• Member Since 29th Oct, 2014
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Wonder


Sometimes I like to just sit down and do nothing. Alright fine, all the time.

T

This story is a sequel to Spike the pony


Spike wants to be a pony again and Twilight wants to test a highly dangerous and possibly deadly spell. What could possibly go wrong?
I'll tell you what everything!

Chapters (14)
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Comments ( 73 )

:moustache: Rarity?
:applecry::unsuresweetie::scootangel::heart::heart::heart:
:raritystarry: SWEETIE BELLE!
:moustache:HELP ME !
:raritycry: HE'S MINE!

~Oh, what's this? An New story and one that's about Spike going pony? Fellow.:twilightsmile:
Ok, after reading this story, I going give you an like. We normally don't give one right away on the first chapter, but well, this story started out good. I may be blind, but I found no big mistake, but I'm not saying there is none, I be saying I can find any.:twilightsheepish:
Anyways keep it up, your on an rocking start!:twilightsmile:

This... This is beautiful :rainbowlaugh: Can't wait for more! :rainbowwild:

Hmm... I'd like to see there this goes. Perhaps you can fit a cameo of Hapless the talking mailbox somewhere in the next chapter?

"That's a good little sister." Rarity smiled almost evilly before trotting off. "Have fun."

Read that with a questionable, deep, masculine voice. :scootangel:



It sounds so dirty... :trollestia:

7303917
Already ahead of ya.:rainbowlaugh:

Changing your outer appearance won't land you one.

Since when is Twilight an 'expert' on romance anyway?

7311585
It's mostly a joke. She thinks reading something counts as

knowing

it.

Well, crap. This is going to be awkward as heck. :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

Hmm, :pinkiehappy: this one needs other chapter. :yay:

7365441
Don't worry. There a more on the way.

Oh.

Well.

Shi--
*Shield hits me in the face*

"Language!"

well lets see if Spikes new form has the affects he wanted :raritystarry:

Well, looks like Spike forgot to turn off his swag:moustache:

And I can't believe I used that overused line for a comment:facehoof:

Umm... The Golden Oaks Library isn't around when the CMC have their cutie marks...

7480473
I little error on my part. I'll find a way to rectify this.

I want to see, when Rarity and Sweetie Belle will discover it was Spike all this time.

7615543
Hehehe, hahaha HaAHaHA, MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Ahem, sorry about that. That was the evil in me escaping.

7616145 I like it. You did a great laugh.

that is either the biggest mistake Spike has ever made or the greatest chance he has ever taken :applejackunsure:
probably both :pinkiesmile:

I seriously realize that Opalescence is here and can totally recognize Spike.

I wonder what Twilight & Rainbow Dash are doing... Wait Tank isn't a pony now is he?

"Did she just say I wasn't relevant?" Scootaloo said after several minutes of confusion.

Hahaha! :rainbowlaugh:

7620775
I'm not sure if recognising Spike is good or bad?

7620795
Haven't thought about tank yet.... Also, I'll leave that to your imagination.

It's not like he's got anything to lose. Either Rarity accepts and he gets the chance to sweep her off her hooves before revealing who he is. Or she turns him down and he goes back to being her dragon friend.
Spike has everything to gain and nothing to lose.

7620912 The eyes never lies.

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She tells him she's not interested in him but is waiting for a special somepony(Spike) to ask her out... DOH! :facehoof:

""I have much to do and little time to do it."

Nice nod to Willy Wonka


and yeah..typing chapters on mobile sucks...

7846592
The reference was an accident and I actually went back and watched the movie because you said that. Love that movie.

I still don't have a computer as of yet so I typed this on my phone, which is surprisingly difficult and annoying.

Know that feel, bro. :fluttershysad:
*Random Hug*

Yeah, I'd like to see where this story goes! Hope you keep updating it!

That reference is from Jak and Daxter 2: Renegade.

7968567
You sir, have a special place in my heart.

"Oh, nothing darling. Just thinking to myself." She announced. "You know how it is."
"Nope,"

Dang, Spike just zinged himself. :rainbowlaugh:

Wow, you've clearly improved on writing since the last chapter. I'm impressed! :twilightsmile:
A few typos I must point out, though:

"Oh, nothing darling. Just thinking to myself." She announced. "You know how it it."

2nd it should be an is.

Their plans never seemed to work out the way they wanted thing to

How they wanted them to, I assume you mean.

Unfortunate the sun was spiteful and knew

Unfortunately. And there should be a comma after the word spiteful.

Good addition as always, I look forward to the next installment. :twilightsmile:

8059615
I had a bit more time to work on this chapter so I was able to play around with it more. It also helps that I didn't get stuck halfway because I forgot my plan like I did with the last chapter. :rainbowlaugh:
Thanks for pointing out the flaws. I have fixed them up. :twilightsmile:

8059615 On that note, did you enjoy the little story about the planets because I got a bonus chapter about them for after the story if finished

8059980
Oh, yes. I was cracking up at that! I had absolutely no idea what was happening, in a good way this time. :twilightsmile:

This is an example of a good way to do a simple shipfic: short, simple, well-timed, and not too rushed. You've improved, if I may be so blunt. :twilightsmile:

"I didn't mean to drop it, I swear. I am sooo sorry. Please do sue me."

"Please do sue me."

Sounds like someone's lookin' for a fight.

8166108
Hahaha, didn't notice that. She must have one hell of a lawyer.

Oh, this is going to be nice.

Dan

Actually, the most massive/dense gives the biggest boom.

Mass vs. size is important distinction.

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