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Well this is going to have horrible repercussions no matter how the dice fall.
Poor girl.
The body may heal.. but the mind is not always so resilient.
Even if Starlight survives no amount of therapy will fix the damage on her mind. Also it would bring a lot of questions that someone (twilight) can't answers .
I hope Starlight gets back at Bertha in the most violent way possible
What a strip tease man can't wait for more
Sombra; Every last one of them. Every. Single. One.
If this isn't the turning point for Twilight's thinking then I'm going to choke a self-righteous twit. Seriously, she's just trying to stay in her comfort zone and damn everything else.
Wow. If she survives... her mental state is going to be slim to none when it comes to being sane.
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...implying she ever was. Remember, this is a dumbass who decided since she lost her childhood friend to a Cutie Mark, CUTIE MARKS WERE EVIL! NO ONE ELSE CAN HAVE FRIENDS!
That friendship stopped Nightmare Moon, Discord TWICE, Sombra, AND Tirek? DON'T CARE, CUTIE MARKS AND FRIENDSHIPS ARE EVIL!
if both sombra and starlight survive, she want to join him now for revenge
First, she wants no cutie marks on everypony. Now she have none
Holy hot damn. An updated chapter just made my whole week. Looks like we're getting a turning point in the darkest part of the story so far.
I just hope it updates soon because I though this fic was discontinued, from the last chapter.
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Nope. Just super busy. My work schedule has finally stabilized tho, so the next chapter's already in the works.
Having not seen this story before, this is quite interesting and does some things very well. Sombra is a complicated, yet relate-able character, and seeing Fluttershy develop into Queen Fluttershy is something I think was done well. Shy always had some well hidden steel in her in the original show, which is seen more readily here.
A couple of things I feel let the story down, one is the Starlight arc dragging on and on, and for the most part going around and around.
The other is the whole "Ron The Death Eater" use of characters. Twilight and co are incredibly unlikeable, and hypocritical, Moondancer comes across as a psychopath. Celestia is someone who practically sells her ponies, especially to get Twilight back. Does Starlight deserve to be brutally tortured? No, but it's hard to care.
Since you've shown you can develop compelling characters, I think you can do a lot better here.
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Fair points
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Hmm… I don’t think the Celestia trade is that out of character. What is the life of an alicorn vs a few of the mortal race?
On one hand I agree that M and SS are highly irritating, but considering their original mission and the place they come from, it makes more sense
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As far is she is concerned the life of her pet made Is more valuable then her peasant friends whom I highly doubt Celestia Even bothered to remember their names
This is quite the cliffhanger of a chapter. I await the results of the literary coin flip.
She's certainly no DuskDude. That guy got himself off a meathook and proceed to massacre every cultist in sight.
Also, that Griffon cunt needs to die slowly and painfully.
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And how is what she did out of character?
Look at it from Celestie point of view whom is more important and valued to her?
Her favorite pet student and soon to be Successor or a failed two but Communist wanna be, a side character no one gives a damn a bout, a former student who got pissy at Celestia after she refused to give her more power and a two bit Circus traveling Magician. Twilight Far more valuable than the others after all Celestia does not care what happens outside her nations border.
So glad to see this is back.
Hopefully this will show twilight the true horror of the area she is in, and maybe get her to shut up, listen and adapt!
As for who rescued her, frankly it’s definatly royal guard, most likely a battle hardened detachment that knows how to properly fight and are mopping up the camp looking for survivors. So the color she saw of the coat was the armor spell.
I am a HUGE fan of this story. It has a very Game of Thrones feel as far as the stakes are concerned.
Honestly any story that challenges Twilights holier than thou attitude towards taking Celestia's word as the word of god is a great story in my book. She think's she's so much smarter than she actually is but does not know how to think critically and consider options she thinks are impossible.
Meanwhile Fluttershy, while taken from her home via less than savory circumstances, is actually made a stronger pony from the whole ordeal. She grows up fast and learns how to be a queen. Idk if it's a bit of stockholm syndrome thrown in but when she realizes what Sombra is trying to do and bring stability to the region, she realizes that it's bigger than the both of them. She can do good and she learns that Sombra isnt actually a bad pony. He just has a different way of doing things. He rules by example and is respected by the ponies under his command/rule.
That's something that Purplesmart cant even fathom because of her dogmatic loyalty to celestia and how things are "Supposed to be."
I get a lot of "King in the North" vibes from Sombra, but he definitely has a dark side due to his upbringing. Fluttershy is the perfect temperament to him and conversely, Sombra brings out Fluttershy's strength.
The story overall is a bit dark but that's kind of the reality of life. Everything is a utopia inside of Equestria's borders, but this untamed land in the northeast has been neglected by the crown. Sombra is the only person man enough for the job to tackle what's going on. Celestia has turned a blind eye to the pirates and marauders that have been literally killing and eating her subjects. In those circumstances, force has to be met with force, and Sombra did a great job building his army and his kingdom to bring stability to the region.
I fucking love this story. Please keep writing.
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"The King in The North" was exactly what I was going for when I started writing this a couple years ago. When I was reading the Song of Ice and Fire novels, I was livid when Robb Stark's character was killed off in A Storm of Swords, but it wasn't entirely unwarranted. It gave me the idea of placing Sombra in his position, only Sombra isn't so naïve or foolish as to commit the mistakes that led to the events of the red wedding. Unfortunately, we've yet to see the comeuppance that's coming to Walder Frey. Hopefully in the next novel... If it ever comes out.
I discovered this story due to stumbling on this pic https://derpibooru.org/images/2452185?q=my%3Afaves+AND+fluttershy
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Oh yeah, my buddy Sipioc drew that. He showed me this about a year or so ago and I though it was adorable. To be honest, he's a lot more creative than I am, because even I'm having a hard time trying to determine what their kid would like all grown up like that. Should he look like his mother, should he look like his father? Wings or horn? I've racked my brain on the subject and I still can't seem to make up my mind.
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Personally I don't think Snowbear is a very intimidating name
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Awesome
This story has been an amazing adventure so far and I hope you continue it further with ease! I literally created my account this very day to say this and am absolutely in love with it. I just hope to God sombra gets at least a redeeming ending. Pls don't kill our boi
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I'm honored
The next chapter is already finished. I just need to edit it and it'll be out soon.
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Wow! I'm excited and so glad you've not abandoned the story like some others 😬 that's alright as well though, good luck and thank you for the adventure 💕💖
When new chapter?
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It's pretty much done. It just needs to be edited. Balancing my leisure activities with work is a nightmare right now because of the holiday season, but I'll get it published soon.
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I can't wait to see what happens next! I as much as I hope that it is coming out soon now that it is well past the holidays. Please. Keep taking care of yourself we are willing to wait for the next chapter. Have a great day.
Soo? Anyway know?