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Nordryd


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This story is a sequel to A Cupcake for Your Thoughts


Of all the girls at CHS, there's one in particular who's caught your eye. Rarity, the proper, well-spoken, and fabulous fashonista. Her poise and mannerisms are so unique and attractive. You'd give anything for a chance to ask her out. But she's way out of your league, and could find someone infinitely better than you.

During a violently stormy school day, you see Rarity fall in a puddle outside in the torrential downpour. You offer help, and perhaps your single act of generosity will make your dreams a reality.


2nd installment of the The Cute, the Fluffy, and Romantic

WARNING: May contain lots of fluff


**Featured on July 5, 2016 :raritystarry:

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Comments ( 78 )

Intriguing. *looks over story*
Well...

I liked it.:pinkiesmile:

Yes its good

“I never leave home without it!” she says.

The first thing that popped into my mind was an American Express card.

Awesome one-shot! Hopefully this one gets featured, too! :pinkiehappy:

Short, sappy, and stupid.
I'm being a sucker here but I don't care. Take the upvote.

Another sweet story. Great job! :twilightsmile:

Two fine stories in this series.... and I can't wait to see more....

Well done! :twilightsmile:

As Rarity herself would probably say, this story was faboo, darling!:twilightsmile: Seriously though, great work Nor!

I am in awe of your ability to create amazing stories so quickly. This was great!

I think Rarity is more cuteness than beauty. You were right, this story is fluffy and I like it! :pinkiesmile:

7365543 I thought it was the 'Visa' card, from the old commercials. :pinkiesmile:

Featured again!!!:pinkiehappy:

7366643 with the mature filter

7366352 I think it was just credit cards in general. :unsuresweetie:

Bravo! Excellent story you've created here. I'll have to give the rest of your series a read now. :raritywink:

7367199 thanks! I only have two entries right now, but more are coming.

Call me pretentious, but I know whenever I see something like that, I try to figure out the answer.

If it's any reassurance, I felt the need to solve the math problem too. :trollestia:

Differentiate f(x) = ln(cosx)
f'(x)=(1/cosx)(-sinx)=-(sinx/cosx)=-tanx
f'(x)=-tanx

7367743 hey I was correct :trollestia:

See, me? That time in AP Calc, Calc 2, and Calc 3 wasn't a total waste of time... right?

7367744
Rest assured, math is hardly a waste. It is one of the things enabling us to move forward. :twilightsmile:

7367766 I mean, thank god I can work out triple integrals to calculate 4D volumes, right? That's practical, right?

I know, math actually really is important. It's just fun to give it crap, y'know? :rainbowlaugh:

Yesyesyes moremoremore! I must follow you :raritydespair: *Clicks green button* There :pinkiehappy:

Good thing I didn't take Calculus when I was still in high school. Solving problems like that would leave me completely mindfucked:applejackconfused:. But I guess having a girl you have a crush on can give some motivation:eeyup:.

I'm definitely following this series of yours:pinkiehappy:. Keep up the good work:twilightsmile:.

7368997 i took AP calculus AB in high school. I got a 4 on the AP exam and that allowed me to take calc 2 and 3 my freshman year of college. It was... fun?

And thanks! I don't know when the next one will be out, but I hope it won't disappoint.

Sorry I Couldn't Help Myself :rainbowlaugh:

Anyways, Great Story.:pinkiehappy:

I got an A in maths and I am happy with that :pinkiehappy:

Ok.

Start with some knit picking:

1.) Why doesn't he just drive her home?

2.) was she walking home? Or did she have a car?

3.) You used a lot of the same beats for the Pinkie story her putting her hands up his shirt, him reciprocating, plus skirt play with squeak.

Still I can answer the first two of those easily; It makes for a better story.

The third one is a cause for consideration. Maybe have them caress each other's hair or shoulders and so on.

Something I noticed, In this and Pinkie's story, you had the narrators connect with the girls through an action that displays their element back to them.

"He smiled at her cupcakes."

"He generously shares his raincoat with her."
That's kinda brillant!

It would be a great thing to continue with!

