Rainbow Dash is retrieved from the ruins of her cloud house after Applejack accidentally and mysteriously destroys it. How she survived, as well as how the house was destroyed, remains unclear. Sorting through the facts and attempting to mend the friendship between Rainbow and Applejack, Twilight and her other friends learn that there's possibly more to the argument than the simple matter of property destruction.
A semi-comedic Appledash, rated teen for sex themes and very little else.
Chapters (1)
Do you know who I am? I'm the mare who's gonna burn your house down! With the apples!
4621862 I actually had to stop myself from re-transcribing the whole rant and sticking in a weirdly placed monologue about combustible apples. Not entirely sure it was the right choice, but there's probably such a thing as too shameless a reference
All I have to say.
I liked it. And favorited it and will feature it on a blog I work for.
4622732 Neat. Thanks for the heads up, the comment, and the favourite.
Not necessarily in that order.
More detail about the combustible apples might've helped, actually, it feels a little confusing at the moment XD
But fun, and silly. I like!
http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=g8ufRnf2Exc
This is all I have to say...show
4626508 Cheers, and I'll bear that in mind next time I include weaponized fruit in a story.
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Well, to go into more detail: this story felt more about the explosion/the event, and how it happened - and we never get an answer. The AppleDash part feels tacked on - we see that it's a thing near the end, but it doesn't quite get covered for more than a line or two. So while the humor carries it along just fine, it does feel like it falls a little flat.
If that makes any sense ^^;
4626779 No, I get that. Among the many things I still try to learn is to integrate the small elements of clumsy you seemed to have picked up on. I try to minimize them, but, well, I'm still pretty new at this
. I guess I miss stuff, so it helps to have them pointed out, Hopefully stuff'll become more seamless as I get practice.
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Practice makes perfect. I still feel, despite how many people like it, that my first fic here feels weak compared to the others XD
4626820 You'd have to ask a way smarter guy than me, but i guess sometimes there's an element of unpredictability in a flawed fic, not to mention it feels more exiting writing for the first time, so perhaps that enthusiasm translates through. Or maybe I'm just reading too much into that. I do that sometimes too.
So ... AJ really does have applebombs?
Anywho a very interesting idea for a story and a cute funny ending. A little rushed but not so much that it detracts from the story. Also the characters felt true to themselves which I liked.
Nice job
OMG Tank!!!!!
5006711 ...ah. Yes. Tank. I did forget about him. He was sent to a farm after the house was destroyed. He's very happy there.
5006904 WHAT?!?!!?
5007089 If it makes you feel better, consider that a sleeping tank would have retracted into his shell, allowing for a considerable degree of protection. I'm sure that, being slow, he's simply plodding back home, quite safe.
Unless you'd rather believe the previous version. I'd rather leave it up to the reader to decide, I think. I'm lazy that way...
Combustible Apple' in which Applejack destroys cloudhoues? what kind title is dat
5419078 The kind that presents story content, demands explanation, and attracts attention. Also, I needed a portal reference.
There must be more portal references.
Portal is best pony.
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Yeah how exactly do you blow up q house.