This story is a sequel to Reaching
Twilight Sparkle. The only person you ever talked to in school, and a true rose among the many thorns of Crystal Prep. Over time, you became close friends, fighting through the Crystal Prep snobs every day and protecting her from bullies. It was only a matter of time until you developed feelings for her. It seemed like it might be mutual too, but you didn't want to risk scaring off your only friend.
When she transfers to Canterlot High, you lose touch with her. Have all your chances with Twilight vanished forever?
But when chance reunites you with your friend, you might discover that she's lonelier than ever.
7th installment of the The Cute, the Fluffy, and Romantic
WARNING: May contain lots of fluff
**Featured from October 1-3, 2016 
Aww it was cute
You're a lot better than you think.
This was truly an enjoyable read, just like your other 6 in this collection! Well done!
Very nice! Though, there is one thing I'm curious about. Will you do this sort of story for the Dazzlings and Shadowbolts? Everyone who writes this genre skips them completely.
Good golly! Goodness gracious, I grant this great goodness a grand 10/10!
It's so heart-wrenching to hear Twilight cry
. I could practically hear it as I read the words, and it gave me the exact drive to do the same thing the character did for Twilight in order to make her happy again
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This was a great read, and you have my encouragement to continue this series; shall any form of inspiration and motivation be in your favor
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I like it, wish there were more OC Sci-Twi stories. And when I say Sci-Twi, I mean Sci-Twi, not regular Twi, we have lots of those.
Ever planning on doing sequels to these or a ...more romantic adventures?
That was butifull weary weary well Done god sir.
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Your writing and your stories never cease to impress me. Instant fave and like.
Call me crazy, but this along your The Cute, the Fluffy, and Romantic series needs to be audio read by ObabScribbler
Amazingly good job Jake!
Honestly, these have all been very good. Your weakest, in my opinion, were pinkie and rarity. The rest felt like there was a STORY. Rarity especially seemed kind of bland. Twilight's characterization was pretty good. I think my biggest problem is that, in every one of these stories, "I think you're pretty" becomes the line that starts each ending scene. I can see it working with Twilight - she isn'treally focused with appearances and likely doesn't have muchconfidence. Rarity though? She gets complimented all the time i'd wager. Plus, pretty is a kind of generic word. It lacks impact. Gorgeous, beautiful, stunning - these are good, strong words. Pretty isn't boring and it gets the point across but.... yeah
Love your work mate keep it up.
Another great entry to a great series! I just hope this doesn't mean that your done with this now you're done writing about the Humane 7. Perhaps you should write ones about other characters like Derpy, Gloriosa, Trixie, ect. Or maybe you could expand on your stories by writing sequels of your stories (Hopefully starting with Apple of my Eye, that's one of my favorite fluff fics.
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Found this little gem a few days ago and caught my interest. I'm not much for romance but this is wonderful. Now allow me to read your others please.
You did an amazing job with this story! It was a wonderful read.
I think you did a good job with all of your stories. It is good to be critical so that you avoid beeing careless but you shouldn't be too hard to yourself. You earned the praise for all your stories and they wouldn't be on the favourited list if they weren't good.
I also found a little thing here nearing the end of the story:
It ends abruptly before going to the next scene. I think you missed something or something got lost during writing.
7609192 HOW DID I LET THAT SLIP PAST ME????
Thank you so much. It's now a complete sentence
I haven't read this yet, but I have knocked out the other six in this collection, and, in all honesty, I've got some ideas for my own fluffy sci-twi second person fic as a result of your series. I can't wait to read it, and I'll probably have it knocked out by the end of the day.
Great job on another one buddy, can't wait to see what other ones you got in store.
Congratulations! You're the 17th person to use this amazingly original name for your fic! Additional penalty points for not featuring Diamond Tiara!
7609325 well, sorry.
Nah, going to Canterlot High is the best thing that's ever happened to this Twilight. She's way happier there.
This was awesome, a good addition to the one-shot collection! Your characterization of Sci-Twi was great, don't worry.
This was pretty good! I love the long lost friend angle. Kinda reminds me of why I support Starlight/Sunburst.
It was an enjoyable read, and I've liked your other pieces in this series as well. There's an honesty to the writing that makes it feel more genuine, and I really appreciate that in stories like these.
I do however have some small advice - flashbacks should be used very sparingly. In this piece I felt that the use of flashbacks wasn't necessary to progress the story, and didn't bring anything to the table to enhance the experience. Whenever you're considering using flashbacks, try to ask yourself just how important is it to have it. If it isn't important to have them, do away with them.
In any case lovely story. If you ever need an editor shoot me a PM and I'll give you a hand
Don't be so hard on yourself. This was a great story, and you captured Twilight pretty well by my reckoning.
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Congratulations! You're a muffin!
Yaaas, cute!
I think it's an exaggeration to portray the students of Crystal Prep as bullies. The atmosphere IS very different from CHS, more competitive and driven but it does make sense since it's some advanced school or something. The students there may be unfriendly than most people (maybe meaner too) but I doubt all of them would shove anyone against the locker for bumping into them. Worse, that guy who threatened to punch Twilight.
They have to some sort of dignity.
Anyways, discounting the fourth movie, it's a bit out of character for the girls to leave Twilight just like that. Sunset especially. She's been through the whole demon thing (even worse than Twi. Bully then demon) and she would sympathize with Twi. At least Twilight has the excuse of being pressured into it (the fact pony her saved the school before should have definitely helped).
