Love is Sedimentary

Maud Pie walks down a lonely river with her pebble. Then she meets someone that will change her life forever.

Please do not take this seriously.

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Yildun

Yildun #1 · May 30th, 2014 · 1 · ·

It would have been funnier if it were the real Tom. Also, if there was more mystery about whether or not what Maud was experiencing was real or all in her mind. I smiled, don't get me wrong, and the overall premise was good, but I felt it could have been better with more ambiguity and less outright absurdity.

The punchline was great, for how everything was presented, but I'm still at odds with the general approach.

The Grey Pegasus

The Grey Pegasus #2 · May 30th, 2014 · · ·

... I'm going to stone you to death.

Scootareader

Scootareader #3 · May 30th, 2014 · 1 · ·

>Maud Pie
>rocks
>sex tag
Hoo boy.

4472330
I didn't even realize you still read things.

Yildun

Yildun #4 · May 30th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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I know, right? I'm not sure why I read this immediately, instead of pushing it into my read later pile. I have a surprising number of Favorites to catch up on too. My life choices are often terrible.

But I regret nothing! This was worth reading and commenting on. Especially since I got to talk to you.

Scootareader

Scootareader #5 · May 30th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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Oh Yildun-chan~
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Flying Fantasy Horse

Flying Fantasy Horse #6 · May 30th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4472330

I understand what you mean, but this story was meant to be completely absurd. I agree it would be funnier and a lot more grim, but I think at it's current state, it is pretty good on it's own.

kochamara