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Glad to see this updated! Love the action and the unexpected “teaming” up with Sombra and Twilight. Look forward to reading the next chapter!
PLEASE DON'T LET HIM DIE!
Awesome chapter as always!
At long last, you see the world from Fluttershy’s eyes, Twilight.
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Too bad no one in scene asked Twilight what that makes Celestia(regarding her doing nothing for this area of the world, forget what it was called.)
If you actually meant to say viscus in these places instead of viscous, then you should use the adjective form visceral. The word is placed in parts of sentences that contextually calls for an adjective, and viscus is a noun. For reference, viscus is a word used to refer to an internal organ in a non-specific manner. Viscera is the plural form of that, but it's still a noun. Visceral is the adjective form of viscus or viscera. Viscous is an adjective that refers to the viscosity of a thick liquid, viscosity being a measurement of how freely it flows. A thick liquid has a high viscosity; it doesn't flow as well as liquids with a lower viscosity, and leaves a thick and clear trail of residue behind as it flows.
The uses of viscus that I didn't underline are ones where I felt you might have actually meant viscus, and thus I'm advising the use of visceral. The underlined use of the word is the one I most suspect you might have meant viscous instead.
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I agree that it's a word I overused, and I didn't catch it in editing. I'll go back and make some changes when I have the chance. Good looking out, I appreciate it.
been waiting for this to update
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Just looked over my comment again and realized I completely messed up in my advice. What I actually wanted to say was that the underlined use of viscus is where I thought you might have actually meant viscus and thus should change it to visceral, and the ones that aren't underlined are where I thought you meant viscous. The uses that aren't underlined refer to various vital bodily fluids of which one is specifically blood, a viscous liquid, and the underlined one is used to describe chunks of something internal being hacked up alongside what I can only surmise is blood. Of course, with the use of viscus referring to the spray of blood, and the one referring to some kind of dark ooze being hacked up by Sombra, either of those could be described as visceral. That being said, the one about chunks at least, is definitely not viscous.
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I know the difference between viscus and vicious. (Although I don't think auto correct does) I never used it in the wrong context. Viscus is an adjective used to describe organic matter. I just hate using the same word too many times in the same chapter, so I'm still going to go back and switch up some of those parts.
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Viscus is actually a noun, and it's essentially a placeholder term for any specific internal organ. I don't know what actual word matches the definition you laid out, but the closest one within the realm of the word you used is visceral. It relates to the word viscera, which is the plural form of viscus, and is the adjective form of them.
Further, I never mentioned the word vicious.
For as much as he's been suffering, Sombra's going Brock Samson on those pirates. Betha's speech wasn't entirely wrong. In fact, I thought of One Piece when reading it.
Reading this reminded me of Android 16's speech in DBZ Abridged.
As much as I've grown complacent with the thought of plot armor, I won't deny that Sombra's struggle with staying alive is pretty compelling. I'm almost convinced he'll croak at or before the ending...
Aww, isn't her lack of self-awareness so adorable.
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Yes, I hate it when I get viscus all over the front bumper of my truck when I hit a deer.
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The best villains are the ones you grudgingly find yourself finding common cause with.
COME ON PLOT ARMOR!!! It's a small thing but it makes me feel a little better hearing Starlight called hypocritical. Thanks for the chapter this made my week.
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yeah sombra the kind of leader you need to conquer a land of barbarity and anarchy but he die leaving fluttershy in charge who can now be commanding but kind, it guarantee sombra kingdom will last
nice speech kinda ruined since it comes from cannibalistic pirates, but in any conflict every side see itself as the good guys and the other the villains, and why does sombra say he a king because he got the power and will to make his claim true, and in a savage land might makes right
to paraphrase star wars
sombra: this is now my land and subjects
random solider; my king is that legal
sombra: i will make it legal
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That very much needed debate can wait until after they defeat Betha and save Starlight.
bruh just click E. its like you never play tf2 before
10431845 Bringing the term 'Keep your friends close and your enemies closer' to a whole new level
Dude, you're killing me. I don't know who takes longer to update their stories. You or Netflix. just give me one spoiler is Starlight going to survive or not?
