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Good story so far though with scenes like this I'm amazed it still has a T rating. That being said I really feel bad for Glimmer here and would love a rescue of some kind though that doesn't seem to be in the cards.
I think it's time for Discord to step in, he has been absent for way too long.
OMG. I'm no fan of Starlight's holier-than-thou attitude in this universe (loving hating her, to clarify), but DAMN, that was hard to read no matter what pony it happened to!
Poor Starlight. Didn't anticipate her actually losing something like this.
9711823 No kidding. This really did have me conflicted.
Eh, she had it coming, she should have bent the knee when she still had the chance, now its all downhill from here for her.
Well atleast she is learning first hand sombra does not exaggerate.
Does Celestial even care what happens. L? I doubt it. She only cares about her student...
I want more
Gotta ask did they take it from both sides?
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After all she doesn't care for those outside her border.
Damn... *looks at the story’s rating* ...double damn! Now imagine that Celestia actually knows about all the cruelty beyond Equestria’s borders and is still acting like their “harmonic behavior” is common and that Sombra and Fluttershy are “the monsters”, supposedly exaggerating with their claims concerning the isles. Most hypocritical and disillusioned princess of all time.
And Twlight, Starlight, Sunset and Moondancer all fell for it. Now Starlight will be tortured and maybe even eaten alive, depending on how “merciful” the pirates are. Wouldn’t wish such a fate on my worst enemy.
Yikes.
That was brutal.
Someone please help her.
they literally plundered her booty
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Most likely they'll take both sides and compare which would be look better in the "collection"
Damn, I must say, author has balls, such graphic descriptions of total cruelty done in serious and neutral way are rarity. This chapter shaked me.
If Starlight somehow survive it and will not end as cripple, then she may have another total change of live prorities and gone Total Merciless Inquisitor On Everything Vile mode, due to her inherent tendencies to fanaticism. Which, of course, will shock Twilight, who will probably accuse Sombra(!) for corrupting her student into another monster, despite everything.
Well, that's gonna leave a mark. I'm not sure if we stock band-aids that big.. Clean up on isle two!
How's Starlight gonna get out of this one? I would honestly be more surprised if she DID end up dead from this. Waste of a chance for character development. Especially after we spent SO MUCH time with her. She should be rescued (what's left of her) and brought back so she could look Sombra and Fluttershy in the eyes and mutter in a weak voice, "kill them all."
Keep up the good work my good man
Yay! The bitch gets herself a nice dose of reality in her life and I do hope she does die but she probably only has enough plot amorur to keep from dying and it up being sombra new student. Plus princess sun butt doesn't really give a fuck what happens to others outside her nation borders... They do need a reality check and face the truth that the world is a scary place and their idiotic utopia is nothing more then a great lie made by two immortal dumb bitches who fail to see how the world works.
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I would wish it on my worse for and yeah princess sun butt could care less about the suffering of other beyound her own borders
Huh I thought she would of teleported or blasted them. She must of forgot she's a unicorn
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Just like in the movie with the Storm King and stuff
welp, shes dead. Its gonna take some serious deus ex machina to get her ass out of that alive. loving the gruesomeness though.
A wondrous thought just came to me. Some have said that it would be fitting for Starlight, having now gotten a good dose of reality, to side with Fluttershy and Sombra and fight the pirates and other evils. But no, I think that Starlight would be too mentally and emotionally scarred from what she's has already and has yet to endure to be up that. She would be too broken to accomplish very much, especially if there isn't a way to 'mend' her cutie mark. No, there's another character that has a better chance of becoming a vengeful ally of Sombra if her eyes are opened to reality; Twilight.
Let's not forget that it was Twilight that headed up the entire assassination plot. Despite Starlight giving Sombra a more 'impressive' fight, Twilight is the one that has actually dabbled in dark magic before. And she has also shown here to be fanatically loyal to her friends to the point where she is willing to kill to save them. Now, let her wake up and be faced with the truth about Fluttershy and Sombra, the truth of the situation in the north and the horrors that face the innocents that Sombra and Fluttershy are trying to protect. Let her see the truth of what her beloved rulers refuse to do about the entire situation. Let her be faced with the truth of just how evil and brutal these cannibal pirates are with what they've done to Starlight, with what they have yet to do to Starlight.
Given Twilight's personality thus far through the story, I can easily see her coming to terms with reality and simply laying waste to those that would threaten bodily harm, death or worse to her friends. If the truth of the inaction of her precious princesses and the depth of the cruelty of the true evils of the north manage to open her eyes, then Twilight stands to be an unstoppable force to face those who would bring harm to the innocent.
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Hope the author notice this cause damn I agree
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Yup and honestly her royal guards are utterly incompetent he'll the hold guards from Skyrim are better at their job then these milk drinkers. Then again their more then likely just a ceremonial guard and only keep around for looks.
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The purple one too needs a good dose of reality smashed into her thick skull.
He'll have her question their oh so kind and beloved God princess why she refuses to help the poor sods up in the north for. The way I see it is one. She doesn't give a flying fuck about what happens beyond her nations borders. Second. She is unwilling to see reality for what it is and only cares about maintenaning her stupid lillusion of peace and harmnony bullshit to a nation of guttless pansies he'll given how the big queen, tirak, storm king have invaded them and walk all over them it shows they are no real power and we'll their guard forces are extremely incompetence and serve only as little more then a joke/ ceremonial guard at most.
