Oh, look at me... you've got me tearing up again. ◈ Forget about coffee buy me a cup noodle.
Yet again, Twilight failed at her own craft. A single misfire was all it took to revert Celestia's body to that of a filly, and not only that, but now she behaves like a filly...
...at least Luna's gonna have Equestria to herself. (Maybe.)
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Well....all I can say is....slow the hell down dude....this thing moves way to fast for it to really make any kind of sense or allow anyone to process what is happening for it to be funny.
I get what you were trying to do, believe me.I do, but the exacution is just all over the place and none of it really hitting the proper timming for the humor to work.
I'm going to keep an eye in this as the concept is of interest to me and k want to see where it is going but I do recommend trying to slow it down a bit.
I'm confused. Way too much happened in not so many words, as Scorch215 said, slow down a bit. This could be really good if the timing was better
7224761 But it's raaaaandoooooom
No worries, the next chapter I'll take more time. I was just overly busy today.
7224796 Oh, yes, quite random.
Can I offer you a piece of advice? People are busy, if something doesn't catch their interest in the first place, if a second or third chapter is promised to be really good but the first isn't so good, chances are they won't stick around to find out. Trust me. I've submitted at least three stories on here before that failed miserably (massively more dislikes than likes and not much of either). I gave up and took them all down, and the fact that my current one is doing so well just goes to show that hard work pays off.
So keep at it!
7224812 Alright. But you do remember that I've been working on the collab at the same time, right?
Plus, at school, I have a two-day math test, and a performance for my theatre class.
7224818 Of course. And when life is super busy, maybe it's time to not post things without going over them first.
7224830 Eh, I found that my 0-edit one-shots are actually quite popular. Especially "Screw Time!!!"
Either way, I added the edits.
... That was truly random
7228046 Isn't that the point of having the random tag?
*the universe explodes*
Nah, I'm kidding, good chapter though.
7230493 Thanks!
You have doomed us all.
11/10 discords and 5 (stars)
7230683 Indeed I have, haven't I?
I honestly don't know why you bothered to publish a chapter that is so incredibly short.
7265408 For the sake of trying to milk the last idea from my head before it gets overwritten by various time periods of US history tomorrow.
7265428 Alright then.
7265433 Yep. I have absolutely nothing in my head now. I've been watching youtube videos for the past two hours and I still have absolutely nothing.
Please edit. Every time you have "it's", the correct word is "its". It's/its errors are way too common, and so easy to fix.
7551214 Sorry... but I typically just leave completed stories be, not only to learn from my mistakes, but also because I'm perfectly fine with how they are.
I'm still a relatively new writer, and often times, I learn something new each time I begin writing another story. It's all a part of life. Sometimes it's okay to leave your mistakes behind, to study them; learn from them.
hehe, cake
pinkies thoughts before scaring twilight: im'ma gonna scare an alicorn, what could go wrong?
this, this could go wrong, very very wrong
*a wide smile spreads across her face, one worthy of smile hd. (if you have never watched that, i suggest not. it is very disturbing in my opinion.)* two dangerous alicorn fillies, you say?
7689021 Yep. I've seen Smile HD.
them? doom the planet? i alone doom the planet.
time bomb, how destructive is this time bomb exactly?
i need to do that on purpose sometime, with strangers. i'll need a book, and weird stuff.
7689302 It's both world-endingly powerful, andbarely enough to make dust float.
....What's a Ponk? Hmmm... Next chapter!