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Sweetie watched the clock tick over to 12:01, and sighed. It was a very important day, her birthday, and nopony would know without her telling them. A part of Sweetie didn’t want to tell them. Closing her eyes, she hugged herself on the bed. Why was she here? Why did Starswirl refuse to share the exit?
Discord’s words blended together, and Sweetie knew that even if Discord was telling the truth, it changed nothing. She was trapped in this new reality, and there was no escape. Sweetie knew she could not get out under her own power, so she was at the mercy of the spell. But there was another thought that was dragging her down.
Apple Boom, Scootaloo, Diamond Tiara, Silver Spoon, four names that would avoid her unless she provided proof she was looping, or convinced them to ignore the feeling. Sweetie supposed when she got strong enough, she could simply cast the same spell Twilight used except on them. But what was the point, it didn’t change the fact of what she’d done.
Sweetie hugged herself tighter, trying to push the dark thoughts in her head aside. But they refused to leave, only growing stronger as she remembered the feeling of suffocating. Sweetie stood up on her bed, and sighed. Leaping down onto the floor, she felt something familiar stir in her heart.
Sweetie was tempted to ignore it, ignore her innermost desires. After all, there was no point to it, her voice would be erased in five days. Sweetie looked around her room, toward the empty bird cage, and made her decision. Letting her inner song take her, Sweetie approached the window, and opened it. Letting the notes weave through the air, the song strummed the air around her.
“I have changed, I have changed“ Sweetie closed her eyes.
“Just like you, just like you“ Sweetie opened them once more.
“For how long? For how long, must I wait? I know there's something wrong“ Sweetie leaned further out the window.
“Your concrete heart isn't beating. And you've tried to, make it come alive“ Sweetie stepped back.
“No shadows. Just red lights.“ Sweetie jumped.
“Now I'm here to rescue you.” Sweetie landed masterfully, taking care to roll as she came to a stop. Turning, she lit her horn, casting light on the area around her.
“Ooh I'm still alive, I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no.” Sweetie began to walk down the street, looking at the dark houses.
“Ooh I'm still alive, I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no.“ Sweetie closed her eyes.
“So silent, No violence.” Opening her eyes, she looked to the sky.
“But inside my head, So loud and clear.” Sweetie stopped walking, letting a tear roll down her cheek.
“You're screaming, you're screaming! Covered up with a smile I've learned to fear.” Sweetie lowered her head.
“Just sunshine, and blue sky.” Sweetie started walking again.
“Is this all we get for living here?“ Sweetie closed her eyes.
“Come fire, Come fire. Let it burn and love come racing through.” Sweetie opened her eyes, looking toward the ground as rain began to fall.
“Ooh I'm still alive. I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no -oh ooh.” Sweetie gritted her teeth, holding back her own tears.
“Ooh I'm still alive. I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no.” Sweetie stopped walking, and sat down on the wet ground.
“I've learned to lose. I've learned to win.” Sweetie slowly opened her eyes.
“I've turned my face against the wind.’ Sweetie looked up as the wind blew through her mane.
“I will move fast, I will move slow.” Sweetie stood up.
“Take me where I have to go.” Breaking into a run, houses blurred as Sweetie passed.
“Ooh I'm still alive. I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no.” Sweetie tripped, falling to the ground, sliding along it.
“Still alive.”
“Ooh I'm still alive. I'm still alive I cannot apologize, no.” Sweetie hugged herself in the rain.
“Still alive.” Sweetie sobbed.
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Man, I really enjoyed Mirror's Edge.
I enjoy reading this story, but when are we going to get some real plot progression? Slice of life stuff is nice every once and a while, but I need something more substantial, such as Sweetie meeting Starswirl or finding out new info about the spell. Otherwise, it's starting to get a little stale for me.
5608611 I knew I remembered this track from somewhere! Man, can't wait for the sequel.
Wow.
Sweetie's voice hit puberty. But ah'm confused... ain't she stuck in a time loop??
5608672 She is but that doesn't mean she's not affected by aging. It just means that she is reliving the same chain of events.
*clap* *clap* *clap* *sniffle*
Great job, man. Not very many stories include music, but what you just did made it seem so natural and touching to my soul.
Keep up the good work.
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I think I agree with you on that
It's a great story and I like the chapters and all ,but there isn't a lot of progression...
don't hate me it's just some constructive criticism
thankyou for introducing me to a new favorite song.
How Stoic. Through Cataclysm and Conflagration, take them as they may be.
I liked Mirror's Edge. Also, YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!
MiEd was one great unusual game. I wish they'd make more like that.
Also Sequel HYPE!
5608661 I think the sequel got lost in the ether. havent heard anything about it since E3 last year.
How long before she goes insane!?!?!?!?!
5608672 as 5608741 said, she is restarting to the same point. However, her body and none magic things she brings with her don't reset. It's not like the Twilight Hard Reset Fic, where everything resets including her. Sweetie Belle does age, and her magic grows, and whatever non-magical item with her still ages too.
