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Noice.
the letter could have been written more clearly. it doesnt have a good sense of flow.
7830485 yeah I thought of that it could've used more of a flow but I just didn't know At the time how to make it flow more.
7830461 thank you
The letter has way too many commas. Also, you might want to consider using the quotation function to make it more clear as to what parts are the letter, like so:
7830901 hrm thanks I'll have to use that next time something like this happen, thanks
7830585
i think if you placed it in italics and formatted it as a letter would help it read easier. also a little more clarity on certain parts to help with the explanations of events.
pokes at the heart abit
stayclassy
Holy crud someone was starving for commas this chapter.
So they revel in the past a bit. That's nice, but things change you know.
We wonder if Moon might possibly have transferred to him somehow? Unless that was an echo of memory...
Keep going! ;)
All of the commas!
Quite nice, still a lot of errors, but the story makes up for it. Nice to see Blueballs owning up to his misdeeds.
I am vary impressed with the new team and I can say it has improved the this chapter.
yes I still see a few small errors but they are overlooked easily.
the back story on Luna and Blue Blood vary good and defiantly a story builder for what is coming hint every one will be shocked.
Wow
Amazing chapter you brilliant son of a bitch
8076363 sorry that this chapter didn't make you happy sir,
6767867
Well I haven't actually read it yet, I'm just assuming because it's rated M and has a gore tag.
8271335
im thinking of taking that out soon because of the fact that really hasn't happened yet.
I hope the story continues, I just read the entire story again.
8295848
it is Im just taking a small break on it as I work on my newest one, this one I hit a small snag on writing wise. so I wanna take a break to think things through and to find a editor for it
This story dead?
8616192
wouldn't say dea, just with the other story im working on, this oen is slightly on the back burners
Please we need more :D
ok it is time to start giving the author total shit about canceling this grate story.
9056636
I will be restarting it after I finished S.I.E
9056795
i remember we talked i just felt like rattling your chain young pup.
9056795
so when will you be finishing S.I.E?