One final critism, Rarity shouldn't say darling so much it seems like a tick. Vary it up, maybe once in a conversation, twice at most. When you do Applejack, which I greatly look forward to, don't make every sentence she says have "sugarcube" in it.

In the end, just as sweet as the last, pacing was again a little brisk, but not awful. You have great discription chomps here, use them. Vary your scenes of when the two become intimate. NOT saying turn to clop! DON'T do that. But switch it up a bit for the next one.

This anon: Rain Slick

7378833 thanks for your feedback.

It won't turn into clop, I promise. It'll get steamy, I'll say that, but this series is purely T-rated romance fluff.

7390186 Good. I won't lie and say I don't read the stuff, but I will truthfully state that I enjoy content over graphic

This is so fluffy, it makes a kitten look like a ball of steel wool.

I'm a soldier. And I stay under you, fightin'. Plus I'm storming on you chumps like I'm Thunder and Lightnin'.

This story took a lot of initiative huh? Well it this Anon by the horns also BTW I'm studying Tech Engineering... Any tips on some note taking? Its strange to ask this but I feel that if us mathematicians/engineers can create a cool.



Overall I loved this story and its prequel...in the last one it was...I hate Pinkie...in this one its I love Rares...maybe for one in the future it could be like...idk...hate...like bloodlust hate...Tsundere style story...or fell in love by chance...like bumping into Anon...stuff like that... I'll expect more Norbryd...also one more thing....*fluff boop* you have been fluff booped, pass it ON!!

That was really good. It was well written, has a good, interesting plot, and is good in general. However, I noticed that when you write scenes that get more then just fluffy and things start to 'heat up', I think is the proper terminology for that, then the scenes are all... similar. They kiss and then eventually make out, and you use the same wording, or at least really similar wording, you know? You explain how the girl's lips are so sweet, like candy, and then describe the kiss (which is a bit too much fluff for me, since I don't write it myself, and normally write dark-ish things) and then it ends, or heats up so they start touching each other and stuff. I seriously don't mean to sound mean or harsh! So I'm sorry if I do! What I'm trying to say is you need to have more of a variety when it comes to scenes like that.

On to more positive things; I really like that in the series the person reflects the girl's elements back to them, as said previously by someone, that's really awesome and creative. I am excited to read the next story of Apple Jack. :) Nicely done with this story.

This very well done. I really enjoyed it.:pinkiehappy:

I enjoyed it more because I'm a bit of a Rarity fan myself. :raritywink:

But, one problem though...

...YOU PUT MATH IN IT! I DIDN'T READ THIS TO BE CONFRONTED WITH MATH! WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU! :flutterrage:

Other than that, I can't wait for the next one to come out. :twilightsmile:

7428380 I'm actually writing the next installment right now

Its like Mr. Torgue always says...
"NOTHING IS MORE B@D@$$ THAN TREATING A WOMAN WITH RESPECT!"

You get the last sock off, and you can’t help but notice how dainty and cute her feet are.

I'm sorry but this threw me off :rainbowlaugh:

That and the math equation... n-no... just, no math please :pinkiesick: specially not that weirdness.

REGARDLESS OF THAT, these little stories are a hell of a lotta fun to read, so nice job! :D

Great story there I rated 10 out of 10

This really should have a sex tag. For getting extremely close if nothing less.

Why can't he drive Rarity to her own house?

7435506 she walked. It's supposed to be cute! :rainbowwild:

7435525 Still, take a girl to your house and let her use your shower! What would his and her parents think?

7436751 it's supposed to be cute :raritycry:

In reality, yeah I know. But whatever. Was it at least cute?

7436758 Yeah, I admit that was cute. Next thing you know is probably two muti-color humans making out on a couch. I hope he has condom.

Diffrentiate f(x) = ln(cosx)

[Triggering Intensifies]

7452528 No big deal. xD

Math and I, well we just don't get along.

7452531 I put the answer in the author's notes at the end just to humor people :rainbowwild:

No math in the next one, I promise

And we're two for two. :raritystarry:

A beautiful oneshot. I have a soft spot for the fashionista, pony or not^^

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