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UPDATED!!!! YES! YES YES YES!
Work.... booo.
As understandable her hesitation and apprehension is, I'm kinda hoping that she'll agree to his proposal of apprenticeship. Besides, being a reformed villain herself, I'm sure that she and Sombra could come to understand one another.
Love the fact that this story got updated just when I was about to reread it. I have to say, at first I had the impression that Sombra wanted to make her a concubine, but his offer to make her his apprentice was a shocker. It was also nice that Sombra could switch from showing a sympathetic side to a threatening one depending on Starlight’s response. Overall, it’s a great chapter.
My day always gets better when this story updates!!!
Sorry Starlight. There is no Door #3, there is only Door #1 and Door #2.
is sombra the master of chess because starlight just got checkmated
Yes. He is Pony Hitler combined with the Babylon 5 Psicop Bester.
No one else would mind-control an entire people.
Woo! I am #404 of likes! Yes!
Another excellent chapter. Though I'd like to point out two errors I noticed. You misspelled "fawn" as "fon" and "stew" as "stu." An understandable mistake, considering Fon and Stu are names that autocorrect may have inserted for you.
As for the chapter... I absolutely love the direction this story is going in. I cannot wait to see how Fluttershy has grown as a character over six months. Sombra is as shrewd and calculating as ever, and I wonder how Fluttershy has evolved over six months of war. Until then!
I must admit this was a very satisfying chapter - the banter is very lifelike and fluid.
I must say that I enjoy the little Shout-Outs and allusions you pepper throughout the story: Everything from Skyrim to Song of Ice and Fire/Game of Thrones. Even a Legend of Zelda reference here or there.
I await the next chapter with great eagerness.
What...have you DONE TO ME! I am a die hard Fluttercord shipper AND it's my otp so the fact that I even considered reading this is saying something. The fact that a story is so good it gets me to go against my one true ship even for a little bit is surprising!
Well done Mick...well done...
Every update is like a drop of water in the desert. More please, my thirst needs to be sated.
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Fair enough.
Interesting dialogue between the two. Starlight's magic was a bit of a surprise but not unprecedented.
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Eviscerate away
Read though. Kinda hoping Sunset would suffice. But I doubt it.
It would be nice if Fluttershy had company.
Still waiting to see that flutter-bump.
More please!
*notices reader counter* HOLY FK, 12?!
Please sir I want some more.
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The number of views is up to over 41 thousand.
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the views i was not surprised by, i was surprised by the fact 12 people, including me, were reading it at the same time.
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interesting.
If Twilight wakes up...
*shudders*
The true demon you should fear is yourself, cause only yourself knows how to make you break.
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It's not exactly chess to pin someone down with overwhelming force and threaten them until they do what you want.
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close enough
A wonderful update. I hope you have the time to write the next chapter a little sooner. Still, it made my day, thank you!
As always, both the dialogue and exposition are most tasteful, especially how Sombra caged Starlight with his words.
Also like how Sombra doesn't care about good or evil and just does as he pleases. An excellent anti-hero depiction if I've ever seen one.
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Anti-hero is exactly what I was going for. A true 'Chaotic Good' character. One who does not concern himself with the political climate. He just does what he does to help ponykind because he can, and he doesn't need a reason for why he does it. He just does it.
great chapter
i love the no option thing. im sure she will get a 3erd option
also is it me or is sombra laying it on a little thick?
he trying to start a herd or something? hehehe
*Smiles*
Hmmmm. A very interesting chapter. I love it
8701778 Attention, we have a Sarcastiball veteran in the reply section. No actual substance will be offered to defend their argument.
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"Sir, the Troll has continued his unethical assault upon us. What are your orders?"
Commander looks at his forces.
"Regiment, prepare the Rotten Tomatoes!"
Commander looks back at the Troll.
"Surrender, or we will resort to Rotten Force!"
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This is Admiral Boomstick: Hold your tomatoes, captain. Let the man have his opinion. The fucks I give could be counted on an amputee's hand.
8700101 Eviscerate away
Said with the calm of Sombra himself when confronted with one who fancies himself an opponent yet is merely a gnat buzzing in the ears of greatness. *grabs popcorn and sits back, hoping this fool will actually waste his time and energy replying*
Mick, you are one clever bastard. You and the other great King Sombra writers on this website (Askre, Maltrazz, Pixel_Spark, Topside, Your-the-Rogue) do the King of Shadows a justice the ratings confines of the show could never hope to achieve, hence why I give a damn anymore as to whether they ever touch the subject of our Highness again. I aspire to yours and all these writing giants quality of writing style someday.
Loved this latest chapter.
I can only hope Starlight sees that he really has changed. I'd bet Fluttershy would be able to prove that.
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Lmao
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"Yes Sir!"
8702332 I am Rotten Tomatoes. I give you a splat.
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This made my night.
8709735 No, the setup ruins it all. I went four chapters in and it became as painful as "50 Shades of Grey". None of the Pony leadership is permitted to respond to blunt insults, as any person naturally would, and point out the rather scathingly obvious tyranny and sadism (you know, the fact that he's holding hostages and so forth..) and fling it back in his face. He's able to throw out insults, makes outrageous demands and NEVER face any repercussions. It's shoe-horned and forced horribly in the most cliche 'Villain With Whom We All Must Agree' manner. Fluttershy goes along with him far too easily, her emotional state NEVER feels natural given her canon personality and the situation she's put in.
This story expects me to just buy into this absurdly melodramatic premise with no support at all for the changes to personality and villain wanking, and doesn't offer any support for any of it; instead repeating the same terrible cliches I've railed against in not just fanfiction of this sort, but the garbage most tween wangst material vomits up for years.
I don't find anything about the plot or characters in this story remotely believably, not even in its own context because no character is allowed to act or respond naturally. Instead, they all act like little puppets moving awkwardly across the stage to an act with no competent puppeteer pulling the strings.
8701140 You dare lump this Twi-hard clone in with Deadpool, a TRUE antihero?
I shall be informing him of this travesty, PERSONALLY! (We cosmic super-trolls all hang out at Shoney's on Tuesdays.)
i'm glad that you're doing better and have gotten back to the story. It will take a lot for Sombra to convince Starlight that he loves Fluttershy and wants to make a fresh start. I also enjoyed hearing Sombras point of view on a few things I'm honestly rooting for him.
8712423 Shoney's is a good place
Also, yes, I'm aware Deadpool is the one true anti-hero
as much as i like this Sombre he made clear he thinks very litlle of the rest of the mane 6 or the other alicorns. i'd like to see this bite him in the ass. Fluttershy won't stop being friends with them just because she surprisingly get along with sombra
PPFFFFFFFFTTTT
here we go...