• Member Since 3rd Apr, 2013
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EsotericPhantasm


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Demon
Abomination
Monster
What most don't know is that my first title was,
Savior

Before the unicorns, pegasi, and earth ponies came to what they called Equestria others were already there. Most already know of the Dragons, Zebras, Minotaurs and Buffalo. They weren't the only ones.

Snatched from my home world into this ancient time. I must bring harmony to a land that is far more tumultuous and chaotic than what the future may hold. But if things in this world are not as I thought, what does it mean if I actually encounter those who will come?



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Author's Notes -
I actually created the basis for this story while helping contribute a character to the story Malideus. It's quite good and I'm glad the way he interacted with his readers by taking so many suggestions and then somehow fitting it into the story.

While there may be some correlation such as the main character's name is the same I've also changed one particular name of a character that was in the other story. See if you can spot it.

I'm not sure if I should make this part of the same multiverse as the Displaced group which was basically started and inspired by Malideus since I'll be posting this story to fanfiction.net as well. I'm sort of hoping to make it its own thing. While it does sort of hint at the same Displaced multiverse in the beginning it's more of a homage and tease than a promise. Hope you enjoy regardless.

The character tags are those who should be in the story should I keep at it and not slack off. It takes about 5-10 HOURS just to write one chapter, which doesn't include proofreading. And these aren't even very long.


P.S. I actually don't have an editor or proofreader at the moment so if you'd like to proofread chapters before they come out please PM me.

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 21 )

While not a complete magic system is described in this chapter please realize that what's here it is my original work and I'm planning on using it for my own future IP. In other words, original IP DON'T STEAL!

If you would like to use it and even build upon it please PM me. Realize it's like licencing an original work. I don't mean to be a hard-ass about it but I want to make myself clear. Hard work did go into this.

Suggestions and feedback on it are appreciated.

Hope you enjoyed the chapter.

So do you think I should do a large time skip and just get to the part in the future where the Mane Six live, or should I continue on to the wars and battles with the minotaurs, zebras and who knows what else. Am I good at battle scenes? Never tried so we'll see.

I like where this is going and personally i'd like to see how well you can do battle scenes. It would be interesting seeing a story that stays in the past for some time instead of just being in the present with the mane six. Granted you could use flashbacks to explain stuff like practically every other writer on FimFic but i think it would be nice to having something moderately original which you seem to have a nice start on. You get a favorite and an upvote from me.

6362978 Thanks I really appreciate it. It's not as common to do a story that doesn't involve many main characters in the beginning. I think that's a waste since usually it doesn't give you enough room to develop a real character and are left with so many cookie cutters since even if they are a special snowflake you don't understand their motivations or feelings.

I'm glad you like what I'm trying here with starting and staying in the past. Not only the past, but farther than I think any other story I've read on here, which I'm hoping makes it unique enough that I write something really interesting.

I am having a hard time with the next chapter since it will determine the direction of the entire story. Perhaps I'll just wing it and see what spills onto the keyboard and see if it's any good. It's worked so far. We'll see what happens then.

the door swung open, and a rabbit hopped out.
more please!

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I'd say stick with the current time line and go from there. If/When you get to it, the time jump to the mane six could be a sequel, but it would be great to get some more story in the past first. If it's not rushed or an obvious 'this shit happened, but we're moving past that already' then I will be very interested. It'll be unique in it's own sense since all the other stories I've read like this either have the main character already in Twilight and company's time or do slightly confusing flashback chapters.

Also a good way to get over writer's block, for me anyway, is to picture a future scene and get really pumped up about writing it. Then sit down, turn off or tune out any distractions, and don't think, just write. Go with the flow. Picture the scene you're writing in your head and type out what you see happening.

There's a lot of potential here and really want to see what you do with it. :pinkiehappy:

This is a really good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy:

While I've tried planning for at the minimum one chapter a week it's been hectic since I've had to move. I will be working on it. Just wanting you to know I'm not dead :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by TeddyTheBear deleted Sep 13th, 2015

More?????¿????????????????????:pinkiehappy:

6569183 Your wish is granted.:applejackconfused:

Thanks for reading.:yay:

6363788 Nah it was a Jackalope. But good guess. :pinkiehappy:

6362978

Thanks. I'm sure you will find things I will introduce to the community to be interesting. Please let me know if I mess up though. A story at least needs to be self-consistent.


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I appreciate the vote of confidence. I guess I do have enough ideas in me to flesh out the past as a series than a side note like in most stories, which is kind of what I had in mind from the beginning.

These are blatantly tortuous cliffhangers.........:ajbemused:

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