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Now, I may not know exactly how it would've gone if either Twilight, Moon Dancer or Sunset had woken up first...but I do know that, surely, it would've gone a lot better than THIS. I figured if two head strong ponies like Starlight and Sombra go against each other then something like this would happen.
(SIGH)
Starlight HAD to be the one to wake up first
Great chapter by the way, Keep up the good work my good man
Well, Starlight, good job. So she goes for the moralist martyr route?
fucking finally. someone put that saintamoneus bitch in her place. hopfully sombra gives her a proper flogging for this or just let the garuds know what she did .
Starlight is a god damn retard. I am so glad that Sombra put her in her place. she is too stupid to realize that if Fluttershy was the monster that she believes her to be then Fluttershy would not defend her as much as she does.
well starlight your not the sharpest tool in the shed if I where in her possision I would gladly sacrifice my freedom for my friends
Something tells me that Starlight will be faced with something more than just the dungeon. Maybe no bodily harm will come to her, but I'm sure SSombra is imaginitive enough to think of something appropriate for punishemnt for the mare that hurt his queen and endangered their unborn child.
And there is also the oncoming attack of those gryphon pirates, with Starlight and Fluttershy being the main targets of the leader. Something tells me that Starlight will see the whole carnage that's going to be unleashed from behind the cell's bars.
By the way, I have noticed two times where you've made a spelling mistake on Violet's name:
And here:
It'd be nice to see a conversation between Dear Leader Starlight and King Sombra on governing styles.
"You shouldn't execute Ponies-just kidnap them, steal their Cutie marks, lock them up and force them to listen to your psychotic rantings."
Everyone is complaining about the way Starlight is behaving but it's great, it's showing how poisonous Equestria's morality is.
Even after Starlight hurt Flutters, Fluttershy STILL defended her! What a great friend!!!!
And it went in the direction I was hoping it would, awesome! Love it!
This really reminds me of Injustice Superman Vs Batman debates. Really Starlight, what did you expect when you insult a very angry, powerful and violent ruler's wife. Still great development of tension, but I do want the others to wake up so we can see their perspectives on how things have changed.
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Auto correct keeps fucking rewriting her name whenever I type it!
I'll fix it when I have the chance. I hate it when autocorrect makes me duck when I want to fuck
Is it bad that I have no sympathy for Starlight? I mean, Fluttershy tried her best to help her before and after she renounced their friendship, and now she signed her own death warrant after stepping up to Sombra.
Starlight....There are many, many horrible things he can do to you and he has been nothing but a gracious host and you think it's a good idea to spit in his face???
I love Sombra's reaction here. He's very caring of his Queen even if he still won't let her go see her friends.
I'll go for that bat for both royals. Celestia simply doesn't want these lunatics as her subjects-honestly, would you? They were about to form a lynch mob in the courtroom.
Sombra just has the will to deal with it.
I do hope this issue finally gets resolved next chapter. for the sake of everyone involved.
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Haha, my autocorrect replaces the word mom with artillery most of the time.
"I love you artillery" is not what a mother like mine wants to read.
I love how so many people in these comments don't seem to understand why Starlight has a problem with becoming a trained killer for Sombra or the problem with Fluttershy having zero issues with mass murder to the point where she truly believes that there is nothing wrong with that course of action.
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Mass murder is usually the quickest way to enforce a regime change. Not the best, mind you, but the quickest. Of course Flutttershy would prefer another course of action, she just has the wisdom to realize that there isn't another one that ends in lasting peace.
so my guess is starlight gonna get kidnapped since the pirates think she sombra other mare, and she come to see first hand that sombra the lesser evil
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Yeah but she's actually trying to convince her friend to abandon her morals and join in on the slaughter as if it's just that easy.
Question Boomstick Mick: Will we have more POV chapters from Fluttershy again?
Starlight is so sure that Celestia will jump through rings to get her back. It will be a nice to see how she handles being abandoned. I cant see Celestia trying to save a assassin that she did not sponsored, someone that could easily spark a vengeance strike from Sombra with him killing of a city to prove he is not playing around, that has no true value to the nation like Twilight or Sunset who Celestia has personal interest in.
Place Starlight with the victims from the slavering warlords, and tell her to help them. That will sort her out fast enough. And if she still cant see thae light, banish her outside of the city walls so she can live in her world of blind happiness were no-one ever has to raise a fist in anger or terror.
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As a firearms enthusiast nothing would make me prouder than a son or daughter who lets me know that they care... About artillery.
Jesus H. Christ, Starlight. All you had to do was insist that you be given the chance to consult with your Villains Anonymous sponsor (aka Twilight) before making such a huge decision, and EVENTUALLY Fluttershy might have gotten Sombra to indulge that request... but NOOOO, you had to spit in his face. I'm afraid I feel no sympathy for you; your choices landed you where you are
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I love how the rest like you fail to understand Sombra and Fluttershy's point. Celestia's methods failed so hard here that she just abandoned the entire region to barbarism. And NOBODY had tried a damn thing to fix it, until now. All Starlight and those like her do is go "You're wrong/a monster/ect" and offer NOTHING as a viable solution.