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MEDIC!
I think some of the paragraphs should be cut apart for readability, but other thatn that, this is great! glad to see this again :D
Also, calling it now, Sombra does something to ascend
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...ouch
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I mean no disrespect. it's just that right now I feel like Starlight. you got me hanging waiting for the next chapter.
You're more like George Floyd. Just breathless with anticipation.
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...ouch. Too soon.
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Okay, well.... You're like Curt Kobain. Your mind has been blown. That was bad. Let me try again.
You're like Micheal J. Fox. You're just shaking with excite.... Holy damn, that's tasteless.
You're more like Christopher Reeve. Absolutely paralyzed with suspen.... What the fuck is wrong with me today?
...
You're like Epstein... You didn't kill yourself?
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Sun butt only cares what happens in the nation she rules. Anything outside of that she could care less about
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Not really Floyd was a scumbag who got what was coming to him
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Edit: Just deleted this whole comment after I realized this is the last subject I want to discuss on an escapist website that's supposed to be about fun colorful talking ponies.
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There is so much I could say. However this is not my page. So have a lovely pony life.
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Well am not a coward who shy away from the blunt truth.
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Well sadly that useless state isn't falling into sea yet sadly
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(Eating popcorn and sipping tea)
Go on. U have my fool attention.
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Shouldn you be moaning and bitching about the thug named Floyd then idiots like you defend scum like him witch shows you love defending people with long track record of crime including breaking into a home and holding a pregnant woman at gunpoint.
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Shouldn you realize you're trying to start a race war in the middle of a Sombrashy fanfic. Lame I say. Extremely lame.
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Tell me how is it starting a race war over George Floyd he was a scumbag Criminal who got what he deserved. So tell me name one good thing that man ever did oh wait their wasn't. It's been proven he was high on drugs when he was being arrested.
But then again you don't understand the definition of what facts and evidence mean. But then again you are libtard
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Floyd was arrested and convicted of robbing a pregnant woman during a home invasion involving several other men. He wanted money and drugs, and pressed his pistol to her stomach, threatening to kill her and her unborn child, while she was pleading and screaming for help. He also has an extensive arrest record. Still want to defend him oh wait of course you would hell I wouldn't be surprised if defend the scumbag who shot that little white boy not even a month a point blank in the back of the skull with a gun
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*Looks up from his Dungeons and Dragons bong, eyes bloodshot* "No arguing, cunts. Shake dicks and makeup." *Bubbling sounds intensify*
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Tell me how this started over me asking the author just to speed up his updates. I don't care about your jarhead rants. I just want more story content. I have spoken.
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It started with me telling a spicy joke ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Don't worry about him, my dude. I see him around the website quite a bit. While I don't necessarily disagree with everything he says, his acerbic idiolect and abrasive social commentary betoken a geniality less or equal to that of an owlbear in heat. Also, like any truculent child or soccer mom with a malignant case of I'm never wrong itis, he's always gotta have the last word. So I'd advise you to withdraw, or you two will be here all night.
“What’s wrong?”
Twilight...goddammit wake up! Guy has spears lodged in him and you ask “What’s wrong?”
....
OH SHIZA
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Pointing out the fact that a scummy man eventually had karma catch up with him is not in any way shape or form trying to start a race war.
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Maybe, but does it have to be the topic of discussion in the middle of a Sombrashy fanfic? All I did was make a comment about updates on a story. I don't mix real world affairs with MLP literature. It makes for bad conversations. I have spoken.
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As you can see it works. The conversation is over. I have spoken.
AAAAAAA, more cliffhangers! >:(
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Have a nice tall glass of milk on hand for the next chapter. Things are about to get spicy