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You must have missed Meeester to get that cover art through
5006419
Shush, you
best F/F couple ever, next to Lyra and Bon Bon
5006419 Agreed. Must have missed moderation.
5006861
no
lyra is only best with me you little shit
5007015
Whoa, easy there. Please guys, I really like it when you start discussing about things. Only, two conditions: one: stay reasonable and two: please, no foul language.
C'mon, can't be that hard, can it?
How did you get away with that cover art?
EDIT: I guess the same way there's a Bad Dragon ad on here...
5006419 Simple, he uploaded the pic seconds after moderation.
5007110
u fukin wot m8 il shrek ur face off
5007376 Thank god that's not just me!
5007392 actually, I uploaded the image with the story. I guess I just got lucky ^^"
5007405
Those types of ads only pop up if you looked up related search terms, such as 'Bad dragon' or 'Dragon Dildo'
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5007544 Hmm. That's rather odd. That's not the sort of thing I search for. Then again, I do occasionally get adds for satanic worship and Nazi rallies, but that may be to do with my obsession over ww2. Maybe my excessive searching of pony material has lead to this?
5007544 How about "e621" or "Rule 34.Paheal"?
I'd be hesitant to post this comment, but given what story we're on, there's probably no such thing as TMI.
EDIT: Or, maybe FIMFiction itself counts? Given what 5007555 said.
5007015 what gives you the right to say that to me, I didn't do anything to you
5007570
I don't know, the ads get really fucking specific to what you search. Like, NSA specific.
> Looks at cover art.
i.imgur.com/ifQfGGV.png
5006441
5007795
5006441
#rekt
5007795
Saw that coming a mile away.
5007795
I have devised a solution, and masked the image.
i60.tinypic.com/xleazt.png
5007841
Omg, my sides!!
5007723
youre just jeally of my super $wagg because i am the only man human who can be with Lyras
you cannot take the heat the only eggs you lay are your shit because that is all your body can find in your skull
5009511 What is wrong with you
I don't even get what you are saying about Lyra and other stuff, you know it shouldn't even matter about what anyone says about Lyra since everyone, even you, should know that she isn't real and never will be.
So let's just stop this pointless argument already
5007795
Hey, it was worth a try
Sorry, will try to find more adequate images from now on
5009511 dude. what the fuck is your problem
5007394
The pretty face is all I have 
No, please spare me
5007765
Better now?
5009821
she is real you fucking fool she exists in my headcanon and my heaadcanon is theo onlys haedcanon that is right, your headcanon is wrong and you know it
i fap to her so hrad every night before bed, and thank her for the dopamine that she gives me. i love her more than i love justin beiber
the best gamer, more like the worst gamer. hohhohohohhohoho
5010415
haha you wish you had my level of autism, you dont just get autism like me you have to achieve it and stuudy for it in collages. i am certified with autism thou are just a mere child
5011998 Can we please stop this argument already, it's not getting any of us anywhere so there's no point, by the way all of us have different headcannons so none of them are right or wrong they're just ours, always have been and always will be
there's just no point in continuing this
5012168
i rate your autism 83/100 because no perfect grammar
i bet you want a gay boyfriend, i'd love to be your homosexual boyfriend :33333
5012209 You realize I do have autism and I don't want to keep fighting
I don't want to argue with you anymore, there's no reason why
5011998 I...I...I have no answers but this. my advice is this. you need to go see a fucking doctor. cause you got some serious mental problems.
5011998 /oh your something alright. your one retarded motherfucker
It's a rolling pin. Either my english is bad or AJ seems to have bought a vibrator in rolling-pin shape because ...ehrm, rolling pins ( oh woe the repeats) don't throb as far as I know... (pre-empitive sentence: no, I do not know how a rolling pin feels like in one's...private lady parts)
Also, in regards to lighterlight: obvious troll is obvious, no need to take the bait people...
(P.S. good story, have an upvote)
5010465
i.imgur.com/bKEuTlA.png
5012568 I don't have any experience either (maybe because I'm male, but even then I'm not too keen on having a wooden stick up my butt), what I was trying to let the reader feel is, with the near climax, the rolling pin feels like it's throbbing. Did that help a little?
5013308 Aww, don't you fret, have a little Derpy! Everyone loves Depy
5015473 Yes, it did help. I'm sorry if I appeared like some kind of nitpick, but it are those kind of lines that completely break the flow for me, and keep haunting my mind throughout the (although small) rest of the story...
Danke.
Not a bad story at all.
There were, however quite a few times I felt I had to wade my way through oddly, or poorly formed sentences. Though the vocabulary used is colorful, some words seem to be placed in a slightly 'off' manner.
A solid editing would turn this piece from decent, to great.
Well done. Keep it up.
~(OvO)~
5016886 Gerne
I'm rather thankful that you pointed it out. This way, I know where I can lay my focus on. If you ever get called a nitpick for this by another author, than he or she is missing on a great opportunity to improve their writing. As the saying goes: the devil is in the detail.
5018142 I'm working on it as hard as I can. You see, I've been speaking English fluently for about two years now. I'm working together with one of my teachers and I hope to improve to a level that stands above average. I'll see what I can do, and thank you for the positive feedback.
5006441 What was the original cover art? Can you PM it to me?