What Sombra is doing is literally what countless rulers in our world did in the past. Civilize the land via the point of a sword. It's EXACTLY how empires like Rome, often considered the pinnacle of civilization for that age, were founded. It's brutal. It's bloody. But it WORKS.
Edit: Remember, people obey the law because breaking it has consequences. Until Sombra came there were ZERO consequences. Now there is someone enforcing the law. And as New Haven proves, that tends to make most follow the rule of law.
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Sure she has no solution but that doesn't give them a right to try and force her to become a killer.
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As every single man and woman in nearly every branch of service on the planet can point out, there is a MASSIVE difference between a SOLDIER defending civilians and a killer. And that's what Flutters and Sombra are asking of Starlight, become a soldier. Which is a LOT better than the execution she deserves for being an attempted assassin AND nearly destroying the entire world. She has ZERO room to preach morality.
“...because Celestia is a superior ruler.”
“No. Celestia no doubt had to do the same tactics to bring the tribes to heel. To keep invaders out. She also had Luna, whose own mystic and power over the darkness could tame the land. Then, as they say, and as we have seen with my husband’s ‘history’, the victor writes history.”
“That’s not-“
“Don’t he naïve. She has been at it so long that the whole of Equestria sees her as a god.”
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you sir are completely right. but I still like to point out how stupid it is.
Starlight put down the friendship Koolade for a second and see the world for how it is not how you want it to be!
It's INCREDIBLE how toxic Equestria's so called "Moral High Ground" is. They're so set in their way to be pacifists and claim that they're the moral leaders of the world, that they ALSO find themselves content in allowing the rest of the world to suffer. Griffonstone, the conquered territories of the ex-Storm King, the Hippogriffs- as long as the threat isn't IN EQUESTRIA, they're happy to live and let live, and nobody's more contented with this than Celestia. Lo and behold, in the shining, utopian city of Canterlot, she sits on her sun-branded ass, in a gilded throne of hypocrisy.
It's a nasty business, but these monstrous bandits are NOT sorry for what they did and what they continue to do, they never will be, and if they ever managed to take down Sombra, they'd commit the same terrible, disgusting acts to every innocent citizen in his kingdom, INCLUDING Starlight.
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You actually have a lot of homonyms peppered throughout your chapters.
Pale instead of pail happens twice in this chapter,
Neddle (which is really just a typo but would be a homonym) instead of nettle
Shutter where you mean shudder
Small things like that.
I have a theory on how this story is going to play out. I’m probably completely wrong.
So we’ve got talented Starlight, newest friend to Fluttershy who as a villain wanted Equality; logical Moondancer, who knows Fluttershy in a friend-of-a-friend way and turned her back on friendship only to return to it; prodigy Sunset, who knows a different version of Fluttershy and as a villain wanted power and Celestia’s approval; and Princess Twilight, who has known Fluttershy the longest and also has the best traits of all three.
Starlight, being the one Sombra wanted to apprentice, is the first to be woken up, she’ll be put back to sleep and we will cycle through the other three. Moondancer will see the logic of Sombra’s rule but disagree with the methods, Sunset will see a changing tyrant and sympathise but ultimately reject him as well because of her devotion to Celestia and Twilight will be unwilling to accept the changes of her friend as anything but Sombra’s corrupting influence. None will be able to reconcile the monster in their minds to the prosperity of New Haven around them.
We the reader will get to see Fluttershy change more, see her child born, and see New Haven grow and prosper around them as Sombra’s rule solidifies.
ALSO
At some point in the future, I would love, love, Love to see a scene where it shows Fluttershy and one of the Fantastic Four we’ve got in the basement. Optimally Twilight, but whichever.
The setup is this: At some point, maybe by the third pony to cycle through, Fluttershy wants to prove a point to Twilight and convinces Sombra to take prisoners when they surrender and send them to Equestria to be rehabilitated. Only the ones who surrender, and only the ones who they aren’t forced to put down, mind you. By the third such delivery, Equestrian prisons are full, Celestia doesn’t want so many violent criminals in her kingdom and can’t rehabilitate them fast enough. She tells Sombra to stop sending. New Haven can’t imprison or rehabilitate so many which is why they’re sending them in the first place. Sombra asks a question, Celestia leaves the answer to Twilight because she’s a bitch like that and “oh friendship”. Fluttershy explains the setup to Twilight and the chapter cliffhangers on what was both Sombra’s question to Celestia, and Fluttershy’s question to Twilight:
What do you want us to do? Kill them?
SUCK IT EQUESTRIAN MORAL HIGHGROUND.
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Thanks for reminding me. I'll do some editing when I get home from work.
Just imagine if, in the next chapter, Starlight is in the dungeon and, when he goes to vent his rage at her, she tells Sombra out of spite about Fluttershy’s plan of ’playing the long game’ as it were to free her friends? Imagine the bomb that would be to drop on him... Would he have reason to start distrusting her then? Would she try an fix it or make new plans? What drama would that cause?
