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Wonder


Sometimes I like to just sit down and do nothing. Alright fine, all the time.

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The summer sun celebration is about to begin and Nightmare Moon is soon to be released from her lunar prison. In a world without Twilight Sparkle, how would Nightmare Moon be defeated and what will become of Ponyville?
Featured 9/1/2015 for a few hours :rainbowlaugh: Even got a screenshot of it.

Chapters (14)
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Comments ( 112 )

This is an AWESOME first fic! I liked the originality in it; using Sunset Shimmer. That was such a surprise! I had automatically assumed Twilight, but it was Sunset! I'm tracking this one.

I figured Sunset, and man Love your version of Celestia already. But i don't think Spike should be there. Sunset.

Not bad. I like the subtle hint you put in the title.

Very nice and I look forward to more.

Well, this isn't bad. When you told me the plot, I had no idea that Sunset Shimmer would be here. Does that mean that Twilight is evil? :rainbowlaugh:
I'm obviously joking there.
Anyway, aside some grammar mistakes, this fic has potential. Good luck with it! :pinkiehappy:

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Thx. I didn't think anyone would be interested enough in this story to track it.

5241097 Are you kidding? This story is great! Keep up the good work!

Sunset, you're MEAN!! DX Poor Rainbow Dash!

I like this because you can really see how Sunset is different than Twilight, she's got a mean streak.

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Thanks:twilightsmile: Thats what I was aiming for.

5282518
I don't know why but I see sunset as slightly older. BTW I like the baconhair thing. I may use that. Did you like the most recent chapter? Sunset was most likely taken on as celestias pupil at foalage.

“Thats really nice of you, but I really-

You forgot an apostrophe in that's. :twilightsmile:

Can't wait for more!

5283196
Thx for pointing that out. I'll get round to fixing that next time I'm on a computer. (On my phone right now)

5283196
There you go. I fixed it.:twilightsmile:

Apparently their,” She put on a sarcastic tone. “too busy too send us a chariot.”

Apparently they're.

Awesome chapter! :pinkiehappy:

5317388
HAHA. I can always count on you.

5317388
Ok, its fixed. Thx bro. :twilightsmile: Glad you pointed that out.
On a side now. WOW. You read that chapter within minutes of it coming out. DAMN.:pinkiegasp:

5317407 I just happened to be on and am a moderately fast reader. :scootangel:

Awesome chapter! I need more. :pinkiecrazy:

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I'm glad you liked it. Personly I thought it was lacking... Something. Remember to give any suggestions you have.

This chapter was awesome! I liked the idea of Pinkie Pie breaking the fourth wall- that was hilarious! :pinkiesmile:

5342523
Haha. THX:pinkiehappy:
But it was her idea...

Great chapter! I can't wait to read more. :yay:

wiggle your body like so,” Pinkie did some strange dance. “and walk out

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Not sure, but I think you're supposed to write it like this:

wiggle your body like so-” Pinkie did some strange dance “-and walk out

. You might wanna check the grammar guide for this one.
But fun chapter! I liked it!

5358252
No, I've seen examples of writing that use this type of... thing. But I appreciate your input. I can always count on you. (Still not sure if your M/F yet though?)

5359670 Female. :pinkiesmile:
Okay, that's good! Wasn't sure how that worked.

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Thx Lulu. Glad you liked it.

I'm guessing this is Applejack's honesty test? :)

I must agree on windows 8... The story is quite decent though.

Great chapter! I can't wait to read more. :ajsmug:

On your Windows, is it not connecting to the WiFi?

5431488
How did you know?:rainbowhuh:
Do you know how to fix it?

5430585
Hehe wrong. You're all gonna be shocked by the next chapter.

5432047
I also have a Windows 8 I looked it up there's a guy that explained how to fix it by switching two wires in the back. http://jamescroft.co.uk/blog/technology/fix-for-lenovo-g580-wifi-issues-on-windows-8/
Is yours a Lenovo?

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HP pavilion. And mine is a laptop so I have to use the control panel and something about man settings. Boring stuff. Anyway. Thx for reading and hope you enjoy The next chapter.
Also, on a scale of one to ten, one being 'how to sharpen a pencil volume 7 by Twilight Sparkle' and ten being any daring do novel, how would you ratey story.

9 I love how it isn't exactly like what happened with Twilight but close enough to be relatiable:raritywink:
This is an amazing story and I will follow it until the end.

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I'm going to guess..

Sunset: "Well, I for one welcome our new Lunar Overlord."

I don't like where this is heading!!! :ajbemused:

5473126
Muahahahaha. You won't have to wait long.

This story is great!!!!!!! :heart:

Uh-oh....Sunset Shimmer, remember the magic of friendship! REMEMBER IT!!!

5511433
muahaha. She hasn't had friendship yet remember.

Wait... only three chapters?! How will this be done in only three more? They had better be long ones... this story is too good to be done yet!

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They are going to be longer than the normal ones. I will aim for a minimum f 2000 words each, maybe more.

5514521 Okay. But still, a story this good can't end that quickly! Oh, you're killing me here. :unsuresweetie:

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What if there is a sequel planned. You never know. :unsuresweetie:

5518931 Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!Yes!:twilightsmile:

Wait...

What if

No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!No!:twilightangry2:

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