Think of it as... Hard Reset is like a game. You push the Reset button, and everything resets in the game, but you outside of it still know what is going to happen next so can do all the events. But when you level up, your level gets reset back to what it was before when you reset the game.
This Fic tho, isn't like a game. It's more of, something is locking Sweetie in place. When she is in a room, Everything in the room that is her and non-magical get 'saved', picked up out of the timeline, and pops back into the start of the 'loop'. Think of it as a Youtube video, and the video in this chapter is a good example. The '5 day loop' is the progress bar, starting from 0:0:0 to 5:0:0 (Days:Hours:minutes), Sweetie, is the little circle that you click and drag to view other parts of the video, I can't remember what that's called. Anyways, think of it as someone having the 'video' on repeat and playing. 'Sweetie' would move left to right constantly for the 5 days before instantly appearing back at the start again and repeating. The video(5 days) resets when she gets to the end... but 'Sweetie' doesn't reset. She gets moved back to the beginning, but she herself isn't changed, just her position in the 'video'. She keeps moving forward (to the right) none stop. When she dies, the video is 'stopped' and then 'played again' from the beginning, but Sweetie still hasn't 'reset'. She keeps moving forward.
I am not good at explaining. So if people end up understanding what I just said... could you explain it more neatly than I did for those that don't get it?
On a monday?
SOMETHING IN THE LOOP CHANGED!!!
5608621
I feel the same, the slice of life stuff is good, but I feel that it should maybe be spaced out with some more plot between them.
Meh, I'm not a huge fan of songs in fics. Unless I read it just right it just doesn't work.
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Indeed.
--Sollace
I must admit, this is a great chapter. I'm enjoying how you're spacing things out with some chapters being fun, others meaningful *Moreso than others*, some plot development, and some that just follow her on her day to day activities. I'm certainly looking forward to tomorrows update.
5609895 or Sweetie used the water spell to seed the clouds and make it rain.
Wow!!!! That was a great song!!!!!!!! Good job!!!!!!!! My only complaint is that it didn't really sound like Sweetie Belle singing it.
5612986 that'scause it isn't. it is a random song off google. but still nice song... ish. she can't die, can't get out of the loop. Oh! That reminded me. Ever seen Groundhog Day? Looping movie! LOVE IT! SO FUNNY! REMINDED ME OF THIS STORY!
Omg
please
it says Sweetie like 500 times in this chapter of 600-somthing words
please
Oh, COME ON!
Last chapter was just a poem and this one is just a song with YouTube video embedded into it. That's bad.
You can have character sing something but do not make it an entire chapter, same with poem.
Now, I admit I could be a lil bit biased to poems since every second Language A lesson had the teacher assign us analyzing random poems for double grade each time and never explaining it so we can understand how to do it, making me hate poems, but still
Oooh, there just might have been a change~
Someone REALLY needs to make a video of this! I can't as I can't draw to save my life.
Nice use of the song.....also rain?
Super dug this chapter. Loved the imagery. Can't animate, but would love to make an animatic out of this if I can find the time. (btw: Pitching this song up in Audacity by two semi-tones actually doesn't work too bad with Sweetie's canon voice.)
5653620 I am going to do that when I have time.
...holy fuck this is starting to get depressing! But that's what happens when you're in this situation am I right?
Thanks for reminding me that I still have to play Mirror's Edge! Loved imagining Sweetie singing it too.
It's supposed to be the same week over and over right, so how could it be her birthday? For it to be her birthday, the dates would have to keep changing with each loop, but they don't.
6038354 i think she is still ageing within the loop, or shes keeping a mental count of the days.
Do you think rarity heard her, I didn't hear her calling for school XD
XD everyone is trying to math out this story, it's not possible
Ahhhhhhhhh!the fells!they burn!
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6038354
she is still aging, and twilight gave her a calendar spell attuned to her so she knows the what the exact date is in real time
Is this where we start delving into the inevitable? I hope so, this is a large part of why I joined the story. Just to see the slow dive into insanity. And slow it has been.
I have to say, I have been trying to use logic to figure this story out, but it's just not working. I'm stopping before I get too frustrated.
On the other hand, minus logical story progression and other minor errors, this story is very well-written. I really am enjoying it.
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I am a bit picker at heart, I can't watch a magic show without trying to point out the possibilities of tricks (or get a headache in the process) watching movies with me sucks sometimes, and reading I pick apart plot holes like no tomorrow.
I e learned to comment less often, but this story gives me a painful headache sometimes. And yet I still read it.
Also, the fact there was no towel references, large insect creatures in volcano lairs, learning to fly the 'right' way, or even an intelligent entree telling you the best parts of itself this loop saddens me.
I've noticed the video on this chapter is no longer available. If anyone wishes, the song is 'Still Alive'
Here's the lost video of this chapter:
https://web.archive.org/web/20220611094258/https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PnZPBUryDXA
And the song in YouTube (thanks, Pensive, but your linked video has also been deleted🙁):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gt0UqLw1tlg&ab_channel=DaniNight