please continue soon

*ensure
*preservation

Really liking the edits here. I, too, wonder about Discord's future role in all this...

I'm still getting a good Beauty and the Beast vibe from this story

This chapter was amazing and I liked how you added a few scenes like Sombra foraging grapes in a cold land for Fluttershy. The advisor, Ethereal Moon, is an interesting character being a filly-like counselor in appearance yet also capable of being loyal to Sombra while having the cutest of crushes on him. The scene with Sombra and Fluttershy consummating their marriage feels strangely more natural as Sombra seduces Fluttershy into sleeping with him rather than Fluttershy forcing herself to do the deed. Keep up the amazing job. I hope the next chapter comes soon.

Loving it.

This is getting good, keep up the good work! Also wine can relax you, a lot.

Cool story! Will there be clop?

6880302 On a teen rated story? No. But there will be some pretty bawdy scenes.

6880465 I can't wait to see the reaction on discord face when he finds out what happen to fluttershy

lh3.googleusercontent.com/-mSkfJaSJ16o/VrUaAf66DRI/AAAAAAAAAYA/m45hwt36Row/s2000/CMockeryRedobyEvehly1454709246831.jpg

6907484 Only Flutters could get away with such insolence

I'ts good to know that even after perusing FIMFiction every day since last November for all the Sombra stories I can get my hooves on, I can still run across such quality gems as this one. Your description of Sombra and his archaic dialogue are the standard to which I am working my way towards in my own tales of his adventures. Evehly made me a dirty Sombrashy plebe with her amazing artwork and now she too is doing it all over again with reposting her "Shy Can See" fic here as well. Never has there been a more beautiful Beauty and the Beast pairing as these two lovers. It is because of stories like this and authors like the both of you that I am able to pull myself away from my old favored pairing of Sombra x Luna. Please keep it up and continue. Your style and pacing are a joy to read!

6919287 I thank you for your kind words, but I'd rather not be compared to Evehly. Her brilliant artistic style was what inspired me to become a SombraShy fan in the first place. It's like comparing Bruce Lee to some over weight mall cop who got their black belt from some strip mall soccer mom McDojo.

6922834 Heh, I can see your point, Mick, but your writing style is good - as good in its own right as the best artists are in their own realm. That's all I meant.

You are your own entity, as we all are, and I laud your writing style as a benchmark for what I want to attain as I refine my own works.

Just found this story and I love it. Do you know how hard it is to find really good Sombra fan fictions that have been updated recently? Can't wait for more

6928935 I'll be happy so long as you don't trash it on your next podcast. lol

6929106 you've seen my show?

6929350 I look for things to listen to on YouTube while I'm playing games on steam. I happened upon one of your reviews when I was looking for a pony related podcast to listen to as I was getting my Dark Souls on. Strange chance that you'd be commenting on one of my stories just a few days later.

6930423 hmm small world. lol

I'm really loving this story so far, I hope it won't take too long for the next update to come out

Please update soon

Fav pairing and a dark but not, maybe im not sure, completely evil sombra, update soon please!!

Cool story :)
Do you know when the next chapter will be posted??

lh3.googleusercontent.com/-xXQEf_Uc8wU/VwlttiAU4eI/AAAAAAAADtE/dv-icTxVMJ0/s2000/IShipItFromAllAnglesbyEvehly1460235741310.jpg

Please add more chapters soon

*pokes fanfiction with stick*

7419486 Hey, it made a sound... Or perhaps it was just gas escaping?

Time will tell

I love this story. I hope that everything is fine and that you are able to continue soon!
I am not sure if it was intentional, but I am getting a strong Beauty and The Beast vibe from this story. Its my favourite fairy tale!

7443533 Thanks for that, and yes, I'll be adding a new chapter soon. I just bought a new house, and I'm still getting situated with my new job, so I've been crazy busy lately. Thanks for your patience.

when will you continue this

Dude, this is the shit. I need more.

huh
Well that happened
Discord will be jealous~

Dude, this is amazing!

I really wanna keep reading, but i cant get past how insane the setup is. Celestia just rolls over and accepts his terms? Also the elements going along with this lol?

Hmm, I'm getting a "Beauty and the Beast" feel from this so far. Looking foward to continue reading the rest.

this, do you see this story....do you know what it is
es ist gut

Well discord is gonna know what happened and then somepony is gonna be dead

Twenty four? Fluttershy thought incredulously. The tiny mare that she had presumed to be a filly was seven years her senior?

So... Fluttershy's 17?

Hmm, it seems Fluttershy's run into the old head/heart problem. She knows Sombra is a monstrous tyrant, but he's been nothing but kind to her and he is attractive. What mare could resist?

