty nice story you've got here, both the concept as well as the execution. I rather like how you haven't tried to show Strider's thoughts on what is happening, and have instead turned him into this background entity. He is in a way the center of the story, and yet he is hardly even a character, more like a presence. I hope you keep the story this way, and if you ever really wanted to, you could even make another story out of his perspective in this. Great stuff so far, looking forward to the next installment.
Well, this story is sure a gem. Interesting take on HiE and very well done. Its simplistic yet effective in its story telling using only one side of communication. I really like it and am looking forward to the rest!
What if Strider is Dash's way of survival and he isn't real? I could see so many outcomes with this.
I think it's best if you extend the chapters or combine them.
3000-5000 words is the sweet spot
Never go below 1000
10000+ is just way too much unless you intend to have the reader get bored midway through the chapter.
You need to slow down, it cheapens the scene when you rush through this stuff. I don't feel connected as a result.
Finishes chapter. Realizes there aren't any more at the moment.
Good so far looking forward to the rest ^^
Hmmmm. Part two. I think I like this.
Tracking.
Love it.
Need more of this story!
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+10k is (while not ideal) acceptable for a one-shot story (designed to be read like a small novel), but not for a single chapter in a story that'll take multiple updates.
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The one day/one chapter thing was a format decision.
As for word count, fimfiction does have a 1000 word count minimum before publishing. Going below that is fine as long as the chapter itself is well written. Most micro-fiction stories are less than 1000 words, and some are below 500. Ernest Hemingway's "Baby Shoes" is a prime example of a very emotional story, only told in six words.
Daw! That last bit was adorable! (Don't tell Rainbow I said that)
7793422 and if twilight was in rainbows position and rainbow found them at that moment it would be adorkable, mind you three days in twilight would worked out some of striders language
I always thought that when I got in trouble my friend would be there to save me.
*friends
I like to think he's singing "I'm on a boat" or " I'm an Asshole".
No particular reason, just seems funny.
7793501 And probably created a library out of leaves and rocks somehow
looks great keep it up
Interesting, but was this really a whole day? I can't imagine that you are really running out of ideas.
7817237 That was just sleep before or after the day.
During the day nothing interesting happened, they simply walked.
(at least that's what I assume)
(On a side note, hope you had a Merry Christmas! As for the story...)
This is an awesome start, the description detail is just the right amount (for me), (Edit: could be argued as a bit fast...) while the story has a the more realistic problem of a language barrier, something not many writers (I've seen,) bother with.
I shall continue to read.
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That's a good assumption. One I would make myself, though I hope "UnluckyReaver" is happy to make things clear. Also Merry Christmas and a happy new year!
Great first chapters. I am looking forward to seeing where your going with this.
10 Points to the Author.
The Monk
I liked the part where it was a dream.
So may i ask where this is leading to?
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You can ask, but I'll just give some misleading answers.
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It is a good assumption. My plan was only to highlight one or two interesting things per day and not fill each chapter describing how they are walking through the Everfree.
So Rainbow survived crashing into the forest at the speed of sound with only a few bumps and scrapes.... I guess that's a thing.
This is an excellent story. I am looking forward to future chapters immensely.
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Same, just a shame they are so short
Are you kidding me? Those things are dangerous! In the Old West, jackalope hunters used to wear stovepipes on their legs to keep from being gored. They're just lucky, they must have ran into this one during the off season when they aren't so aggressive.