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Kinetic Heat


Sapere aude!

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It's a stultifying scheme of game. Click on the big cookie on the left border of the screen as many times as you can. ''Bake'' cookies. Have ''fun''. After the Princess herself entrusts Twilight with going along the hype, Twilight goes on about why this game is the new virus that has inflicted the internet.

How many cookies can she bake before she breaks down?

For those of you who never played, here's the link Cookies

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It's spreading like a disease! :pinkiegasp:

''Goodness gracious, why me?'' Spike angled his leg and crossed his arms behind his back. ''So, what are you gonna do?'' Twilight had already trotted over to the desk where her PC was set up. ''What do you think I'm going to do? The princess wants me to play, so I'll play and report to her every single day.'' Spike nodded reluctantly and went off; probably over to Rarity, but Twilight didn't really care.

Never have multiple characters speak in the same paragraph.

People may upvote this for the humor, but this is a poorly written story.

Hmmm, ah whatever, what wrong can a few clicks be?'

How wrong. Not what wrong.

please massage me, I am desperate.

Wow, that eager to relieve stress, huh?

Rainbow had ensured her that chrome would have been the better option, but the cute design had persuaded her in the end.

1. *Assured
2. Chrome is the better option.
3. Why would Twilight make such an illogical and unpractical decision to use an inferior browser because the icon looked better? That's a Rarity or Pinkie thing.

whats funny is that I'm playing cookie clicker while I was reading this

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Applied the changes you suggested, thank you :twilightsmile:

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Never have multiple characters speak in the same paragraph.

Why not?

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this is a poorly written story.

Without further information why you think so, I have to assume you are a troll, who just wants to heighten himself by stomping on others' work.

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Wow, that eager to relieve stress, huh?

If only you knew....

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2. Chrome is the better option.

If you say so.

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3. Why would Twilight make such an illogical and unpractical decision to use an inferior browser because the icon looked better? That's a Rarity or Pinkie thing.

You are right about Rarity and Pinkie, but seeing that Chrome and Firefox are on the same level concerning quality matters (MY opinion), and because I wrote this, and the show gives us no clue as to what Twilight prefers in matter of internet browsers, I gave Twilight the same view on things.

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Why not have multiple characters speak in the same paragraph?
1. English writing rules.
2. The reader can become confused as to who is speaking when multiple characters speak in one paragraph. Starting a new one shows the speaker has changed.
3. It prevents text walls.

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I've been only taught the German writing rules so far :twilightblush:
Honestly, I never got confused by something like that, and I have to admit, I prefer textwalls over small rips of text. It's just so much more appealing when there is this long text and development in it, rather than one sentence paragraphs that look like a cluster of rags. But fine, can't break all the rules, I guess...

Ehehehehemmmm..........
njaaaa ich habs mir nochmal durchgelesen (hauptsächlich, weil ich das Cookie spiel nochmal spielen wollte ^^'') und hab mich dazu entschieden dir doch noch ein Review zu schreiben.............
UND anscheinend hat das ganze nicht nur positive Bewertungen bekomen.
Mehehehempffff...... nein.Ich finde diese Story ist mal ne Abwechslung zu deinen..ähmmm..*Hust* amateurPornos *Hust* Geschichten.... und ist so sinnfrei, dass es schon fast wieder Sinn macht.
dieser S.A. hat sich anscheinend nur angemeldet, um dich niedermachen zu können XD...
nein las dich nicht niedermachen und mach mit deiner springtime of youth noch ne Sinnfreiere und grammatikalisch korrektere story.
so ich hör jetzt mit der verbalen Belästigung auf.
Tschüss!

At the begining, When twilight clicked her first cookie, My reaction was this...

S###. Welp, she done f###ed up.

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