Berry Punch has been starting to think that maybe Pinkie’s helping her out for more reasons than just wanting a drinking buddy.
She’s right, of course. She’s just very, very wrong about what those reasons are….
Written for the More Most Dangerous Game Competition; cover art cropped from original (click Source - original is SFW.)
Story reworked? Cupcakes.
Trigger warning: This story is built off the basic framework of Cupcakes, and written by somebody who read that story and laughed. Grimdark as 
, but the gore is minimized (hence the Teen rating). However, if you want specific search terms to watch out for….
Alcohol abuse
Kidnapping
Physical and Psychological Torture
Wetting
Vivisection
Abortion
Murder
Group Cannibalism
Predation
You have been warned. Abandon all hope, ye who enter here.
Pre-read by Daniel-Gleebits!
...Huh
Wat
I just couldn't get into this one. It suffered from one of the primary problems Cupcakes also had: Pinkie's actions didn't match up with her characterization. There isn't any explanation as to why she wants to murder multiple people; it's just there. Without that explanation, it's hard to reconcile those actions with the canon character, which makes it that much harder to get into the story.
5554461
Thank you for actually saying something!
I actually dropped a few hints as to why Pinkie seems so OOC here, though I didn't come out with the full explanation. (Of course, said explanation wouldn't have worked in this story so well, given I have a sequel planned to it, but there y'go.)
If you're at all curious about what the issue is, I hope you'll keep an eye out for the aforementioned sequel when I start getting it together.
5554539
Yeah, I picked up the one hint where Pinkie mentioned that she escaped (or something similar). It wasn't nearly enough for me to reconcile the characterization, though.
And I guess I'm interested in a sequel? If it can resolve the characterization issues, there's potential for something interesting.
5554573
Well, if you'd like a pre-reading gig and don't mind an erratic production schedule, we could work something out. ^^
Ironically, I was actually worried it would be too obvious what was going on in this... may have been a mistake on my part to play it quite so coy.
5554591
Sorry, I'm not one to do much editing or prereading.
5554646
No problem, I'll
blackmailfind somebody. :)Almost makes me sad that there won't be any sexy times you set it up so well.... Oh well onward !
Birth by butchery lol!
Nice read I've always considered myself a connoisseur of torture porn. I will admit your version of horror is definitely more unsettling though mixing the two can be amazing.
5568870
Oh, certainly. I just prefer Bava to Argento to Roth any day of the week. ;)
Wow you have it in for lecter style killing.
5606046
If one does what God does enough times, one becomes like Him.
I kind of really want to know what's up with Pinkie -- thank you for making it obvious that she's not herself, or at least not what we think she is -- but the ending of chapter two was far too gratuitous for my tastes.
5554539
What happened to the sequel?
10312596
Iiiiiit was kinda the victim of my life gradually falling apart over the next few years. If I can, I might get back to it, but we'll have to see how it goes.