A bit too heavy with the flashbacks, but that's my personal opinion, and the romance could have a bit more of a build-up.
7610692 I didn't mean to portray the girls like that. I meant to portray it like Twilight was alienating herself because she thought she'd get in the way.
But I guess that's on me for not showing that.
Sorry you didn't enjoy the story
Neat, a story where the second person has a reason one of the girls would live him, nice
And hey, it's good, though be happy to help pre-read if you do something with Rara or moondancer
What do you mean by her cheeks looking raw?
Yet another beautifully written story, my friend. I'm glad to have read it. You deserve each and every like and fave that comes from this story.
7610702 Don't be so hard on yourself. I thought the story was great. I personally give this one a 5 star rating. Others may say otherwise but this is MY opinion. Great job.
This has to be the best 2nd person story I have read so far good job man I rated this a 10/10
7610027 WHICH FLAVOUR!?!?!
The self criticism is makin my heart fail...
Your great at writing stories...
I never liked romance stories but this one makes me want to read more romance...
Don't beat yourself up, keep your chin up and plow your way through
(I think I could've used different words but I'm too tired to think)
P.S this is the first story I every read from you I plan to read more
Ah, I see you have a powerful feeling... depression
I see the symptoms, seeing yourself as pathetic, beating yourself up saying you can do better...
But your not alone...
I may seem like all those other toxic dank "memers"...
But really that's just a mask I put on every day...
To hide the real me, somber and pathetic...
I act if everything is sunshine and rainbows...
But really I feel like I could've tried harder if I held on a little tighter she would stay...
Who I'm talking about is my mother a very brave and uplifting woman a woman who shaped me to who I am...
Sadly life doesn't like making everything easy...
She was diagnosed with cancer located in her kidney's...
My last memories of her is her looking into my eyes telling Me everything is fine...
Puting on that smile that seems to bring light into the darkest rooms...
Then the sound of her EKG flatlining seeing the life start to fade from her eyes...
I held her like my only chance to survive everything seemed to fade and in that moment she told me something I'll never forget...
She said to always keep your head up never let life put you down...
Four words that I'll miss coming from her...
I love you, son...
But I couldn't see the light anymore like someone shut it off...
But after that and the news got out to my friends they started to get all in my business...
Never seeming to leave my side...
But then the news expanded...
Bully's saw it as something they could use to put my spirits down, to put out the fire in my heart...
It had worked I had to start taking pills to calm me down...
Everyday seemed hard to not take more to end it...
Use the rope to end my suffering...
But the memories of my mother and her words make me disregard the thoughts and move on
i haven't read the whole story and i already feel the sadness
7611303 ...well given Sci-Twi was the only version to appear in this story, I'd have thought whom I was talking about was pretty obvious.
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Dude
It's
Really
Irritating
To
Write
Like
You
Do.
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To be fair, the word "bullies" is smack-dab in the center of the long description.
7611752 Is that a good thing or a bad thing?
I was trying to show that Twilight misses her best friend dearly, and drop hints that she likes him. That's why she's so sad when she goes to CHS and is separated from him.
But then again, I could just write better.
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I went out and killed a man after reading that.
It's really
really
aggravating when people, you know,
write that way.
7611701 Yea I Know :3
This was the story I was looking forward to the most in this series.
Gotta say that I loved it! Made me feel warm and happy inside!
Your characterization of Twilight was fine, in my opinion.
I'm vulnerable because of the newest movie and this is something I needed.
If I were to give it some critisizm, maybe some more character development? But then again, it was already implemented when you started it. Perhaps some backstory on how "you" met Twilight Sparkle to give it that extra kick and attachment. That is just my critisizm but I liked it regardless so it is fine as it is.
Listen, I know what it is like to be down on yourself when it comes to writing. I know what it is like to be down on yourself as an artist. I sometimes feel like some of my drawings are terrible. But I will say this: fan fiction is a playground for you to get better at writing whether it may be to improve grammer, spelling, story writing. Just write. Take your criticism and complements to see what is good and what needs improvement. Even today, even after having my story up for two and a half years I get mad at myself for writing trashy. You will have those days. But tell yourself why you write. Do you write because you want to soften up your readers hearts? Perhaps create "the feels" and then tear it out of your readers chest and simulate a pain you once felt? You should be critical toward yourself, but you should also see how others view your story/ stories. Also read other stories and see how others write. That's how I came across your story.
I think that is all I want to say. Keep at it ya freak.
Aaahhhh, I'll give this a 7/10.
In your own words 'I think this had some potential, but I feel like this is kind of a letdown.' , and I kind of have to agree. You might wish to make a chapter two, just to help explore this some more. That said, it did pull me in, and most stories can't do that. So it would be nice to see more. Hint, Hint - nudge, nudge - Puts gun on the table.
i like this story but if i had to give it one critique and its a broad one at that, meaning the story overall, is that everything was kind of generic, is that what you meant by going through the "same routine". i dont write so i cant really help you there in terms of plot, structure etc. but if i did, it would probably be something like this :D
I think you nailed twilights character decently but she just seemed to be the "damsel in distress" not really doing a whole lot more than that, i get the feeling more could of been done, maybe you did too? lol