Sombra seems to want a willing bride. Is he just lonely or is there some nefarious intent?

"This mad friend of yours intrigues me," Sombra replied.

Sombra, Discord is like a thousand Celestias put into one godly powerhouse.

Fluttershy took note of one mare who's belly was too swollen for her to kneel and keep her balance, so she just stood with a foreleg crossed protectively over the swell of her midsection as she bent forward as far as she could, keeping one hoof planted firmly to the ground to hold herself up, her face reddening with the effort.

Celestia why are pregnant mares out here again. You picked the ponies surely, this is you fault for sending a pregnant mare through the snowlands to Sombra's castle, I mean why. You're getting no sympathy from me in this tale.

Hey, I just started reading this story and so far it looks pretty promising. Although the part with Fluttershy and Sombra together, while it is a touching moment, it feels a little random to me. I get that Sombra basically seduced Fluttershy, but I kind of expected her to be a little more defiant. Or at least Sombra noticing that Flutters is not comfortable with this and stops. But overall the last part, while doesn't make a whole lot of sense (to me at least), was still a very nice moment, so I'll give you points for going for a different direction. I shall continue on reading.

Also, for some reason, whenever Fluttershy and Sombra are shipped, I always hear this song in my head:

Idk why, I just do.

8486996
That song actually fits quite well

The last part of the chapter is hilarious when you listen to Moving Mountains by Alkaline while reading.

8463485
I'm guessing the pregnant mares mate was picked and he didn't want to leave her behind/she didn't want him to go alone, so they both went.

Fluttershy dared a glance at her husband and saw that he was already walking back to the carriage. He's letting me say goodbye, she realized. The embrace only became tighter as she could feel all her friends joining in. "I love you all," she sniffed, trying her hardest not to croak on her words. There was a chance that this may be their final memory of her - she wouldn't allow it to be of her weeping like a coward. Besides, her friends, who were now clinging to her as if they had no intention of ever letting go, were weeping for her more than she ever could.

Ok I just realized this is not only happening in the story, this has happened so many times in the past. Europe, Asia, it has been a tradition to take female from their life. Oh it is even happening in modern society. Oh.......... humanity.

"My king."

Ok you got me good

Please, please, PLEASE tell me that the way you are spelling Crystal is intentional. Oh god please. My OCD is treating to reach out of my brain and rip out my eyeballs right now!

8667729
Thank you! someone else noticed!

Sombra's blasphemous quip came without missing a beat or pause for reconsideration. "And a whore who raises the sun is still a whore."

And we are supposed to sympathize with this asshat... why? Everything he does just demonstrates how much of a monster he is. And naturally, Celestia isn't permitted to respond because narrative bias.

Congrats, a story hasn't earned my absolute ire so quickly in quite some time. I've already ticked off half my list of fanfic pet-peeves with this one.

8699980
You're entitled to your opinion however his actions have yet to sway me one way or the other. Secondly Celestia has regularly made huge mistakes as a ruler and succeeded through luck in many cases to maintain her rule. He's acting as most medieval kings would, in fact in some ways he's acting more cordial especially considering how he views Celestia. So far this has been the set-up and I'm looking forward to when we start to see reasoning behind his mindset and/or his character development. If this was later in the story and he stayed one-dimensional I'd say you're right but as it stands your objection come off as whining in an attempt to deter people from reading beyond this point. Given what we have so far at this point in the story we're not supposed to like him but recognize there is more to him than just his rudeness. It's a refreshing take that I normally see in actual novels and rarely in fanfics instead of the emo "everyone thinks I'm bad but I'm really good somehow" stereotype that normally is poorly done by how blatantly obvious most stories make it leading to weak character development. Also given how the show's directors recognize Sombra's backstory from 'Fiendship is Magic' issue 1 (not the abridged wiki version which leaves out important details imagine a version of Starlight Glimmer's backstory that actually feels somewhat justifiable including his physical torment) as canon this story can be viewed as AU meaning there could be al sorts of other things we don't know about the scenario. Also if the author leans towards a slightly altered version of that then I have no problem with how he acts and can understand why he'd be like that easily. But alas I need to read more into this story before I can come to any decision about it which is what you should think about before making such a comment in an early chapter of a story. Some people look to the comments for an idea of whether or not they want to read further into a story, myself included, which is why shallow comments like this one of yours annoy me and are insulting to both the readers and author though whether the author takes note of it is another matter.

TLDR: Your comment is focused on a black and white view of the scenario that most likely is wrong and whether you realize it or not may cause new readers to not enjoy it by making their mind run on that track while pissing off those that recognize it.