Car lover, story reader, and inconsistent writer. He/him.
What do you like to do with that special someone? Play games? Go to the movies? My special someone loves to cuddle. Or more accurately, special somepony.
Something I made because I haven't tried a romance, and Fleetfoot one of my favorites. Spoiler: lots of snuggles and fuzzy moments. Cover art is currently something I found while surfing Derpibooru.
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This could be longer, but It was very well done. It was very rushed, but I honestly liked it quite a bit. It isn't often I find a story with fleetfoot that is well done.
5339820 Thanks! I know it was rushed, but the idea itself was quite short. Glad you liked it!
5340666 you are quite welcome. Fleetfoot doesn't have enough stories.
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Very good story, no matter how short it was. 10/10
This fic is like an inch-long candy cane: it's sweet, but it's much too short.
5342510 Yeah, the original idea itself was intended to just pass the 1,000 word minimum.
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You should expand on this. Maybe delve a little deeper into their relationship?
This story was just so adorable!
too bad this can't happen for real 
It's so adorable, I wish there was more.
My blood sugar went to hell... totally worth it!
5339820 Seconded. The cuteness...
Cuteness overload!! I hope you can either continue this or make a sequel
It was cute, but felt really rushed. I didn't feel any build-up in their relationship and the time skip leaves an empty space in my head. I also recommend taking out the parenthesis you have in your story because they can break immersion. Regardless, the idea is solid, but could use a little more meat on the bones.
For example, "I carried her to my bed, climbed in, and turned on my electric blanket to help ward off the cold, though it was hardly a substitute for my broken furnace." flows far more smoothly than "I carried her to my bed, climbed in, and turned on my electric blanket to help ward off the cold (my furnace was currently broken, unfortunately)."
The sentence is a little too long to be swallowed in one bite now, so it needs to be broken down or trimmed.
I would end up with "I tucked her into my bed before joining her, warming up my electric blanket to ward off the cold left by my broken furnace."
The difference between the two sentences above is the number of divisions in them. As a rule of thumb, I try to avoid more than one comma in a sentence - an easy indicator of a run-on. The first sentence can be broken down into "I carried her to my bed and climbed in." "I turned on my electric blanket to help ward off the cold." and "(My furnace was currently broken, unfortunately)."
The final version combines these ideas into a single unit. "I tucked her into my bed before joining her, warming up my electric blanket to ward off the cold left by my broken furnace."
Very beautiful story
Bro...I LOVE Fleetfoot! Nice short sweet story you made here!
TOO short.
Warily, I took a few steps in the direction the sound had come from, and I was able to confirm that it wasn't my imagination