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i expect she suffer and be tortured and during sombra counter attack she end up doing something that be crucial to sombra's victory maybe she get revenge on the so call pirate queen herself
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Get revenge? How?
Starlight is now extremly beaten mare with severly broken leg, damaged skull, massive wound on flank and BSODed mind from sheer terror.
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in the midst of a attack on the pirate ship a ignored mare happens to find herself free with a weapon at the right place at the right time
she could bump into her tormentor retreating and stab stab, all I'm saying i wouldn't count her just out yet this is a mare who found a way to steal cutie marks and rule over a town, finish and use star-swirl time travel spell, she very strong willed, she may be beaten in pain but she not broken yet i still bet on her especially with external force that work in her favor if they get there in time
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So you are a man of culture as well? Joking aside, the pirates answered the booty call quite literally.
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First of all, Starlight needs hell of a plot armor to not end up eaten alive, because I don’t think that the pirates were joking at all, who already called bits on the body parts they want to devour first.
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true but the pirates are really underestimating sombra ironically her fate really now depends on how he responds to the attack and how quickly he retaliates, the pirates are going to take there time to kill her slowly and i dont really see her being killed off story wise since she become a second pov character for this fic
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They gotta have that booty
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People are going to read your comment and assume something else entirely happened to Starlight at the end. You mad lad.
Damn... Starlight's gonna get the SgtMaj Johnson ending, isn't she? "Send me out... with a bang"
I am definitely betting that after all this, she is going to be left broken and just give up on everything.
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I entirly agree with that, that would be a great way for the story to progress. Especially if Starlight is left so broken, she just gives up on everything, quits as Twilight's student, moves back to her home with her dad, and just shuts herself off from the world and her friends... I can see Twilight losing her shit and going full destroyer of worlds on all of the Hook.
If she's lucky though, relatively speaking, the last we will see of Starlight is her roasted head literally on a silver platter as the pirate leader is munching on a rack of Glimmer Ribs in front of Fluttershy and Sombra... before an enraged Fluttershy goes all hulk on her and tears the psychos head off...
That level of suffering is not something one should live with...
Have some mercy and if it does happen don't write Starlight's final moments in too much detail I think I would actually be sick
One part of me is crying for Starlight because good grief noone deserves this but another part is like
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At the cost of being a real pain in the ass to Starlight, yes.
110% a guy of culture over here
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I’m well aware of that.
but tbf you just have to use the most literal reading to avert that
IF by some miracle Starlight survives this horror show...she'll have a much better understanding of how things work in this part of the world. She'll finally understand that Sombra and Fluttershy are right.
Awesome Chapter btw.
Oh good Lord have mercy. I had a feeling reality would come crashing down for Star but this was brutal.
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Sombra: "You're no savior. Your talents lie elsewhere."
Twilight: "This isn't my fault!"
Sombra: "It takes a strong mare to deny what's in front of her. And if the truth is undeniable, you create your own. The truth, Twilight, is that you're here because you wanted to feel like something you're not: A hero. I'm here because you can't accept it. It broke you. You needed someone to blame, so you cast it on me."
I love this story.
Just a heads up.
This pretty clearly falls into the mature category now.
https://www.fimfiction.net/faq/questions/116/what-defines-whether-a-story-is-rated-as-teen-or-mature
You've wandered from borderline descriptions of violence and occasionally crossing over the line to an entire chapter filled with visceral descriptions of torture before actual torture. Skinning alive, peeling like a banana, to the experience of having her mark physically cut out. Great imagery, great story, but no longer excusable as "T" rated at all. This whole chapter (and honestly a little of the prior content) is clearly and comfortably over the line. I'd recommend changing the rating of your story. The violence is part and parcel of it, taking it out would neuter the impact in this case.
I love it, but it needs to be correctly tagged. Sorry to be the bearer of bad news.
*Edited to add spoiler tags within 2 minutes of post.
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Aww what a snitch lol
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I'm a big believer in properly tagged stories. It keeps the site healthy as a whole. While violence and Gore aren't a big deal for Americans, it's very taboo or even straight up illegal in other countries/cultures. The internet is a strange place. I don't think it's necessary to change what you write to accommodate other cultures, but it's important to give them a proper heads up.Violence can be far more jarring than sexual content, and may even get real human beings in trouble. If the site as a whole doesn't properly tag within its own rules, it can easily get blocked (or worse) in those places.
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Im just messing my dude, its cool. Tags are important, I understand.
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Perhaps Starlight, if she survives the horrors, still won't agree with Sombra, but will at least understand WHY he does what he does.
It is all well and good to talk about Harmony and love when you are armed with a magical friendship laser. But for those who live in a desolate land populated with raiders, you'll have to do terrible things to keep your head above water.
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Shhhh, shh, shh, shh... don't... people from the world over are far tougher than you think. I understand what you mean in this type of thing. I have my own experience in the matter *no exageration*:
Europe: *violence in media* Coover the childerens eyes! *sexual images* Meh...
America: *sexual images even remotely suggestive* COVER THE CHILDRENS EYES!!! * violence in the most extreme* HEY, TIMMY!! Check this out...
I get it. But now that I have seen people of all ages reaxt to different levels of media, especially compared to older shows from looney toons and the like, older media still broadcasted and understood, it's not near as bad or damaging as you would think.