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Given Sombra's grasp of politics he'd probably be impressed by Fluttershy's quick thinking and cunning maneuver given she played TWO immortals like a fiddle.
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Well, one, Sombra had stated he has no real idea if he is immortal. So far, it seem he was just kept in stasis by Celestia and Luna’s magic when they banished him to the frozen north and it was his Guts from Berserk level toughness, tenacity, strength, rage and sheer unstoppable willpower that has kept him alive before that. And second, given his painful past, state of his mental health, all that, I think he would initially feel a mix of betrayal and like he was used by the only one he truely romantically loved and would have to deal with that. He might get past all that and be impressed, but the shock and hurt would come first in such an event.
I really like how Starlight Glimmer's character is handled in this story. Her outbursts, mannerisms and way of thinking feels very real, believable and very akin to her cannon characteristics, only intensified to match the overall tone and subject matter of the story. I really, really enjoy her character here. Love, love, loving every minute and interaction she has, more so with Flutters and the supporting characters but her back and forths with Sombra are so good too. Like whenever I get to a part where they're about to sit down and talk I'm just hanging for dear life at the edge of my seat, fingers crossed that she'll just keep it together long enough to skate bye to the next chapter. Great characters, great setting, great story, can't wait for more!
Final note- I just wanna give Flutter's some love so bad! The mare's over here trying to help liberate and heal a country Celestia decided wasn't worth the dirt under her hoofs to help while trying to get her friends back to their own beds in Equestria as safely as she can, while pregnant. Starlight, I get it, you hate your circumstances and you don't want to be forced to compromise or choose between your friends and your freedom, but could you stop being an asshole for longer than five straight minutes, shut up, listen and actually digest what you've been told before you rip it and the ponies you talk to apart!?
As a Side Note-
Celestia's rule is the sole reason why Equestria keeps getting rolled and jolly stomped by every fool who comes past. If her ponies were more competent and capable during a crisis, things would play out a whole lot differently when ever they're up against threats of varying proportions. I honestly wonder how she's been able to maintain 1000 years of peace supposedly without resorting to any of Sombra's methods. And on top of that she's had no known outside aid, no Elements of Harmony after the fall of Nightmare Moon and after that no Luna either. 1000 years of peace without so much as a slap to somepony's muzzle, mmhm, whatever you say princess.🙎
Part of me wants to yell at Celestia for pacifying her subjects, sheilding and no doubt discouraging them from investigating the lands beyond her claimed boarders and the lives of whoever might be there. But another part of me wonders if this was all apart of some larger plan and that maybe Equestria's beloved princess is more like the "old" Starlight Glimmer than they know.
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ULTIMATE PLOT TWIST!
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You bring up something that I've been pondering about, if Sombra isn't a full pony(otherwise he wouldn't survive those normally fatal injuries) then what is he?
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And there in is why Humanity is a superior race. For all our wars and slaughter of each other, it's made us stronger. Conflict breeds struggle, struggle breeds perseverance, perseverance breeds Strength, Strength breeds advancement. Technology of all fields advanced more during WWI and WWII than it did in the previous 20 years. The Cold War saw humanity advance its technology in all fields because of the conflict between the U.S and the Soviet Union and all their allies. Now the War on Terror has seen even more technological advances. It's why all those stories of Equestria versus Humans are bushwah, they'd get curb stomped by Humanity in two seconds flat.
How in the ever-living fudge sickles have I never found this fic before today- wait, no.. last night? Um.. well I found this fic at around 3 this morning and now it’s 6.. ok so it’s today, lol. cough anyway.. wait a minute, YOU DEPRIVED ME OF A WHOLE NIGHT OF SLEEP THANKS.
Seriously though, I thought I shipped sombrashy before but now.. hoo! Sombrashy for new otp Jesus what have you done to me?? Ugh I’m so tired
It’s great. Your story is great. That.. that’s basically what I was trying to say above but I’m so loopy it hurts. Thank you so much boomstick for this amazing fic! I eagerly await the next update.
NOW IM OFF TO BED is probably going to cringe so hard at this comment when she wakes up later :)
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Uh... Broomstick?
And, uh, sorry for depriving you of sleep. I'm glad you're liking the story, but I don't want it to effect your health.
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Omg I actually called you broomstick! thanks autocorrect don’t worry my sleeping schedule is already ridiculously screwed up
Oh Glimmy, Glimmy, Glimmy...
PREACH FLUTTERSHY!!! YOU GO GIRL!!!
Also, Moonsorrow, "Guts-level toughness, tenacity, strength, rage and sheer unstoppable willpower."
And Zane... I agree with ALL your sentiments.
And now that our little birb is pregnant I can’t get this image out of my head
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If she starts nesting I’m done
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But she needs a nest for her eggs... That mammals can apparently lay. Do you even science?