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This story is a sequel to Age of Terror
The journal of a white diamond as it turns into Black Lace.
Thank you to Foals Errand for prereading.
A prequel to Age of Terror, but it is recommended that you read AoT first. Not necessary, but recommended.
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5364462 Please edit for no spoiling. Also, thank you.
5364465 Like that.
5364476 No, I mean to either take down your comment, or add the spoiler block over it.
5364478 Ok, you already know what I originally wrote in the comment, but I'll say it: I loved this prequel to Age of Terror. You did a good job.
lost hope & treason I find it out of character ,
5364905 For whom, Rarity? One must remember what she has just gone through. Most would have lost their minds long before she gave up.
5364909 Read what real prisoners go through, from WW II through to Viet Nam etc. You would be surprised with the real deal.
Amazing what they put up with years on end. (Research)
5364917 You are talking about hardened soldiers though, not a prim and proper fashion designer.
5364922 Try the Chinese population ww II,,, Pulpot in Cambodia, ethnic prisoners in 1930s Germany , (research) history if full of populations that were only simple folks who just wanted to be left alone,
My wifes father was a mayor/county official in China when the communists took over, He was interned in a work camp for 3 years. . .
Just because he didn't agree with the policy of the day.
Just normal people who just got in the way and nothing more. research more on how adaptable people really are.
5364952 Look, if this is how you feel, fine. But she thought she went through months of time even though she knew she didn't so was driven insane by the darkness, raped, and only had one hope to get out. Add the princesses, the strongest beings in Equestria, dying, and why should she have hope?
5364964 Research, We all have hidden strengths even if all is lost-- Look at the Jews in WW II they lost whole families held for years in a work camp only to die
Research ,You may think in only character weakness. . .Poor choice as a writer.
the fuck is this this story is only
1,601 words total
5889576 I'm sorry, I'm confused. Is that a bad thing?
your ch by this rules should be 1000 words at lest not one of your chapters do that and you last story was 9000 something so yes its bad and to you look like a fake theirs only 2 outer ppl who read this and your story was good but this this bad if this made as a one shot i would understand but its 12 chapters so its should be at 12000 this i don't upload to this site its the rules each chapter needs to be 1000 words at least so it pisses me off to see ppl getting away with this
5889942 I'm sorry sir, but I'm not getting away with anything. The site rules are that a story must be, in total, over a thousand words at publish, not that each chapter is a thousand words. So, this style is well within the rules of the site, as this was its entirety upon publish. I'm sorry that someone misinformed you, but those are the rules.
Well. That was certainly a...a thing. A momentary mindscrew at the jumping of the date, and one wonders just how far gone she was even before the halfway point. Was she there a month? Two months? Six? Isolation does not do a mind favors, and Sombra at least pulled her out when her spirit was breaking, ready to submit; not when her mind was well and truly broken beyond repair.
This was a solid example of how to use few words and plenty of blanks to tell a full story. I forget the source of the quote, exactly, but it goes something along the lines of "Perfection is achieved not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing more to cut away." May not be perfect, and my standard in this category still belongs to The Cough, but this? I approve.
5919476 I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it. My main deviation from third person omniscient is with these odd journal style fics, with Community Service being my best I believe, though Twilight's Pet Tentacle holds a special place of comfort and happiness in me. I will never claim to be the best or that I should be the standard of any fic genre though. I simply want to make sure I'm above average, so I'm glad I seemed to succeed there.
So that's why Rarity turned into Black Lace. Pity nopony couldn't save her and all the Mare 6
Feels quite real. She's savvy by not writing any secrets in it, and a story like this has a good reason for short chapters, but I hope they get longer.
What's with that smile? Is that book a trap somehow?
I'm surprised they haven't taken advantage of her yet, or are they aware that she knows some martial arts or something and waiting until she's weak?
This makes me want to know exactly how they lost to Sombra.
She's lasted a month. Impressive, but she sounds close to breaking.
Whose graves? Does she now believe her friends are dead?
Day 14? I thought it had been over a month.
I'm starting to seriously feel sorry for her at this point.
You should always be resisting, but honestly I wouldn't blame her if she stopped. Sounds horrible, and from just a few sentences each time. You're writing well.
Hope. So near yet so far.
Did she draw those?
Sad. Rarity died the moment she believed her friends were gone.
5364909 Your writing of her actually impressed me. She's no soldier after all, so it was quite amazing.
5364922 Ah, you noted that.
5364952 Maybe, but these aren't humans, they're ponies. They've probably never had a world war for thousands of years because they've been guided by immortal deities. And now those deities are gone, and so too is the hope they've clinged to for generations.