Berry Punch loves partying and alcoholic cider…unfortunately, Minuette has noticed that her drinking has become more excessive and her partying more hardcore.
During a party hosted by Pinkie Pie, Minuette and Twilight agree to host an intervention while Berry’s guard is down.
But, what is the true reasoning behind her new, self-destructive behavior?
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A good story of a friend helping another becoming a non-user, but a few mistakes (some that appeared more than once...)
•Paragraphing differences when someone is talking.
You just misinterpreteted the FAQ guide. Its all cool.
•This is common, and I swear in my stories it'll probably pop up too:
Unless its a name, don't capitalize the word after a comment/question/exclamation/etc.
Other than these, great story!
Short and sweet, gave me a warm fuzzy feeling with some sads thrown in. Plus it had my fave pony in it, always a good thing
. Great job.
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Which one is that?
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Berry Punch.
This was really lovely and sweet. Well done.
Colgate’s real name was actually Minuette, but an odd stallion calling himself ‘The Doctor’ took notice of her mane a few years ago and began calling her ‘Colgate’ as a nickname, according to him it looked like a brand of toothpaste from wherever he originated.
REALY!?
YOU DON'T SAY!?
Little too fast to have much impact to me, but still a solid piece.
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Yeah, I don't like the way it turned out either, but it's hard for me to tell with pacing sometimes because I hate ALL of my writing.
I'm sorry.
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I didn't mean to step on anyone's toes...I just that that would be an interesting thought to put into the story because I wasn't sure which name to call her by.
I'm sorry.
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I'm sorry.
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you misunderstand me, i was making a joke